Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Revenge motivation

Topic development feedback

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Title Not developed User page Created – minimal, but sufficient Very brief description about self provided – consider expanding Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution None summarised with direct link(s) to evidence – this was covered in Tutorial 03. Looking ahead to the book chapter submission, see how to earn marks for social contributions. Headings Not developed Key points Not developed Figure A relevant figure is not presented and cited References None Resources Not developed

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Comment

This topic is fascinating. I think it would be awesome to include a case which could be either fictional or a real-life situation. For example, talking about revenge porn would be a particularly interesting avenue to discuss and what motivates it. U3190094 (discuss • contribs) 10:02, 10 October 2022 (UTC)

Revenge is so interesting to me: one of the reasons I love the Count of Monte Carlo! I would be so fascinated to see if there's a difference in how women vs men take revenge? Is there approach or method different? --U3037979 (discuss • contribs) 22:25, 29 October 2022 (UTC)

I suggest changing the colour of your feature boxes because it disrupts the flow of the chapter, and your eyes are diverted from the content because of the overwhelming brightness of the colours, perhaps a more neutral or warm tone --U3216313 (discuss • contribs) 10:55, 7 October 2023 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed and the sub-title is narrated — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Also narrate the title. Consider creating an engaging introduction to hook audience interest Focus questions are presented. Content The presentation addresses the topic An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little The presentation is well structured (i.e., Overview, Content, Conclusion) The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes no explicit use of relevant psychological research Include citations to support claims The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies Conclusion A very brief Conclusion slide is presented with a basic take-home message Audio The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio Audio communication is well paced Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement Consider improving articulation to enhance the clarity of speech Audio recording quality was OKish. Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality. Audio was poorest at the start of each slide. The narrated content is poorly matched to the target topic (see content) Video Overall, visual display quality is basic The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides Some of the font size could be larger to make it easier to read Consider using a sans-serif typeface to make the text easier to read The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is supplemented in a basic way by images and/or diagrams The presentation is basically produced using simple tools Meta-data The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. The sub-title (or an abbreviation of the sub-title that fits within the 100 character limit) would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A link to the book chapter is provided but the hyperlink isn't active to allow 1-click access A link to the book chapter is provided but it goes to a specific section rather than the top of the chapter A link from the book chapter is provided Licensing Image sources are communicated Ideally, provide clickable links to the original image sources (e.g., in the description) This presentation has probably violated the copyrights of image owners as images appear to have been used without permission and/or acknowledgement. A copyright license for the presentation is provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:41, 12 November 2022 (UTC)

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient chapter mainly because it is so brief, thus there is poor coverage of research. Well under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Very good Overview Explains the problem or phenomenon Uses a case study or example to help engage reader interest Basic focus question(s) Theory – Breadth Basic but sufficient coverage of relevant theory is provided Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Theory – Depth Basic depth is provided about the selected theory(ies) Tables and/or lists could be used more effectively to help clearly convey key theoretical information Some useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts The Reeve (2018 - not 2017) textbook is overused as a citation – instead, utilise primary, peer-reviewed sources Research – Key findings Insufficient use of relevant psychological research Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful Research – Critical thinking Insufficient critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Several claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) Integration Insufficient integration of relevant theory and research Conclusion Basic summary Basic take-home message(s)(s) Written expression – Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic Use active (e.g., "this chapter explored") rather than passive voice (e.g., "this chapter has explored" or "this chapter will explore") [1][2] Layout Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see tags) Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance Figures Figures are very well captioned Figure captions should use this format: Figure X. Descriptive caption in sentence casing. See example Refer to each Figure using APA style (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation) Citations use correct APA style References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[3] Check and correct use of italicisation Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Written expression – Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is basic No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. No use of image(s). The uploaded image violated copyright and has been nominated for deletion. No use of table(s) Good use of feature box(es) Basic use of quiz(zes) Very good use of case studies or examples Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Also include links to related Wikipedia articles Include sources in parentheses Good use of external links in the "External links" section Social contribution ~3 logged, useful, minor, late-semester social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:12, 17 November 2022 (UTC)