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The topic development submission has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history for editing changes made whilst reviewing this chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date.
Move the scenario or case study into a feature box (with an image) to the start of this section to help catch reader interest
Approve long opening paragraph - provide a brief, evocative description of the problem/topic
Add a brief, evocative description of the problem/topic
Focus question 1 is too general; questions 2 and 3 are closer to the money; but critically, set these up to use the best available psychological theory and research about CC and E
Basic development of key points for each section, with relevant citations
Go beyond positive and negative emotions into specific emotions, especially eco-emotions. This chapter should provide an entry point and link to other chapters about specific eco-emotions and what motivates pro-environmental behaviours.
I'm not seeing enough focus on CC-related emotions.
Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research
It is unclear whether the best available psychological theory and research has been consulted in the preparation of this plan
Conclusion (the most important section):
Underway
Avoid presenting a single long paragraph
Overly general - the key to unlocking this chapter I think is get a better understanding of the best available psychological theory and research on this topic, develop more specific focus questions, and structure the chapter around these key questions/concepts, with practical examples.
What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?)
Description about self provided – consider expanding
Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
If adding the second or subsequent link to a page (or a talk/discussion page), create a direct link like / Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions.
Latest comment: 1 year ago1 comment1 person in discussion
This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Chapter marks will be available via UCLearn along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.
Overall, this is an excellent chapter. It successfully uses psychological theory and research to address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits
Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance
Proofreading
More proofreading is needed (e.g., fix punctuation and typographical errors) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard
Good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example.
No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
Very basic use of image(s)
No use of table(s)
Basic use of feature box(es)
Basic use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s)
Basic use of case studies or examples
Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section
Use sentence casing
Basic use of external links in the "External links" section
Latest comment: 1 year ago1 comment1 person in discussion
The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.
This presentation could be improved by displaying and narrating a slide with the same title and sub-title as the book chapter to help the viewer understand the purpose of the presentation
Create an engaging introduction to hook audience interest
Establish a context for the presentation (e.g., by using an example or explaining why it is important), to help the viewer understand
Focus questions and/or an outline of topics are presented. Consider abbreviating this list. Consider using either focus questions or topics rather than a mixture.
I don't understand the focus question about age - this doesn't seem to be covered?
Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
Basic intonation. Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement.
The narration is a little hesitatant in some places; could benefit from further practice
Audio recording quality was very good
The narrated content is well matched to the target topic (see content)
The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. The sub-title (or an abbreviation of the sub-title that fits within the 100 character limit) would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.