Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Long-term injury in high performance field athletes and emotion

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You have done a really great job, this topic seems really interesting! I really like the way you have set it out - it flows really nicely and is quite easy to read with the indentations at each paragraph. Your images are also very interactive and engaging. Amazing work! --U3213910 (discuss • contribs) 09:29, 20 August 2023 (UTC)

Initial suggestions

@U3216619: Thanks for tackling this topic. Some initial suggestions:

• Check out other related chapters and see how you can build on, link to, and integrate with that work:
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Emotion
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Rehabilitation
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Sport
• What psychological theory(ies) can help to understand? What is the main research in this area?

Let me know if I can do anything else as you go along. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:38, 12 August 2023 (UTC)

Suggested reading

Amazing work! This is such an interesting topic, I love reading about this topic in psychology! I read a journal that goes over depression and anxiety through the perspective of sport psychology and injuries. I think it would be super helpful - Self-Reported Symptoms of Depression and Anxiety After ACL Injury: A Systematic Review doi: 10.1177/23259671211066493 - Grace U3210285 (discuss • contribs) 12:36, 24 August 2023 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:34, 23 September 2023 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The wording and/or capitalisation of the sub-title is incorrect. Be consistent with the book table of contents. Remove author name – authorship is as per the page's editing history Headings See earlier comment about Heading casing Promising 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development Aim for 3 to 6 top-level headings between the Overview and Conclusion, with up to a similar number of sub-headings for large sections Consider adopting closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings Consider how to integrate theory and research, along with examples Be selective about the theories Avoid having sections with only 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings Overview Add a scenario in a feature box at the start to help catch reader interest (could be the case study in the next section) Brief, evocative description of the problem/topic provided Open-ended focus questions are usually better than closed-ended (e.g., yes/no) questions Revise and refine focus questions; closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings is recommended Key points Promising development of key points for each section Remove use of blockquotes There is a notable lack of sufficient citation Promising balance of theory and research Conclusion (the most important section): Well underway What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?) Figure A figure is presented, captioned, and cited Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text Figure(s) are cited at least once in the main text - figure -> Figure (capitalisation) Learning feature Two uses of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Consider including quiz question(s), table(s) etc. References Very good Move non-peer reviewed sources into External links For APA referencing style, check and correct: make doi hyperlinks active (i.e., clickable) Resources See also Use bullet-points (see Tutorial 02) Include source in brackets after link Also link to relevant Wikipedia pages External links Not developed User page Good Description about self provided – consider expanding Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Promising, but hard to follow Use a numbered list (see Tutorial 02) At least one contribution has been made and summarised with indirect link(s) to evidence If adding the second or subsequent link to a page (or a talk/discussion page), create a direct link like / Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:34, 23 September 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a promising chapter, with lots of useful detail, but is hampered by the lack of citation and review of relevant research about emotional aspects of long-term injury in high performance athletes. The chapter tends to rely on application of general psychological principles. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Well developed, but lacking focus questions Some of the detail can be moved into subsequent sections Engages reader interest by introducing a case study and/or scenario with an image in a feature box interest Explains the problem or phenomenon Ideally, provide open-ended, rather than closed-ended focus questions Add focus questions in a feature box to help guide the reader and structure the chapter Theory A very good range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Minimise general theoretical background; instead summarise, link to related resources, and move to the more substantive aspects of theory which address the topic (long-term injury in high performance athletes and emotion) Builds on one previous, related chapter Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Very good depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Effective/ use of tables, figures, and/or lists are to help clearly convey key theoretical information Lack of sufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Some basic examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Basic review of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area? Greater emphasis on effect sizes could be helpful. Lack of sufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Insufficient critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Many claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) Integration Insufficient integration between theory and research The chapter places more emphasis on theory than on research Conclusion Good summary and conclusion Key points are summarised Practical, take-home message(s) could be emphasised Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is very good Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead: it is, most often, not needed at all, or use section linking Avoid one sentence paragraphs. Convey one idea per paragraph using three to five sentences. Avoid overly emotive language (e.g,. impacts of injury) in science-based communication; stick with facts Layout The chapter is well structured Include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see tags) See earlier comments about heading casing Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour) Remove unnecessary capitalisation APA style Use sentence casing for the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc. Figures Figures are briefly captioned Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text Refer to each Figure using APA style (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation) The figure which is a table would be better presented as an editable table using the table function Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[1] Check and correct use of italicisation Include hyperlinked dois Learning features Good use of learning features Good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example. One use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Good use of image(s) No use of table(s) Very good use of feature box(es) Basic use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) The quiz question could be improved by being more focused on the key points and/or take-home messages Basic use of case studies or examples Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Use bullet points per Tutorial 02 Include sources in parentheses Move external links to the external link section No use of external links in the "External links" section Social contribution ~3 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:35, 1 November 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation The presentation is under the maximum time limit (3 mins), so there was room for further development Overview This presentation could be improved by displaying and narrating a slide with the same title and sub-title as the book chapter to help the viewer understand the purpose of the presentation This presentation has a basic introduction to engage audience interest Use international statistics because the audience is international. Australians represent ~0.3% of the world population (i.e., very small/narrow audience) Establish a context for the presentation (e.g., by using an example or explaining why it is important), to help the viewer understand Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological research Some citations are included to support claims The presentation makes basic use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with reasonably good take-home message(s) Audio The presentation makes reasonably good use of narrated audio There are some long audio pauses (e.g., at ~25 seconds) Good intonation The narration could benefit from further practice Audio recording quality was very good. Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality. The microphone may be too close (some distortion) The narrated content is well matched to the target topic (see content) Video Overall, visual display quality is reasonably good The presentation makes basic use of animated slides and/or text The first 10 seconds is largely visually blank The amount of text presented per slide could be reduced to make it easier to read and listen at the same time Remove unnecessary spaces Odd choice of font type (e.g., on Conclusion slide) The visual communication is supplemented in a basic way by images Also consider using diagrams The presentation is basically produced using simple tools The visual content is well matched to the target topic (see content) Meta-data The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. The sub-title (or an abbreviation of the sub-title that fits within the 100 character limit) would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Provide an informative description to help viewers decide whether they want to watch A link to the book chapter is not provided A link from the book chapter is provided Licensing Probably the images are freely available via the editing package but this is not explicitly stated A copyright license for the presentation is not provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:40, 11 November 2023 (UTC)