Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Physiological needs

Heading casing

Hi U3203655. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:43, 22 August 2022 (UTC)

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Hi there. Here is an interesting thread about Maslow's hierarchy if you are interested.

- Psychologist Scott Barry Kaufman has spent lots of time studying Maslow's work and dispels the notion that Maslow ever made it a pyramid. Read more about it here.

- Scott hosts the Psychology podcast, I highly recommend it as it is a scientific podcast unlike some pop-psych podcasts and particularly he spends lots of time on humanistic psychology. U3162201 (discuss • contribs) 01:44, 4 October 2022 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted User page Excellent – used effectively Excellent description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Excellent – at least one contribution has been made and summarised in a numbered list with direct link(s) to evidence Headings Overly complicated 3-level structure – consider simplifying to a 2-level structure. Consider refining and developing that structure (e.g., see suggestions that follow). Consider starting "physiological needs" or something like "what are physiological needs" before going into theories and research It may be not be necessary to have separate sections about Maslow's theory, Alderfer's theory etc. - consider synthesising, citing both and any others you think are relevant to help explain that there is a common agreement that PNs are a fundamental and vital component of motivation Then the chapter might consider a few example physiological needs and their motivational implications, with embedded links to dedicated chapters about these topics. In this way, the current chapter should be serving as a gateway chapter to more specific topics about aspects of physiological need motivation. Excellent – Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic Key points Basic development of key points for some sections Insufficient citation Overview - Consider adding: a brief, evocative description of the problem more developed focus questions an image an example or case study Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Consider including more examples/case studies Conclusion (the most important section): Under developed Figure Excellent – A relevant figure is presented and it is appropriately captioned Cite each figure at least once in the main text References None Resources See also Excellent Also link to related book chapters External links Very good Use sentence casing Rename links so that they are more user friendly (see Tutorial 02) Include source in brackets after link

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:32, 7 October 2022 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient chapter Ideally, this chapter would serve as a high-level, gateway chapter with embedded links to other related chapters (e.g., about needs theories and specific physiological needs) A major issue is the insufficient use of primary, peer-reviewed sources as citations Move non-peer reviewed links into the external links section Well under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Basic Overview Explain the problem or phenomenon in more detail Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest Clear focus question(s) Theory – Breadth Insufficient use of relevant psychological theory about this topic There is too much general theoretical material (e.g., neuroscience) that lacks clear relevance to the topic. Instead, summarise and link to further information (such as other book chapters or Wikipedia articles), to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question). Build more strongly on other physiological-related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters in this category: Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Physiological) Maslow's hierarchy is overused; an overly simplistic understanding of this model is presented Theory – Depth Insufficient use of relevant psychological theory Lack of sufficient citation Tables and/or lists could be used more effectively to help clearly convey key theoretical information More examples could be useful to illustrate key concepts. Perhaps consider highlighting and explaining how some specific physiological needs affect human behaviour. Research – Key findings Insufficient use of relevant psychological research Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful Research – Critical thinking Insufficient critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Many claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) Integration Insufficient integration of relevant theory and research The chapter places more emphasis on theory than research Conclusion Insufficient as a cohesive summary of what the best available psychological theory and research has to say about the topic Address the focus questions Clear take-home message(s) Add practical, take-home message(s) Written expression – Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. "People" is often a better term than "individuals" Layout Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections Grammar Check and correct use of possessive apostrophes (e.g., cats vs cat's vs cats')[1] Use serial commas[2] – they are part of APA style and agenerally recommended by grammaticists. See explanatory video (1 min) Check and correct use of affect vs. effect Proofreading Remove unnecessary capitalisation APA style Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc. Replace double spaces with single spaces Figures Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text Figure captions use the correct format Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text using APA style Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses Multiple citations in parentheses should be listed in alphabetical order by first author surname References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[3] Include hyperlinked dois Written expression – Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is excellent/very good/good/basic/insufficient Basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Good use of image(s) No use of table(s) Basic use of feature box(es) Basic use of quiz(zes) Insufficient use of case studies or examples Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Basic use of external links in the "External links" section Social contribution ~11 logged, useful, mostly minor, mostly late semester social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:08, 1 November 2022 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient presentation Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed and narrated — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation Create an engaging introduction to hook audience interest A context for the topic is established Briefly explain why this topic is important Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation focuses too much on general motivational theory (e.g., Maslow's hierarchy of needs and Alderfer's ERG theory - there are other dedicated chapters and presentations about these topics) rather than focusing more directly on physiological needs An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological theory Include citations The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples (e.g., what are some examples of physiological needs) or case studies Conclusion The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages Audio Audio communication is clear and well paced Basic intonation Audio recording quality was excellent There are mispronunciations (e.g., Alderfer vs. Adler) The narrated content isn't well matched to the target topic (see content) Video Overall, visual display quality is good The presentation makes use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is supplemented by images and/or diagrams The presentation is well produced using simple tools The visual content isn't well matched to the target topic (see content) Meta-data The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation A written description of the presentation is not provided A link to the book chapter is not provided The presentation is incorrectly categorised as being for kids. This introduces limitations, such as being unable to add the presentation to a playlist. More info. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. Either provide details about the image sources and their copyright licenses in the presentation description or remove the presentation. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:30, 7 November 2022 (UTC)

Book chapter resubmission feedback

These moderate to major changes were reviewed: ~600-700 words added

1. Overview: Very minor improvement
2. Some embedded links to Wikiversity pages have been added
3. Several citations have been added
4. Several quiz questions have been added
5. A "bigger picture" understanding of the motivational role of physiological needs is now evident
6. Much of the added material was about general motivational theory (including basic needs theory based on Maslow and Alderfer models, drive theory, arousal theory, and incentive theory). However, much of this material wasn't sufficiently related to the topic (physiological needs). There are other dedicated chapters about each of these topics. So, just briefly summarise these theories, provide links to the dedicated topics, and then provide a more detailed exploration about the motivational role of physiological needs.
7. More examples of physiological needs are provided, including some research
8. A much stronger Conclusion is provided

Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:42, 28 November 2022 (UTC)