Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Basal ganglia and motivation

Initial suggestions

@KhalehlaM6706: Thanks for tackling this topic. Some initial suggestions:

• Check out other related chapters and see how you can build on, link to, and integrate with that work:
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Brain
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Motivation
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Neurotransmitters/Dopamine
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Pleasure
• What psychological theory(ies) can help to understand? What is the main research in this area?

Let me know if I can do anything else as you go along. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:33, 14 August 2023 (UTC)

Other suggestions

HI there, would be a good idea to check out these related chapters and even link them to you 'see also' section.

Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Limbic system and emotion

Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Reward system, motivation, and emotion

Thanks

u3217955 U3217955 (discuss • contribs) 03:10, 6 September 2023 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:03, 19 September 2023 (UTC)

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-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:03, 19 September 2023 (UTC)

Social Contribution Suggestion

Hi there,

Great topic, really looking forward to seeing this thickened up. I would suggest to add in some case studies around what is motivated behaviour? A table may also be a good, clear way to describe what this is. I would also suggest to include an image of where the Basal Ganglia is located in the relevant spot. Mia Pearse (discuss • contribs) 05:01, 5 October 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient chapter mainly because it is so brief/incomplete Well under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Underdeveloped Engage reader interest by presenting a case study or scenario with an image in a feature box Briefly explains the problem or phenomenon Basic focus questions Theory Insufficient use of relevant psychological theory about this topic Reduce general motivational theory. Increase emphasis on substantive aspects of theory that relate directly to the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question). Build more strongly on other related chapters and/or Wikipedia articles (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters in this category: Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/*) Insufficient depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Use tables, figures, and/or lists are to help convey key theoretical information Insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Insufficient use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Insufficient review of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area? Insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Insufficient critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) Integration Insufficient integration between theory and research Conclusion Insufficient as a cohesive summary of the best available psychological theory and research about the topic Remind the reader about the importance of the problem or phenomenon of interest Add practical, take-home message(s) Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is OK but there are several aspects which are below professional standard Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes Layout Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings See earlier comments about heading casing Grammar The grammar for some/many sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags) Spelling Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the tags). Spell-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Proofreading More proofreading is needed (e.g., fix punctuation and typographical errors) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard Remove unnecessary capitalisation APA style Use sentence casing for the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc. Figures Figures are briefly captioned Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1) Citations use correct APA style References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[2] Include hyperlinked dois Move non-peer-reviewed sources to the external links section Learning features Insufficient use of learning features One use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of image(s) No use of table(s) No use of feature box(es) No use of case studies or examples Basic use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) The quiz questions could be improved by being more focused on the key points and/or take-home messages The quiz questions could be more effective as learning prompts by being embedded as single questions within each corresponding section rather than as a set of questions at the end Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Use bullet points per Tutorial 02 Also include links to related book chapters Use sentence casing Use alphabetical order Rename links to match the Wikipedia article name Move external links to the external links section No use of external links in the "External links" section Social contribution ~3 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:21, 12 November 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient presentation mainly because it does not demonstrate sufficient understanding of the role of the basal ganglia in motivation based on the best psychological theory and research. The presentation is over the maximum time limit — content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes Overview An opening slide with the title is displayed. Also display and narrate the sub-title — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Create an engaging introduction to hook audience interest Establish a context for the presentation (e.g., by using an example or explaining why it is important), to help the viewer understand Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section This presentation doesn't adequately address the topic The presentation spends too long on background description of BG and motivation as stand-alone concepts and too little explaining how the role of BG in motivation The selection of content is poor because it doesn't adequately use the most relevant psychological theory and/or research to address the topic The presentation makes insufficient use of relevant psychological theory and research The presentation makes insufficient use of citations to support claimsons The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies Conclusion The Conclusion did not fit within the time limit Audio The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio Audio communication is well paced Very good intonation The narration could benefit from further practice Learn how to pronounce the various brain structures Audio recording quality was basic There is some background noise Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., keyboard and/or mouse clicks were audible). Consider using an external microphone. The narrated content lacked synthesis of the best psychological research about this topic Video Overall, visual display quality is basic The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read Consider using a sans-serif typeface to make the text easier to read The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is supplemented in a basic way by images Also consider using diagrams The presentation is basically produced using simple tools The visual content lacked synthesis of the best psychological research about this topic Meta-data The video title does not match the chapter title and sub-title — this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation and be more consistent A very brief written description of the presentation is provided. Expand. A link to the book chapter is not provided A link from the book chapter is provided Licensing Image sources are communicated in a general way. Also provide links to each image and the license details (e.g., in the description). A copyright license for the presentation is not provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:46, 15 November 2023 (UTC)