Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Needle fear

Heading casing

Hi U3166273. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:20, 27 August 2022 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:15, 7 October 2022 (UTC)

Children needle fear

Very interesting topic! I work in a medical centre and always see children with needle phobias attending the practice. One thing I have learnt through observation/the nurses telling stories is that most needle phobias from kids comes from the parent being overly worried - the fear must come from somewhere! It would be interesting to see how parents who are not scared of needles pass this fear down to their children. At our centre we offer these families the choice to call when they are in the carpark and the nurse will get them when she is ready, I personally find this making the situation more serious/dramatic/scary so I wonder if there is any research behind this too. --GeorgiaFairweather (discuss • contribs) 11:28, 10 October 2022 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title The title and sub-title are incorrect. Be consistent with the book table of contents. User page Good Brief description about self provided – consider expanding Very brief description about self provided – consider expanding Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution At least one contribution has been made and summarised with indirect link(s) to evidence Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Headings See earlier comment about Heading casing Well-developed, mostly 2-level heading structure Effective use of questions as the top-level headings The original sub-title offers a pretty clear top-level structure (it contains three questions) which partly matches the proposed heading structure. Key points Promising, partial development of key points for each section, with limited use of relevant citations For sections which include sub-sections include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings Overview - Consider adding: focus questions an image an example or case study Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Consider including more examples/case studies Conclusion (the most important section): Under developed Generally well-written, but I recommend using the Studiosity service and/or a service like Grammarly to help improve the quality of written expression because there are a lot of grammatical and spelling errors. Figure A relevant figure is presented Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text Cite each figure at least once in the main text References Move non-peer-reviewed sources to External links Not all references have been cited For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation make doi hyperlinks active (i.e., clickable) Resources See also External links Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:15, 7 October 2022 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem' The sub-title has been corrected to match the index of topics For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Well developed Overview Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon Engages reader interest by introducing a case study and/or example and/or using an image Clear/Basic focus question(s) The focus questions could be improved by being more specific to the topic (i.e., the sub-title) Ideally, provide open-ended, rather than closed-ended focus questions Add focus questions in a feature box to help guide the reader and structure the chapter Theory – Breadth An excellent range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Build more strongly on other fear-related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters in this category: Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Fear) Theory – Depth Insightful depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Key citations are well used Research – Key findings Excellent review of relevant research Research – Critical thinking Very good critical thinking about relevant research is evident Claims are mostly referenced Integration Excellent integration between theory and research Conclusion Excellent summary and conclusion Key points are well summarised Provides practical, take-home message(s) Written expression – Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is very good Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes. "People" is often a better term than "individuals" Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags) Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages.[2] Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance. Check and make correct use of commas Use serial commas[3] – they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. See explanatory video (1 min) Abbreviations Once an abbreviation is established (e.g., CBT), use it consistently. Don't set up an abbreviation and then not use it or only use it sometimes. Spelling Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour) APA style Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159) Figures Figures are very well captioned Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text Citations use correct APA style References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of italicisation Written expression – Learning features Excellent use of learning features Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Excellent use of image(s) No use of table(s) Excellent use of feature box(es) Excellent use of quiz(zes) Excellent use of case studies or examples Very good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Also include links to related Wikipedia articles Excellent use of external links in the "External links" section Social contribution ~8 logged, useful, minor/moderate/major social contributions with direct links to evidence Use a numbered list per Tutorial 02

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:43, 20 November 2022 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a very good presentation Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed. The sub-title is narrated. Also narrate the title — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation Consider creating an engaging introduction to hook audience interest Establish a context for the topic (e.g., by using an example or explaining why it is important), to help the viewer understand Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little The presentation is well structured (i.e., Overview, Content, Conclusion) The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological research Include citations to support claims The presentation makes very good use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with very good take-home message(s) Audio The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio Audio communication is reasonably well paced The audio is hard to follow because of the pronunciation/accent. Consider improving articulation to enhance the clarity of speech. Video Overall, visual display quality is excellent The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams The presentation is very well produced Meta-data The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Check and correct the sub-title capitalisation. A written description of the presentation is provided Excellent use of time codes A link to the book chapter is provided but it goes to a specific section rather than the top of the chapter A link from the book chapter is provided The presentation is incorrectly categorised as being for kids. This introduces limitations, such as being unable to add the presentation to a playlist. More info. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. A copyright license for the presentation is provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:26, 22 November 2022 (UTC)