Hi Maryam, what an interesting topic you've chosen! I can see you've listed a few ideas you're going to explore for your chapter and I thought of possibly one more you could explore:
How imagery-based mindfulness techniques can foster emotional regulation?
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Promising 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development by expanding the structure
Remove definitions section and just incorporating definitions into the Overview or other sections; or rename this section so that is more substative than definitions
Headings should now reflect focus on "mental imagery"
Consider adopting closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings
Quiz doesn't need separate heading; just embed questions in their relevant sections
Remove author name
Remove (CBT)
Use open-ended question for "6 Is mental imagery beneficial for emotion regulation?" - or drop section (could be merged with previous section)
Put opening two paragraphs into a feature box at the start of the Overview; consider also including an image in the box, to help attract reader interest
Use 3rd person perspective except in scenarios/feature boxes
Promising development of key points for each section, with relevant citations
Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal wiki links to relevant book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content of this on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title.
Avoid being overly clinically-focused, although clinical examples can be useful. Make sure the messaging if for a general audience.
For sections which include sub-sections include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings
Promising balance of theory and research
Conclusion (the most important section):
Underway
What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?)
Description about self provided – consider expanding
Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
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Overall, this is a reasonably good chapter. It makes reasonably good use of psychological theory and research to help address a real-world phenomenon or problem.
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A reasonably good range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained
Overly heavy reliance on Cabanac (2002) as a source
The chapter takes a strongly cognitive perspective, with some neurological theory; perhaps also consider other perspectives
A notable chunk of the theoretical content seems to be only tangentially related to mental imagery and emotion - or at least, place stronger emphasis on the mental imagery aspects e.g., for
cognitive reappraisal theory
schema therapy
Overall, probably too much emphasis on clinical/therapeutic/psychopathology because the sub-title question is more focused on positive aspects: "How can mental imagery be used to regulate emotions?". For example, what about mental imagery and optimal emotion for elite performance?
Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters)
Reasonably good depth is provided about relevant theory(ies)
No use of tables and/or lists are to help clearly convey key theoretical information
Consider using more examples to illustrate theoretical concepts
Overall, the quality of written expression is good
Some paragraphs are overly long. Communicate one key idea per paragraph in three to five sentences.
Layout
Include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see [Provide more detail] tags)
Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159)
Direct quotes need page numbers – even better, write in your own words
Figures
Figures are well captioned
Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text
Refer to each Figure using APA style (e.g., see Figure 1)
Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example:
If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either:
in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or
in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020)
References are not in full APA style. For example:
Excellent/Very good/Good/Basic/Insufficient use of learning features
Basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example.
No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
Very good use of image(s)
No use of table(s)
Good use of feature box(es)
Basic use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s)
The quiz questions could be improved by being more focused on the mental imagery and emotion key points and/or take-home messages
Basic use of case studies or examples
Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section
Also include links to related Wikipedia articles
Basic use of external links in the "External links" section
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The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation
A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.
A link to the book chapter is not provided
A link from the book chapter is provided
The presentation is incorrectly categorised as being for kids. This introduces limitations, such as being unable to add the presentation to a playlist. More info.