Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Neuroimaging and mood disorders

Topic development feedback

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted User page Excellent – used effectively Excellent description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Excellent – at least one contribution has been made and summarised in a numbered list with direct link(s) to evidence Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Headings Promising, overly complicated 3-level structure – consider simplifying to a 2-level structure Keep the background about mood disorders and neuroimagining as stand-alone concepts relatively brief, with embedded links to further info. Remove colons from headings Expand the section about "neuroimaging and mood disorders" and consider making it a top-level heading because it should be the main focus of the chapter Key points Promising development of key points for each section, with relevant citations Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal wiki links to relevant book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content of this on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Overview - Consider adding: a brief, evocative description of the problem focus questions - consider simplifying the questions to focus on the last 3 questions an image an example or case study Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research Excellent use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Promising use of examples/case studies Conclusion (the most important section): Hasn't been developed Figure Excellent – A relevant figure is presented and it is appropriately captioned Cite each figure at least once in the main text References Good For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation Resources See also OK Use sentence casing Use internal linking style (see Tutorial 02) Also link to relevant Wikipedia pages External links OK Use bullet-points (see Tutorial 02) Use sentence casing Include source in brackets after link

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:35, 7 October 2022 (UTC)

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter. It successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. Well over the maximum word count. The content beyond 4000 words has been ignored for marking purposes. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Solid Overview Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest Clear focus question(s) Theory – Breadth An excellent range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Theory – Depth Insightful depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Research – Key findings Excellent review of relevant research Research – Critical thinking Excellent critical thinking about relevant research is evident Claims are referenced Integration Excellent integration between theory and research Conclusion Excellent summary and conclusion Reminds the reader about the importance of the problem or phenomenon of interest Key points are well summarised Addresses the focus questions Written expression – Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is very good The main issue is being over the maximum word count Internationalise: Write for an international, rather than domestic, audience. Australians make up only 0.32% of the world human population. Use permanent, rather than relative, time references. For example, instead of "20 years ago", refer to something like "at the beginning of the 21st century". In this way, the text will survive better into the future, without needing to be rewritten. Grammar, spelling, and proofreading are excellent Figures Figures are very well captioned Figure captions use the correct format Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1) Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: List multiple citations in alphabetical order by first author surname References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[1] Written expression – Learning features Excellent use of learning features Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Very good use of image(s) No use of table(s) Excellent use of feature box(es) Excellent use of quiz(zes) Basic use of case studies or examples Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Use internal linking style per Tutorial 02 Very good use of external links in the "External links" section Use sentence casing Include sources in parentheses Social contribution ~3 logged, useful, minor/moderate/major social contributions with direct links to evidence. ~17 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess Most contributions were well after the original due date for book chapters

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:21, 21 November 2022 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent presentation Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed. Also narrate — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A context for the topic is clearly established through an example Focus questions/topics are presented Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic The presentation is well structured (i.e., Overview, Content, Conclusion) The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes implied use of relevant psychological research; ideally make more explicit use of research Consider including citations to support claims The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with excellent take-home message(s) Audio The audio is interesting to listen to Audio communication is well paced Excellent intonation enhances listener interest and engagement The narration is well practiced/performed The narration could benefit from further practice Audio recording quality was very good. However, the audio did sound "choppy" as though each sentence was recorded separately (which is probably was). Video Overall, visual display quality is excellent The presentation makes effective use of text and stock video The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read Consider using sentence casing rather than all caps for the headings The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams and/or video The presentation is very well produced Meta-data The chapter sub-title but not the chapter title is used in the name of the presentation. The title would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. Links to and from the book chapter are provided Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are communicated A copyright license for the presentation is provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:12, 22 November 2022 (UTC)