Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Psilocybin assisted psychotherapy

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Comment[edit source]

Hey! I found this reference that discusses safety and risks of psilocybin and I thought it might be relevant to your topic. Tylš, F., Páleníček, T., & Horáček, J. (2014). Psilocybin–summary of knowledge and new perspectives. European Neuropsychopharmacology, 24(3), 342-356. https://doi.org/10.1016/j.euroneuro.2013.12.006--BenRoss068 (discusscontribs) 04:20, 12 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Comment[edit source]

Hello! There is lots of fascinating new research surrounding the use of psilocybin alongside CBT in treating addiction. Here's an interesting longitudinal study. Although it has a small sample size (n=15) the 12-month follow up seems to have resulted in quite high rates of smoking cessation (67% had quit smoking after 12 month follow-up). I hope that this can help direct some of your book chapter and I wish that I was assigned to one as interesting and cutting edge as yours! https://doi.org/10.3109/00952990.2016.1170135 Noah O'Brien (discusscontribs) 25 August 2022 (UTC)

Comment[edit source]

Back again to have a quick look at how your chapter is progressing. I think that one of your sentences in your overview should be a little more nuanced "There is no evidence that current anti-depressants and SSRI’s improve depression and anxiety" Possibly indicate that this is a contentious topic and there is a lot of meta-analysis pointing both ways rather than a really bold statement. Maybe more info on how SSRIs seem to produce a similar effect to placebos but not that there is no benefit whatsoever, because there are actually benefits of placebos. This article here shows that there may be a small effect of SSRIs on Major Depressive Disorder, but that the risks of using SSRIs may outweigh the benefits in regards to increased suicidal behaviour etc. Maybe expand into this topic a little. https://doi.org/10.1186/s12888-016-1173-2 Noah O'Brien (discusscontribs) 06:09, 16 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]


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Title[edit source]

  1. Excellent

User page[edit source]

  1. Book chapter template has been removed
  2. Add description about self
  3. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
  4. Add link to book chapter

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. None summarised with link(s) to evidence.
  2. Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions.
  3. Use a numbered list.
  4. Add a brief summary of each contribution.

Headings[edit source]

  1. Basic, 1-level heading structure - could benefit from further development, perhaps using a 2-level structure.
  2. I like the practical focus, however it is not clear where/how theory and research are to be covered.

Key points[edit source]

  1. Underdeveloped
  2. Use bullet points (see Tutorial 1 - Using Wikiversity)
  3. Overview - Consider adding:
    1. a description of the problem and what will be covered
    2. focus questions
    3. an image
    4. an example or case study
  4. Remove or adapt generic template content.
  5. Expand theory and research.
  6. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters.
  7. Consider including more examples/case studies.
  8. Include APA style citations.
  9. Conclusion (the most important section):
    1. hasn't been developed
  10. Cite each reference at least once in the main text.

Figure[edit source]

  1. A figure is presented.
  2. Caption
    1. use APA style e.g., Figure 1. ...
  3. Cite each figure at least once in the main text.

References[edit source]

  1. Good
  2. For APA referencing style, check and correct:
    1. capitalisation
    2. italicisation

Resources[edit source]

  1. See also
    1. Very good
  2. External links
    1. None provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:54, 31 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Comment[edit source]

Suggest narrowing the topic to a focus on a particular type of disorder for psilocybin assisted psychotherapy, e.g. PTSD or alcoholism. U3191488 (discusscontribs) 13:23, 28 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Heading casing[edit source]

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example:

Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory

Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:57, 26 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]


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Title[edit source]

  1. The title is correctly worded and formatted
  2. The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted

User page[edit source]

  1. Excellent – used effectively
  2. Description about self provided
  3. Link(s) provided to professional profile(s)
  4. Link provided to book chapter

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. Very good – at least one contribution has been made and summarised, with a link
  2. Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions.
  3. Use a numbered list

Headings[edit source]

  1. See earlier comment about Heading casing
  2. Excellent – Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic
  3. Check and correct grammar (e.g., ownership apostrophes)

Key points[edit source]

  1. Excellent – key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations
  2. Overall, there is an excellent balance of theory, research, and application
  3. If the latter sections expand, then the background info about psilocybin could be abbreviated with internal wiki links to relevant book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information.
  4. Good use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters; consider adding more
  5. Patient experiences could be removed as a section, but included elsewhere as examples/case studies
  6. Conclusion (the most important section):
    1. Well developed
    2. Underway

Figure[edit source]

  1. Excellent – A relevant figure is presented
  2. Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text
  3. Cite each figure at least once in the main text

References[edit source]

  1. Excellent
  2. For APA referencing style, check and correct:
    1. capitalisation
    2. make dois into active hyperlinks

Resources[edit source]

