Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Climate change emotion

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Suggestion[edit source]

Hey! I think you're off to a great start. This is some well researched work on climate change and emotion, I'm looking forward to seeing the final product. I think you could benefit from reading into ecoanxiety as it falls directly under the topic of climate change emotion https://www.iberdrola.com/social-commitment/what-is-ecoanxiety Dnamynts (discusscontribs) 22:49, 24 August 2023 (UTC)Reply

Heading casing[edit source]

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example:

Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory

Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:33, 26 September 2023 (UTC)Reply


Topic development feedback[edit source]

The topic development submission has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history for editing changes made whilst reviewing this chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date.

Title[edit source]

  1. Title and sub-title not provided

Headings[edit source]

  1. See earlier comment about Heading casing
  2. Overly complicated 3-level structure – consider simplifying
  3. Avoid having sections with only 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings
  4. Case study and quiz doesn't need a separate heading; instead embed quiz questions within relevant sections
  5. Remove full steps from headings

Overview[edit source]

  1. Move the scenario or case study into a feature box (with an image) to the start of this section to help catch reader interest
  2. Approve long opening paragraph - provide a brief, evocative description of the problem/topic
  3. Add a brief, evocative description of the problem/topic
  4. Focus question 1 is too general; questions 2 and 3 are closer to the money; but critically, set these up to use the best available psychological theory and research about CC and E

Key points[edit source]

  1. Basic development of key points for each section, with relevant citations
  2. Go beyond positive and negative emotions into specific emotions, especially eco-emotions. This chapter should provide an entry point and link to other chapters about specific eco-emotions and what motivates pro-environmental behaviours.
  3. I'm not seeing enough focus on CC-related emotions.
  4. Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research
  5. It is unclear whether the best available psychological theory and research has been consulted in the preparation of this plan
  6. Conclusion (the most important section):
    1. Underway
    2. Avoid presenting a single long paragraph
    3. Overly general - the key to unlocking this chapter I think is get a better understanding of the best available psychological theory and research on this topic, develop more specific focus questions, and structure the chapter around these key questions/concepts, with practical examples.
    4. What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?)

Figure[edit source]

  1. A relevant figure is presented, captioned, and cited
  2. How does this figure connect to emotion? Explain.
  3. Figure(s) are cited at least once in the main text

Learning feature[edit source]

  1. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters
  2. Promising use of example(s)/case study(ies)
  3. Promising use of quiz question(s) - remove heading and embed each question within its relevant section.
  4. Consider including table(s) etc.

References[edit source]

  1. Poor APA style
  2. For APA referencing style, check and correct:
    1. Author initials for first and middle names
    2. Learn where to use commas; don't use semi-colons; don't use quotation marks; don't include ISSN #s
    3. capitalisation
    4. italicisation
    5. doi formatting
    6. make doi hyperlinks active (i.e., clickable)
    7. etc.
  3. Two different refence styles are used - Wiki-style and APA style - only use one style and be consistent

Resources[edit source]

  1. See also
    1. Very good
  2. External links
    1. Poorly formatted
    2. See Tutorial 02)
    3. Rename links so that they are more user friendly (see Tutorial 02)
    4. Include source in brackets after link

User page[edit source]

  1. Good
  2. Description about self provided – consider expanding
  3. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
  4. Link provided to book chapter

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. Poorly formatted - suggests that perhaps the tutorials haven't been completed?
  2. Use a numbered list (see Tutorial 02)
  3. Two out of three different types of contributions
  4. Some direct and some indirect links
  5. If adding the second or subsequent link to a page (or a talk/discussion page), create a direct link like / Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:33, 26 September 2023 (UTC)Reply

Book chapter review and feedback[edit source]

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Chapter marks will be available via UCLearn along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an excellent chapter. It successfully uses psychological theory and research to address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
  2. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits

Overview[edit source]

  1. Well developed
  2. Engages reader interest by introducing a case study and/or scenario
  3. Add an image to help engage reader interest
  4. Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon
  5. Mostly clear focus questions

Theory[edit source]

