Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Grit and achievement

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Heading casing[edit source]

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example:

Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory

Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:29, 27 September 2022 (UTC)Reply


Topic development feedback[edit source]

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to see editing changes made whilst reviewing this chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments below may also be about all material on the page at the time of providing this feedback.

Title[edit source]

  1. The title is correctly worded and formatted
  2. The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted

User page[edit source]

  1. Created – minimal, but sufficient
  2. Brief description about self provided – consider expanding
  3. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
  4. Add link to book chapter

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. None summarised with direct link(s) to evidence – looking ahead to the book chapter submission see how to earn marks for social contribution

Headings[edit source]

  1. See earlier comment about Heading casing
  2. Promising 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development by expanding the structure
  3. More detailed headings could be helpful (e.g., grit only appears in one heading?)
  4. Maybe "controversy" could be "critical views" or "critical debate"?

Key points[edit source]

  1. Promising development of key points for each section, with relevant citations
  2. In explaining grit, consider mentioning other related constructs, with embedded links to relevant book chapters and/or Wikipedia articles (e.g., psychological resilience, resourcefulness, mental toughness etc.). Perhaps consider how grit is similar to and differs from such constructs. Also include embedded links to grit-related chapters so these chapters are integrated with one another.
  3. Note that the two theoretical elements of grit are passion and perseverance, so explain each of those.
  4. For sections which include sub-sections include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings
  5. Overview - Consider adding:
    1. an image
  6. Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research
  7. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters.
  8. Consider including more examples/case studies
  9. Conclusion (the most important section):
    1. Well developed

Figure[edit source]

  1. A figure is presented
  2. Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text
  3. Cite each figure at least once in the main text
  4. Consider decreasing image size

References[edit source]

  1. Very good
  2. For APA referencing style, check and correct:
    1. italicisation
    2. page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-)

Resources[edit source]

  1. See also
    1. Excellent
  2. External links
    1. Not developed

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:29, 27 September 2022 (UTC)Reply

APA Referencing Suggestion[edit source]

Hi there,

The referencing template used does not allow for the title of the journal and the volume to be italicized as is required by APA referencing.

(For example). Title of journal: Motivation and emotion, volume 40.

Baumeister, R. F. (2016). Toward a general theory of motivation: Problems, challenges, opportunities, and the big picture. Motivation and emotion, 40(1), 1-10. https://doi.org/10.1007/s11031-015-9521-y

Italicized text: Motivation and emotion, 40

You need to add two apostrophe's (not the quotation marks!) before and after the text to italicize within this template. U3162201 (discusscontribs) 02:54, 4 October 2022 (UTC)Reply

Heading casing[edit source]

Hi,

You have the beginnings of a promising chapter. One suggestion would be to relook at your headings and make sure they are in the correct format (e.g. 'What is Grit?' should become 'What is grit?'). Another suggestion would be to italicize your image labels (e.g. 'Figure 1.') and add an image description. I hope this helps. Best of luck! U3203545 (discusscontribs) 01:56, 15 October 2022 (UTC)Reply


Topic development feedback[edit source]

The topic development submission has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history for editing changes made whilst reviewing this chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date.

Title[edit source]

  1. The title is correctly worded and formatted
  2. The wording and/or capitalisation of the sub-title is incorrect. Be consistent with the book table of contents.

Headings[edit source]

  1. Promising 2-level heading structure
  2. Remove "Test yourself!" and "Quiz" headings; instead just embed quiz question(s) within the most relevant sections
  3. Adopt closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings

Overview[edit source]

  1. Select either "Think of times ..." or the case study for the Overview - and move the other into a subsequent section
  2. Move the scenario or case study into a feature box (with an image) to the start of this section to help catch reader interest
  3. A brief, evocative description of the problem/topic is provided
  4. Closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings is recommended

Key points[edit source]

  1. Key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations
  2. What is grit? Keep this brief and provide an embedded wiki link to the dedicated chapter about grit
  3. For sections which include sub-sections include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings
  4. Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal wiki links to relevant book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content of this on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title.
  5. Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research, with practical examples
  6. Conclusion (the most important section):
    1. Well underway
    2. What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?)

Figure[edit source]

  1. A relevant figure is presented and cited
  2. Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text

Learning feature[edit source]

  1. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters
  2. Excellent use of example(s)/case study(ies)
  3. Consider including quiz question(s), table(s) etc.