  1. See also
    1. OK
    2. Rename links so that they are more user friendly
    3. Include source in brackets after link
    4. Also link to relevant book chapters
    5. Also link to relevant Wikipedia pages
  2. External links
    1. None provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:57, 26 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Comment[edit source]

Hey,

Your topic is incredibly intriguing. I would like to add a suggestion: A crucial point you might be missing regarding the negative risks of psilocybin is its risk of causing mental illness. Although it presents an interesting new up and coming therapeutic tool, those with a history of schizophrenia or psychosis are likely to encourage drug induced mental illness even if it is controlled. I found a source supporting this point. I would love to hear your thoughts on this as well :).

https://www.tandfonline.com/doi/abs/10.1080/15622970410029908 U3210431 (discusscontribs) 07:01, 5 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Comment[edit source]

Hi,

I find your topic very interesting and have enjoyed reading what you have so far on your topic. I noticed you have not yet added external links to your chapter. I have done some research and found a few sources that may be of interest to you as they may be relevant to include in your chapter.

The science of psilocybin and its use to relieve suffering (Youtube)

The future of psychedelic-assisted psychotherapy (Youtube) U3190094 (discusscontribs) 23:42, 9 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Book chapter review and feedback[edit source]

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem
  2. Ideally this would serve as a gateway to the other psilocybin chapters, so add embedded links where appropriate
  3. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits

Overview[edit source]

  1. Well developed Overview
  2. Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon
  3. Engages reader interest by introducing a case study and/or example and/or using an image
  4. Clear focus question(s)

Theory – Breadth[edit source]

  1. Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained
  2. How long does each session typically last?
  3. Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters)

Theory – Depth[edit source]

  1. Insightful depth is provided about the selected theory(ies)
  2. Some useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts

Research – Key findings[edit source]

  1. Relevant research is well reviewed

Research – Critical thinking[edit source]

  1. Excellent critical thinking about relevant research is evident
  2. Claims are well referenced

Integration[edit source]

  1. Discussion of theory and research is well integrated

Conclusion[edit source]

  1. Key points are well summarised
  2. Clear take-home message(s)

Written expression – Style[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is excellent
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections
  3. Grammar
    1. Check and make correct use of commas
    2. Use serial commas[1] – they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. See explanatory video (1 min)
    3. Check and correct use of affect vs. effect
    4. Figures
      1. Figures are well captioned
      2. Remove "The figure above"
      3. Figure captions should use this format: Figure X. Descriptive caption in sentence casing. See example
      4. Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text
    5. Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example:
      1. Suggest restricting to a maximum of 3 citations per point
      2. Do not include author initials
    6. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Check and correct use of capitalisation[2]
      2. Check and correct use of italicisation

Written expression – Learning features[edit source]

  1. Overall, the use of learning features is excellent
  2. Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles
  3. Excellent/Very good/Good/Basic/One/No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
  4. Very good use of image(s)
  5. No use of table(s)
  6. Basic use of feature box(es)
  7. Excellent use of quiz(zes)
  8. Very good use of case studies or examples
  9. Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section. Use sentence casing. Rename links. Include sources in parentheses. Add bullet-points.
  10. Very good use of external links in the "External links" section. Include sources in parentheses. Use bullet-points per Tutorial 02

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. ~11 logged, useful, minor to moderate social contributions with direct links to evidence
  2. Use a numbered list

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:04, 6 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an excellent presentation

Overview[edit source]

  1. An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed and narrated — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Include question mark for sub-title. Suggest using a stand-alone title slide then moving key points to next slide.
  2. Consider creating an engaging introduction to hook audience interest
  3. A context for the topic is established
  4. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation.

Content[edit source]

  1. Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section
  2. The presentation addresses the topic
  3. An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little
  4. The presentation is well structured (i.e., Overview, Content, Conclusion)
  5. The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory
  6. The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological research
  7. Excellent coverage of risks
  8. Excellent coverage of research limitation
  9. Include citations to support claims
  10. The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information

Conclusion[edit source]

  1. A Conclusion slide is presented with clear take-home message(s)

Audio[edit source]

  1. The audio is easy to follow and interesting to listen to
  2. The presentation makes effective use of narrated audio
  3. Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point
  4. Very good/ intonation
  5. The narration is well practiced
  6. Audio recording quality was OK. Microphone might be too close (some distoration). Review set-up.

Video[edit source]

  1. Overall, visual display quality is excellent
  2. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides
  3. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read
  4. Consider using a sans-serif typeface to make the text easier to read
  5. The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time
  6. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams
  7. The presentation is well produced using simple tools

Meta-data[edit source]

  1. The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation
  2. A written description of the presentation is provided
  3. Links to and from the book chapter are provided

Licensing[edit source]

  1. Image sources and their copyright status are communicated
  2. A copyright license for the presentation is provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:29, 13 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]