  1. An excellent range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained
  2. Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters)
  3. Insightful depth is provided about relevant theory(ies)
  4. No use of tables, figures, and/or lists are to help clearly convey key theoretical information
  5. Key citations are well used
  6. Good use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts

Research[edit source]

  1. Excellent review of relevant research
  2. Excellent critical thinking about relevant research is evident

Integration[edit source]

  1. Excellent integration between theory and research

Conclusion[edit source]

  1. Basic summary and conclusion
  2. Remind the reader about the importance of the problem or phenomenon of interest
  3. Key points are summarised
  4. Summarise key points
  5. Add practical, take-home message(s)

Style[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is basic
    2. Some paragraphs are overly long. Communicate one key idea per paragraph in three to five sentences.
  2. Layout
    1. Heading structure is underdeveloped; could benefit from re-organisation and synthesis
    2. Include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see [Provide more detail] tags)
    3. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings
    4. See earlier comments about heading casing
  3. Grammar
    1. The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags)
      1. Consider using a grammar checking tool
      2. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance
  4. Proofreading
    1. More proofreading is needed (e.g., fix punctuation and typographical errors) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard
    2. Remove unnecessary capitalisation
  5. APA style
    1. Use sentence casing for the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc.
    2. Use serial commas[1] – they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. See explanatory video (1 min)

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    1. Figures
      1. Figures are briefly captioned
      2. Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text
    2. Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example:
      1. Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses
    3. Formatting style is inconsistent between references

Learning features[edit source]

  1. Basic use of learning features
  2. Good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example.
  3. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
  4. Very basic use of image(s)
  5. No use of table(s)
  6. Basic use of feature box(es)
  7. Basic use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s)
  8. Basic use of case studies or examples
  9. Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section
    1. Use sentence casing
  10. Basic use of external links in the "External links" section
    1. Use bullet points per Tutorial 02
    2. Rename links per Tutorial 02
    3. Use sentence casing
    4. Include sources in parentheses

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. ~5 logged, useful, minor to moderate social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:28, 2 November 2023 (UTC)Reply

Multimedia presentation feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a reasonably good presentation
  2. The presentation is over the maximum time limit — content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes

Overview[edit source]

  1. An opening slide is displayed very briefly.
  2. This presentation could be improved by displaying and narrating a slide with the same title and sub-title as the book chapter to help the viewer understand the purpose of the presentation
  3. Create an engaging introduction to hook audience interest
  4. Establish a context for the presentation (e.g., by using an example or explaining why it is important), to help the viewer understand
  5. Focus questions and/or an outline of topics are presented. Consider abbreviating this list. Consider using either focus questions or topics rather than a mixture.
  6. I don't understand the focus question about age - this doesn't seem to be covered?

Content[edit source]

  1. Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section
  2. The presentation addresses the topic
  3. The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological theory
  4. Consider including more key citations to support claims. There is only one reference listed at the end.
  5. The presentation makes very good use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice
  6. The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information

Conclusion[edit source]

  1. A Conclusion slide is presented with a basic summary
  2. The Conclusion only partly fitted within the time limit

Audio[edit source]

  1. The presentation makes good use of narrated audio
  2. Audio communication is well paced
  3. Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
  4. Basic intonation. Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement.
  5. The narration is a little hesitatant in some places; could benefit from further practice
  6. Audio recording quality was very good
  7. The narrated content is well matched to the target topic (see content)

Video[edit source]

  1. Overall, visual display quality is excellent/very good/good/reasonably good/basic
  2. The presentation makes good use of text and image based slides
  3. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read
  4. Consider using a sans-serif typeface to make the text easier to read
  5. The visual communication is supplemented in a good way by images and/or diagrams
  6. The presentation is well produced using simple tools
  7. The visual content is well matched to the target topic (see content)

Meta-data[edit source]

  1. The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. The sub-title (or an abbreviation of the sub-title that fits within the 100 character limit) would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.
  3. Links to and from the book chapter are provided

Licensing[edit source]

  1. Image sources and their copyright status are communicated
  2. Ideally, provide clickable links to the original image sources (e.g., in the description)
  3. A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the presentation description but not in the meta-data

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:16, 11 November 2023 (UTC)Reply