References[edit source]

  1. Excellent
  2. Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-)

Resources[edit source]

  1. See also
    1. Excellent
  2. External links
    1. Very good
    2. Include source in brackets after link
    3. Only include links directly related to the sub-title

User page[edit source]

  1. Excellent – used effectively
  2. Excellent description about self provided
  3. Link(s) provided to professional profile(s)
  4. Link provided to book chapter

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. None summarised on user page with direct link(s) to evidence – this was covered in Tutorial 03. Looking ahead to the book chapter submission, see how to earn marks for social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:52, 29 September 2023 (UTC)Reply

Book chapter review and feedback[edit source]

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Chapter marks will be available via UCLearn along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an excellent chapter. It successfully uses psychological theory and research to address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
  2. Excellent use of academic, peer-reviewed citations to support claims
  3. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits

Overview[edit source]

  1. Well developed
  2. Engages reader interest via a case study or scenario in a feature box; also include a relevant image
  3. Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon
  4. Clear focus questions

Theory[edit source]

  1. An excellent range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained
  2. Builds effectively on related chapters and Wikipedia articles
  3. Insightful depth is provided about relevant theory(ies)
  4. Use tables, figures, and/or lists are to help convey key theoretical information
  5. Key citations are well used
  6. The Reeve (2018) textbook is overused as a citation – instead, utilise primary, peer-reviewed sources
  7. Excellent use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts

Research[edit source]

  1. Excellent review of relevant research
  2. Excellent critical thinking about relevant research is evident

Integration[edit source]

  1. Excellent integration between theory and research

Conclusion[edit source]

  1. Excellent summary and conclusion
  2. Key points are well summarised
  3. Clear take-home message(s)

Style[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is excellent
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections
  3. Grammar, spelling, and proofreading are excellent
    1. Citations use excellent APA style (7th ed.)
    2. References use excellent APA style:

Learning features[edit source]

  1. Excellent use of learning features
  2. Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles
  3. Excellent use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
  4. Basic use of image(s)
  5. No use of table(s)
  6. Excellent use of feature box(es)
  7. Excellent use of case studies or examples
  8. No use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s)
  9. Very good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section
    1. Also include links to related Wikipedia articles
    2. Use alphabetical order
  10. Good use of external links in the "External links" section
    1. Use alphabetical order
    2. Move peer-reviewed articles into references and cite

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. ~14 logged, useful, minor to major social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:57, 21 November 2023 (UTC)Reply

Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an excellent presentation

Overview[edit source]

  1. An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed. Also narrate the title and sub-title — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. Very engaging introduction to hook audience interest
  3. A context for the presentation is clearly established through an example
  4. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation.

Content[edit source]

  1. Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section
  2. The presentation addresses the topic
  3. An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little
  4. The presentation makes excellent/ use of relevant psychological theory
  5. The presentation makes reasonably good use of relevant psychological research
  6. Ideally, make more explicit use of research
  7. The presentation makes very good use of citations to support claims
  8. The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice
  9. The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information

Conclusion[edit source]

  1. A conclusion is presented with good take-home message(s)
  2. The conclusion provides a good summary of the most relevant psychological theory and research about this topic

Audio[edit source]

  1. The audio is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to listen to
  2. The presentation makes effective use of narrated audio
  3. Audio communication is well paced
  4. Excellent intonation enhances listener interest and engagement
  5. The narration is well practiced and/or performed
  6. Audio recording quality was excellent
  7. The narrated content is well matched to the target topic
  8. Mute the music (or use lower volume) during narration to help the viewer concentrate on the combination of visual information and narrated audio

Video[edit source]

  1. Overall, visual display quality is excellent
  2. The presentation makes creative use of webcam, stock video, text based slides
  3. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read
  4. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by video and/or images
  5. The presentation is very well produced
  6. The visual content is well matched to the target topic

Meta-data[edit source]

  1. The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation
  2. A written description of the presentation is provided
  3. Links to and from the book chapter are provided
  4. An active hyperlink to the book chapter is provided
  5. Excellent use of time-codes

Licensing[edit source]

  1. Image sources and their copyright status are communicated
  2. A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the presentation description but not in the meta-data

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:27, 22 November 2023 (UTC)Reply