Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Fear

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Suggestion[edit source]

Hi,

This is an incredible topic! I wonder if you might be able to bring in the fight or flight response in the overview or maybe the "what is fear?" heading. This could bring in examples of when there might be benefits to fear. Additionally, I think it would be very interesting to add where fear happens in the brain and how we come to be fearful. I have found a reference that might be beneficial for you to start thinking about this. I can't wait to read this chapter once completed!

https://www.sciencedirect.com/science/article/pii/S0987705303000091?casa_token=Wju1BAc9dfQAAAAA:E-lrjW1C4gOm3rgn6F-aZDF7z2embQGvpgyU_0ZYdCH2La7RMLb7xMKHLSNX1CEP2m9i2_rTap24 U3210431 (discusscontribs) 05:25, 27 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]


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Title[edit source]

  1. The title is correctly worded and formatted
  2. The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted

User page[edit source]

  1. Excellent – used effectively
  2. Description about self provided
  3. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
  4. Link provided to book chapter

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. Excellent – at least one contribution has been made and summarised in a numbered list with direct link(s) to evidence

Headings[edit source]

  1. Excellent – Well developed 3-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic
  2. The recap quizzes could be embedded within the Conclusion or within the relevant corresponding sections

Key points[edit source]

  1. Excellent – key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations
  2. Overview - Consider adding:
    1. an evocative description of the problem and what will be covered
    2. an example or case study
  3. Good balance of theory and research - make sure to include reference to major reviews and/or meta-analyses etc.
  4. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters.
  5. Consider including more examples/case studies
  6. Conclusion (the most important section):
    1. Well developed

Figure[edit source]

  1. A figure is presented
  2. Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text
  3. Cite each figure at least once in the main text
  4. Consider decreasing image size

References[edit source]

  1. Excellent
  2. For APA referencing style, check and correct:
    1. page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-)

Resources[edit source]

  1. See also
    1. Very good
    2. Also link to relevant book chapters
  2. External links
    1. Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:52, 27 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

As per our discussions[edit source]

Hi,

I really like the use of boxes and questions like we discussed.

I would also move some more questions earlier in the chapter to make sure that it doesn't feel like a quiz.


Keep up the good work :)

- Sebastian Armstrong Sebastian Armstrong (discusscontribs) 09:29, 2 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for showing me how to add in the boxes. It makes my chapter looks a lot better. Icantchooseone (discusscontribs) 09:22, 16 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Reference list[edit source]

Hi, I noticed that the references that you used in your Case study have not been added to your Reference list yet Sebastian Armstrong (discusscontribs) 03:52, 14 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you so much for that. I have updated the reference list now. Icantchooseone (discusscontribs) 09:21, 16 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Book chapter review and feedback[edit source]

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
  2. Over the maximum word count.
  3. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits.

Overview[edit source]

  1. Well developed Overview.
  2. Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon.
  3. Clear focus question(s).

Theory – Breadth[edit source]

  1. Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained.
  2. Builds somewhat on other fear-related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters in this category: Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Fear).

Theory – Depth[edit source]

  1. Appropriate depth is provided about the selected theory(ies).
  2. Many useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts.

Research – Key findings[edit source]

  1. Relevant research is well reviewed.
  2. Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful.

Research – Critical thinking[edit source]

  1. Very good critical thinking about research is evident.
  2. Claims are referenced.
  3. The quality of some sources could be improved; several are not academic sources (e.g., web-pages).

Integration[edit source]

  1. Discussion of theory and research is well integrated.

Conclusion[edit source]

  1. Key points are well summarised.
  2. Clear take-home message(s).

Written expression – Style[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is very good.
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
  3. Grammar, spelling, and proofreading are excellent.
    1. Figures
      1. Figures are very well used.
      2. Figures are very well captioned.
      3. Figure captions use the correct format.
      4. Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text using APA style.
    2. Tables
      1. Table captions should use APA style. See example.
      2. Tables are referred to using APA style.
    3. Citations use correct APA style.
    4. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Check and correct use of capitalisation[1]
      2. Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-)

Written expression – Learning features[edit source]

  1. Overall, the use of learning features is excellent.
  2. Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example.
  3. Basic use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
  4. Excellent use of image(s).
  5. Excellent use of table(s).
  6. Excellent use of feature box(es).
  7. Excellent use of questions.
  8. Excellent use of case studies or examples.
  9. Excellent use of interwiki links in the "See also" section.
  10. Excellent use of external links in the "External links" section.

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. ~13 logged, useful minor to major social contributions with direct links to evidence.
  2. Note that this edit, however, was incorrect in terms of APA style: https://en.wikiversity.org/w/index.php?title=Motivation_and_emotion/Book/2022/Fully_functioning_person&diff=prev&oldid=2439378&diffmode=source

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:08, 29 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Comment[edit source]

I enjoyed this chapter! I've been thinking a lot about fear vs anxiety this semester it feels so odd to think of the emotion I have surrounding assessment for example as fear instead of anxiety. I liked your brief dip into culture of fear do you know if there are any other examples in history of creating a culture of fear? War time perhaps?--U3037979 (discusscontribs) 22:50, 29 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an excellent presentation

Overview[edit source]

  1. An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed and narrated — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation
  2. This presentation has an engaging introduction to hook audience interest
  3. A context for the topic is established
  4. Focus questions are presented

Content[edit source]

  1. Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section
  2. The presentation addresses the topic
  3. An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little
  4. The presentation is well structured (i.e., Overview, Content, Conclusion)
  5. The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory
  6. The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological research
  7. The presentation includes citations
  8. The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice
  9. The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information

Conclusion[edit source]

  1. A Conclusion slide is presented with excellent take-home message(s)

Audio[edit source]

  1. The audio is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to listen to
  2. The presentation makes effective use of narrated audio
  3. Audio communication is clear and well paced
  4. Excellent intonation enhances listener interest and engagement
  5. The narration is well polished
  6. Audio recording quality was very good
  7. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., keyboard and/or mouse clicks were audible). Consider using an external microphone.

Video[edit source]

  1. Overall, visual display quality is excellent
  2. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides
  3. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. However, consider reducing the text on some slides and increasing the font size.
  4. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams. Excellent use of simple, high-contrast graphics.
  5. The presentation is well produced using simple tools

Meta-data[edit source]

  1. The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation
  2. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.
  3. Links to and from the book chapter are provided

Licensing[edit source]

  1. Image sources and their copyright status are communicated. However, I am doubtful that the Figures are from MS Powerpoint?
  2. A copyright license for the presentation is provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:37, 7 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Embracing fear[edit source]

Hi, I really enjoyed the knowledge and insight you have incorporated in your book chapter.

I'm curious if it's worthwhile to consider the potential benefits of fear. For example, experiencing warning indications that raise our body's alertness to prepare for action, avoiding harmful actions, staying accountable to your commitments, and so on? Jingying Chen (discusscontribs) 14:04, 16 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]