Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Embarrassment

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:27, 25 September 2022 (UTC) Picture suggestion Thank you for such an informative read! The only thing I suggest is to add a picture or something to break up the overview section so it's not so wordy. Otherwise I think it was really good :) Gabrielle Eagling - c 16:37, 9 October 2022

Topic development feedback

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted Remove author name – authorship is as per the page's editing history User page Excellent – used effectively Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Right idea, however, I've reverted the edits because the heading style for this uses sentence casing (yes, differs from APA style) Headings Promising 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development by expanding the structure See earlier comment about Heading casing Good use of questions as headings Consider how to shorten some of the longer headings It makes logical sense to use the sub-title questions as top-level headings. Consider further development of sub-headings in those sections. Key points Excellent – key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations Use peer-reviewed academic sources as citations; other external links could be moved into the external link section Promising development of key points for each section, with relevant citations# Use numbered lists or bullet points (see Tutorial 1 - Using Wikiversity) For sections which include sub-sections include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings Avoid overuse of "individual" - instead, try "people" (more friendly). Overview - Well developed. Consider adding: an image an example or case study Good balance of theory and research Excellent use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Promising use of examples/case studies Avoid overcapitalisation (APA style) - more info Conclusion (the most important section): Hasn't been developed Figure A relevant figure is presented Caption should include Figure X. ... Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text Cite each figure at least once in the main text Consider positioning the image on the right which will allow text to flow around References Good Remove non-peer reviewed sources (could be used in the External link section instead) Remove "Retrieved from ..." (no longer part of APA style) For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation inclusion of journal title page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Resources See also Good Use internal linking style for the first link Also link to relevant Wikipedia pages External links OK See tutorial 1 for how to add and format external links Include source in brackets after link

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:27, 25 September 2022 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a solid chapter that makes good use of psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Overview Solid Overview. Have broken it up; was a very long paragraph. Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon. Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest. Clear focus question(s). Theory – Breadth Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained. The chapter doesn't wander off into discussion of irrelevant theory. The coverage of neuroscience and humour were excellent. Useful detail. Explains embarrassment in the context of related emotions. Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters). Theory – Depth Appropriate depth is provided about the selected theory(ies). Key citations are well used. Tables and/or lists could be used more effectively to help clearly convey key theoretical information. Some useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts. Research – Key findings Relevant research is reviewed. However, there are places which lack sufficient citation. Research – Critical thinking Very good critical thinking about research is evident. Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). Integration Discussion of theory and research is well integrated. Using research studies as case studies worked well. Conclusion Reasonably good summary. A very long paragraph; have split up. Clear take-home message(s). Written expression – Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is varied. In some places it is excellent, but in other respects it is problematic. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. "People" is often a better term than "individuals". Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections. Use the default heading style (e.g., remove additional bold). Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance. Spelling Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour). Proofreading More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard. APA style Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc.. Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159). Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10). Figures Figures violated copyright; they were uploaded under the false claim of "own work". They've been nominated for deletion. Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[1] Include hyperlinked dois Remove line breaks Written expression – Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is very good. Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Problematic use of image(s). Figure 3 should ideally be presented as an editable table. Very good use of feature box(es). No use of quiz(zes). Good use of case studies or examples. Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section. Excellent use of external links in the "External links" section. Use bullet-points and numbered lists, per Tutorial 02. Social contribution ~2 logged, useful, minor/moderate/major social contributions with direct links to evidence.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:25, 31 October 2022 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a very good presentation Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Also communicate the title and sub-title by narrating. This presentation has an opening scenario to hook audience interest Focus questions are presented Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little The presentation is well structured (i.e., Overview, Content, Conclusion) The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological research The presentation includes citations The presentation makes good use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with clear take-home message(s) Audio The audio is easy to follow Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point Good intonation The narration is well practiced Audio recording quality was excellent Video Overall, visual display quality is good The presentation makes good use of text and image based slides Some of the font size could be larger to make it easier to read The amount of text presented per slide could be reduced to make it easier to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is supplemented in a basic way by images and/or diagrams The presentation is well produced using simple tools Meta-data The correct chapter title and sub-title are missing from the name of the presentation — this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. Links to and from the book chapter are provided Licensing Image sources are communicated Image copyright status is not provided. This presentation has probably violated the copyrights of image owners as images appear to have been used without permission and/or acknowledgement. A copyright license for the presentation is provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:36, 9 November 2022 (UTC)