Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Novelty-variety as a psychological need

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Topic development feedback[edit source]

The topic development submission has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history for editing changes made whilst reviewing this chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date.

Title[edit source]

  1. The title is correctly worded and formatted
  2. The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted

Headings[edit source]

  1. See earlier comment about Heading casing
  2. Basic, 1-level heading structure – would benefit from further development, perhaps using a 2-level structure
  3. Adopt closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions (missing from Overview), and top-level headings
  4. Reword: Novelty-Variety: A case for acknowledgment to be more descriptive
  5. Quiz doesn't need a separate heading; instead embed quiz questions within relevant sections

Overview[edit source]

  1. Move the scenario or case study to the start of this section and add an image to help catch reader interest
  2. A brief, evocative description of the problem/topic is provided. Consider connecting needs to motivation.
  3. Present focus questions in a feature box at the end of this section

Key points[edit source]

  1. Promising development of key points for each section, with relevant citations
  2. Promising balance of theory and research. Ideally, synthesise and provide examples.
  3. Conclusion (the most important section):
    1. Well developed
    2. What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?)

Figure[edit source]

  1. Excellent - A relevant figure is presented, captioned, and cited

Learning feature[edit source]

  1. Excellent use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters
  2. Promising use of example(s)/case study(ies)
  3. Promising use of quiz question(s) - but customise to topic/take-away messages, remove heading, and embed in the most relevant section(s)
  4. Focus the quiz question(s) on the take-home messages for each focus question
  5. Also consider using one or more tables to summarise key information

References[edit source]

  1. Very good
  2. For APA referencing style, check and correct:
    1. capitalisation

Resources[edit source]

  1. See also
  2. OK - ideally, be more selective about only the most relevant links to topic
    1. Use internal link style - see Tutorial 02
    2. Include source in brackets after link; "(Book chapter, year)" after links to other motivation and emotion book chapters on Wikiversity
  3. External links
    1. These links aren't specific enough - need to be more directly related to the topic
    2. OK
    3. Include source in brackets after link

User page[edit source]

  1. Good
  2. Description about self provided
  3. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
  4. Link provided to book chapter

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. Three different types of contributions
  2. Indirect or broken link(s) to evidence
  3. If adding the second or subsequent link to a page (or a talk/discussion page), create a direct link like / Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:04, 27 September 2023 (UTC)Reply

Book chapter review and feedback[edit source]

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Chapter marks will be available via UCLearn along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter
  2. Well under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand
  3. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits

Overview[edit source]

  1. Underdeveloped
  2. Engage reader interest by presenting a case study or scenario with an image in a feature box
  3. Briefly explains the problem or phenomenon
  4. Add focus questions in a feature box to help guide the reader and structure the chapter

Theory[edit source]

  1. A basic range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained
  2. Build more strongly on other related chapters and/or Wikipedia articles(e.g., by embedding links to other chapters)
  3. Basic depth is provided about relevant theory(ies)
  4. Use tables, figures, and/or lists are to help convey key theoretical information
  5. Insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
  6. Insufficient use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts

Research[edit source]

  1. Insufficient review of relevant research
  2. More detail about key studies would be ideal
  3. Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area? Greater emphasis on effect sizes could be helpful.
  4. Insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
  5. Insufficient critical thinking about relevant research is evident
  6. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by:
    1. describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies
    2. discussing the direction of relationships
    3. considering the strength of relationships
    4. acknowledging limitations
    5. pointing out critiques/counterarguments
    6. suggesting specific directions for future research
  7. Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)

Integration[edit source]

  1. Basic integration between theory and research
  2. The chapter places more emphasis on theory than on research

Conclusion[edit source]

  1. Insufficient as a cohesive summary of the best available psychological theory and research about the topic
  2. Remind the reader about the importance of the problem or phenomenon of interest
  3. Summarise key points
  4. Add practical, take-home message(s)

Style[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is basic
    2. Some sentences are overly long. Strive for the simplest expression. Consider splitting longer sentences into two shorter sentences.
    3. Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in parentheses at the end of the sentence.
  2. Proofreading
    1. More proofreading is needed (e.g., fix punctuation and typographical errors) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard
    2. Remove unnecessary capitalisation
  3. APA style
    1. Use serial commas[1]. See explanatory video (1 min)
    2. Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159)
    3. Express numbers < 10 using words (e.g., two) and >= 10 and over using numerals (e.g., 99)
    4. Figures
      1. Figures are briefly captioned
      2. Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1)
    5. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Check and correct use of capitalisation[2]

Learning features[edit source]

  1. Excellent use of learning features
  2. Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles
  3. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
  4. Basic use of image(s)
  5. No use of table(s)
  6. Good use of feature box(es)
  7. Minimal use of case studies or examples
  8. Minimal use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s)
  9. The quiz questions could be improved by being more focused on the key points and/or take-home messages
  10. The quiz questions could be more effective as learning prompts by being embedded as single questions within each corresponding section rather than as a set of questions at the end
  11. Very good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section
  12. Basic use of external links in the "External links" section
    1. Customise links to be more specific to novelty-variety
    2. Include sources in parentheses

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. ~4 logged, useful, minor/moderate/major social contributions with direct links to evidence
  2. ~2 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess
  3. Use a numbered list per Tutorial 02

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:46, 4 November 2023 (UTC)Reply

Multimedia presentation feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a reasonably good presentation
  2. The presentation is over the maximum time limit — content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes

Overview[edit source]

  1. This presentation could be improved by displaying and narrating a slide with the same title and sub-title as the book chapter to help the viewer understand the purpose of the presentation
  2. Create an engaging introduction to hook audience interest
  3. Establish a context for the presentation (e.g., by using an example or explaining why it is important), to help the viewer understand
  4. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation.

Content[edit source]

  1. Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section
  2. The presentation addresses the topic
  3. The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory
  4. The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological research
  5. The presentation includes citations to support claims
  6. The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies

Conclusion[edit source]

  1. A Conclusion slide is presented with very good take-home message(s)
  2. The Conclusion only partly fitted within the time limit

Audio[edit source]

  1. The audio is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to listen to
  2. The audio is easy to follow
  3. The audio is hard to follow because so much content is presented so quickly
  4. The presentation makes effective/very good/good/reasonably good/basic use of narrated audio
  5. Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
  6. Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement
  7. The narration is well practiced
  8. Audio recording quality was excellent
  9. The narrated content is well matched to the target topic (see content)

Video[edit source]

  1. Overall, visual display quality is reasonably good
  2. The presentation makes good use of text and image based slides
  3. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read
  4. Consider using a sans-serif typeface to make the text easier to read
  5. The visual communication is supplemented in a basic way by images
  6. Also consider using diagrams
  7. The presentation is well produced using simple tools
  8. The visual content is well matched to the target topic (see content)

Meta-data[edit source]

  1. The video title does not match the chapter title and sub-title — this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation and be more consistent
  2. A written description of the presentation is provided
  3. Links to and from the book chapter are provided

Licensing[edit source]

  1. Image sources and their copyright status are not provided
  2. A copyright license for the presentation is provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:28, 9 November 2023 (UTC)Reply