Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Motivational technologies

Initial suggestions

@U3196624: Thanks for tackling this topic. Some initial suggestions:

• Check out other related chapters and see how you can build on, link to, and integrate with that work:
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Motivation
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Technology
• What psychological theory(ies) can help to understand? What is the main research in this area?

Let me know if I can do anything else as you go along. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:32, 12 August 2023 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted Headings See earlier comment about Heading casing Basic, 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development Adopt closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings The Overview and Conclusion should not have sub-headings Quiz doesn't need a separate heading; instead embed quiz questions within relevant sections Overview Add a scenario or case study into a feature box (with an image) at the start of this section to help catch reader interest Overly detailed - aim for 180-300 words. Provide a brief, evocative description of the problem/topic is provided. Shift detail into subsequent sections. Remove general focus questions that aren't directly aligned to the topic (e.g, what is EM/IM?). Expand the focus questions directly related to the sub-title question. Key points Basic development of key points for some sections, with some relevant citations For sections which include sub-sections include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal wiki links to relevant book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content of this on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research, with practical examples Conclusion (the most important section): Under developed What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?) Figure A figure is presented and captioned Explain how the figure relates to motivation Cite each figure at least once in the main text Learning feature Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Promising use of example(s)/case study(ies) Promising use of quiz question(s) References 2 out of 6 references For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation doi formatting make doi hyperlinks active (i.e., clickable) page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Resources See also Use sentence casing Rename links so that they are more user friendly (see Tutorial 02) Also link to related book chapters External links Very good Use sentence casing User page Excellent – used effectively Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution One out of three different types of contributions with direct link(s) to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:47, 26 September 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent presentation Overview This presentation could be improved by displaying and narrating a slide with the same title and sub-title as the book chapter to help the viewer understand the purpose of the presentation Very engaging introduction to hook audience interest A context for the presentation is clearly established through an example Focus questions and/or an outline of topics are presented Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological research Some citations are included to support claims Consider including more key citations to support claims The presentation makes excellent/ use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with excellent take-home message(s) Audio The audio is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to listen to The presentation makes effective/ use of narrated audio Audio communication is well paced Excellent intonation enhances listener interest and engagement The narration is well practiced and/or performed Audio recording quality was excellent The narrated content is well matched to the target topic (see content) Video Overall, visual display quality is excellent The presentation makes creative use of webcam, stock video, text, and images The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams The presentation is very well produced The visual content is well matched to the target topic (see content) Meta-data The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation Links to and from the book chapter are provided Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are communicated A copyright license for the presentation is provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:48, 14 November 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a very good chapter. It makes very good use of psychological theory and research to address a real-world phenomenon or problem. Very good use of academic, peer-reviewed citations to support claims Well under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand For additional feedback, see the following comments and https://en.wikiversity.org/w/index.php?title=Motivation_and_emotion%2FBook%2F2023%2FMotivational_technologies&diff=2581512&oldid=2574952[ these copyedits] Overview Well developed Engages reader interest by presenting a case study or scenario in a feature box with a relevant image Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon Clear focus questions Theory A very good range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Perhaps also consider uses and gratifications theory? Builds effectively on related Wikipedia articles Build more strongly on related chapters and/or Wikipedia articles (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Very good depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Use tables, figures, and/or lists are to help convey key theoretical information Key citations are well used Excellent use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Very good review of relevant research Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area? Very good critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Most claims are referenced Integration Excellent integration between theory and research Conclusion Weak summary and conclusion Remind the reader about the importance of the problem or phenomenon of interest Some key points are well summarised Address the focus questions Add practical, take-home message(s) Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is very good Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections Include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see tags) Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags) Spelling Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour) APA style Use sentence casing for the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc. Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159) Use serial commas[2]. Video (1 min) Direct quotes need page numbers – even better, write in your own words Figures Figures are very well captioned Citations use correct APA style References use a mixture of wiki style and APA style. Choose and adopt one style throughout. Learning features Excellent use of learning features Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Excellent use of image(s) No use of table(s) Excellent use of feature box(es) Excellent use of case studies or examples Excellent use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) Very good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Use sentence casing Use alphabetical order Good use of external links in the "External links" section Use sentence casing Use alphabetical order Move peer-reviewed articles into references and cite Social contribution ~2 logged, useful social contributions with direct links to evidence Note that the X post didn't use the correct hashtag so was missed from the X conversation stream

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:34, 17 November 2023 (UTC)