Latest comment: 1 year ago4 comments3 people in discussion
Hi there, it looks like you're making great progress. I have made some minor grammatical changes that I hope improve the clarity of some sections. I also wondered whether your third SDT paragraph should read "Harvey et al. (2015) researched how the two forms of perfectionism were linked to university students' motivation to pursue academic goals during a semester. Their results demonstrated that perfectionistic concerns were significantly positively related to autonomous motivation"? Good luck with the rest of your chapter.
U3141987 (discuss • contribs) 01:31, 10 October 2022 (UTC)Reply
Hi there, thankyou for your feedback. You were definitely right re: the Harvey et al. (2015) observation, thankyou! I ended up having too many words so have had to delete that section. I appreciate the time you put into reading my chapter! Many thanks AEMOR (discuss • contribs) 23:18, 12 October 2022 (UTC)Reply
Hi, I feel that maybe the definition of perfectionism could be expanded. For instance how it manifests in people differently. - U3216502
Hello!
I was reading through your plan so far for the topic development, it all sounds really good and its clear you've done thorough research, great work! I did have a suggestion that perhaps after the sections involving theory at the start of the chapter, maybe you could put a short quiz in there? I just know as a uni student that theory can be a lot to read through sometimes so a quiz might break up the information and keep the reader engaged.
Latest comment: 2 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
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Brief description about self provided – consider expanding
Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
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Check and correct use of possessive apostrophes (e.g., cats vs cat's vs cats').
APA style
Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159).
Figures
Figures are very well used.
Figure captions use the correct format.
Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text using APA style.
Overall, the use of learning features is excellent.
Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example.
No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
Excellent use of image(s).
Excellent use of table(s).
Excellent use of feature box(es).
Good use of case studies or examples.
Excellent use of interwiki links in the "See also" section.
Excellent use of external links in the "External links" section.
Latest comment: 1 year ago1 comment1 person in discussion
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The presentation makes effective use of animated slides
The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read
The amount of text presented per slide could be reduced to make it easier to read and listen at the same time e.g., split motivators of perfectionism into separate slides
The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams
The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation
A written description of the presentation is provided