Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Social media and suicide prevention

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28/8/2022: This is a really in depth introduction to the topic of social media and suicide prevention. The advantages alongside the disadvantages really demonstrate the importance of social media and the effects it can have of mental health, and in this case suicide prevention. I also really like the use of emotion dysregulation and the explanation behind the importance of this as well :). (The preceding unsigned comment was added by [[User:{{{1}}}|{{{1}}}]] ([[User talk:{{{1}}}|talk]] • [[Special:Contributions/{{{1}}}|contribs]]) )

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:54, 3 October 2022 (UTC)

@JaimeTegan:, this is a reminder to adjust the heading casing. Same for title and sub-title - use sentence casing. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:54, 15 October 2022 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title The title is correctly worded The sub-title is correctly formatted The capitalisation of the title is incorrect. It should be consistent with the book table of contents The wording of the sub-title is incorrect. It should be consistent with the book table of contents User page Used effectively Brief description about self provided – consider expanding Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Add link to book chapte Social contribution Excellent – at least one contribution has been made and summarised in a numbered list with direct link(s) to evidence Headings See earlier comment about Heading casing Basic, 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development to limit the emphasis on background information and expand the focus on the target topic The main focus of the chapter is too far into the chapter structure (e.g., How can social media be used to reduce suicide rates?). Use sources such as https://doi.org/10.1002/jnr.24404 Avoid having sections with only 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings Key points Key points are well developed for most sections, with relevant citations Target an international audience; Australians only represent 0.33% of the world population Avoid overcapitalisation (APA style) – more info Overview - Consider adding: an evocative description of the problem more focused questions an example or case study Promising balance of theory and research Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Consider including more examples/case studies Conclusion (the most important section): Hasn't been developed What might the take-home, practical messages be? In a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions? Figure Excellent – A relevant figure is presented and it is appropriately captioned Cite each figure at least once in the main text Consider increasing image size from to make it easier to view References Very good For APA referencing style, check and correct: alphabetical order capitalisation italicisation (have fixed for first reference) page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Resources See also Excellent Use sentence casing Also link to relevant Wikipedia pages External links Excellent Use sentence casing Rename links so that they are more user friendly (see Tutorial 02) Target an international audience; Australians only represent 0.33% of the world population

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:54, 3 October 2022 (UTC)

Audience

@JaimeTegan:, this is a reminder to target an international (rather than Australian) audience; Australians only represent 0.33% of the world population. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:56, 15 October 2022 (UTC)

Further addition to the disadvantages of social media:

Possibly consider for the disadvantages of social media the actions of trolls in regard to the online harassment they partake in. You've mentioned the Anonymity of the internet as a disadvantage, and this is something that trolls often exploit. Similar to the extreme communities they often attempt to push vulnerable groups and individuals into future self-harm or a worsened self-image.-Benji BenjiD'Ange (discuss • contribs) 00:55, 30 October 2022 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a good chapter that makes use of psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem Addressing the topic development feedback could have helped to improve this chapter For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview The Overview is underdeveloped; needs to narrow in more specifically on how social media might be used to help prevent suicide Why focus on young people? The question/topic is more general. Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest Basic focus question(s) Theory – Breadth There is too much general theoretical material to start with. Instead, summarise and link to further information (such as other book chapters or Wikipedia articles about suicidality), to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question). The content that directly addresses the topic starts about half-way through, with the section titled "How can social media be used to prevent suicide?". From this point onwards, the chapter does a good chapter of addressing the topic. Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Theory – Depth Appropriate depth is provided about the selected theory(ies) Key citations are well used Tables and/or lists are used effectively to help clearly convey key theoretical information More examples could be useful to illustrate key concepts Research – Key findings Reasonably good review of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful Research – Critical thinking Good critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Claims are referenced Integration Discussion of theory and research is well integrated Conclusion Reasonably good summary Add practical, take-home message(s) Written expression – Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic Internationalise: Write for an international, rather than domestic, audience. Australians make up only 0.32% of the world human population. "People" is often a better term than "individuals" Reduce use of weasel words which bulk out the text, but don't enhance meaning Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences Some sentences are overly long; consider splitting them into shorter, separate sentences. Consider putting a draft through a readability check (see the discussion thread on UCLearn). Layout See earlier comments about heading casing Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance. Check and correct use of possessive apostrophes (e.g., cats vs cat's vs cats') Use serial commas[1] – they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. See explanatory video (1 min) Spelling Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the tags). Spell-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Proofreading More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard APA style Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159) Replace double spaces with single spaces Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc. Figures Figures have basic captions Figure captions should use this format: Figure X. Descriptive caption in sentence casing. See example Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1) Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: Multiple citations in parentheses should be listed in alphabetical order by first author surname and separated by semi-colons References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[2] Written expression – Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is very good Good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Excellent/Very good/Good/Basic/No use of image(s) Excellent use of table(s) Excellent use of feature box(es) Basic use of quiz(zes) No use of case studies or examples Good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section. Also include links to relevant Wikipedia articles. Basic use of external links in the "External links" section. Target an international audience. Social contribution ~4 logged, useful, minor social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:01, 3 November 2022 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed. Also narrate to helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation Consider creating an engaging introduction to hook audience interest Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic The presentation is well structured (i.e., Overview, Content, Conclusion) The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes little to no use of relevant psychological research Include citations to support claims The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with good take-home message(s) Audio The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio Audio communication is clear Basic intonation Audio recording quality was OK. Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., keyboard and/or mouse clicks were audible). Consider using an external microphone. Video Overall, visual display quality is good The presentation makes good use of text and image based slides The presentation makes basic use of text-based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The amount of text presented per slide could be reduced to make it easier to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is supplemented in a basic way by images and/or diagrams The presentation is basically produced using simple tools Meta-data The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Check and correct casing (e.g., how -> How) A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. A written description of the presentation is not provided. Providing an informative description can help viewers decide whether they want to watch or not. Excellent use of time codes Links to and from the book chapter are provided Licensing Image sources are communicated in a general way on the last slide which is shown very briefly. It could be helpful to display this for longer and/or include this info in the written description. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:37, 11 November 2022 (UTC)