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The topic development submission has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history for editing changes made whilst reviewing this chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date.
Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
If adding the second or subsequent link to a page (or a talk/discussion page), create a direct link like / Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions.
Latest comment: 11 months ago1 comment1 person in discussion
This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Chapter marks will be available via UCLearn along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.
Overall, the quality of written expression is basic
Some sentences are overly long. Strive for the simplest expression. Consider splitting longer sentences into two shorter sentences.
Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in parentheses at the end of the sentence.
Proofreading
More proofreading is needed (e.g., fix punctuation and typographical errors) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard
Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159)
Express numbers < 10 using words (e.g., two) and >= 10 and over using numerals (e.g., 99)
Figures
Figures are briefly captioned
Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1)
References are not in full APA style. For example:
Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles
No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
Basic use of image(s)
No use of table(s)
Good use of feature box(es)
Minimal use of case studies or examples
Minimal use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s)
The quiz questions could be improved by being more focused on the key points and/or take-home messages
The quiz questions could be more effective as learning prompts by being embedded as single questions within each corresponding section rather than as a set of questions at the end
Very good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section
Basic use of external links in the "External links" section
Customise links to be more specific to novelty-variety
Latest comment: 11 months ago1 comment1 person in discussion
The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.
This presentation could be improved by displaying and narrating a slide with the same title and sub-title as the book chapter to help the viewer understand the purpose of the presentation
Create an engaging introduction to hook audience interest
Establish a context for the presentation (e.g., by using an example or explaining why it is important), to help the viewer understand
Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation.
The audio is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to listen to
The audio is easy to follow
The audio is hard to follow because so much content is presented so quickly
The presentation makes effective/very good/good/reasonably good/basic use of narrated audio
Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement
The narration is well practiced
Audio recording quality was excellent
The narrated content is well matched to the target topic (see content)
The video title does not match the chapter title and sub-title — this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation and be more consistent
A written description of the presentation is provided