Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Ecological grief

Heading casing

Hi Brewerjr. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:07, 22 August 2022 (UTC)

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Title Title wording correct; casing fixed Subtitle wording and casing correct User page Very good Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. External link provided to book chapter - use internal linking (see Tutorial 02) Social contribution At least one contribution has been made and summarised with indirect link(s) to evidence 1st link doesn't work When grammar is fixed, remove the grammar tags Headings See earlier comment about Heading casing - this includes for theories (i.e. don't capitalise per APA style) Excellent – Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic Check grammar (e.g., use of ownership apostrophes, use of question marks) Future research could be more about practical applications for everyday readers, although research suggestions could be part of that Key points Excellent – key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations Provide brief background context about "grief" before applying to "ecological grief". Provide an embedded link(s) to previous chapters about grief. Consider reducing the emphasis on broad/general emotion theories and focusing more specifically on grief/eco-grief theories. Provide an embedded link to the Wikipedia article about the bushfires for the case study Perhaps consider the pros and cons of EG (e.g., there is suggestion that it may motivate proenvironmental behaviour) - this is a potentially theoretically and research rich area. When is it good? When is it not so good? etc. Overview - Consider adding: replace quote with an evocative description of the problem and what will be covered focus questions an image an example or case study Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Conclusion (the most important section): Well developed Figure A relevant figure is presented and it is appropriately captioned Figure 1 was removed for copyright violation Cite each figure at least once in the main text Consider decreasing image size from to make it easier to view and aligning it to the right so that the text flows around the image References Good For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation doi formatting - links should be active hyperlinks Resources See also Very good Use sentence casing Some links are broken (red) External links Target an international audience; Australians only represent 0.33% of the world population Provide more topic-specific resources

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Comment

Hey, I love your page. We have a similar topic so I will show you an article I found to be great. Comtesse, H., Ertl, V., Hengst, S. M., Rosner, R., & Smid, G. E. (2021). Ecological grief as a response to environmental change: a mental health risk or functional response?. International journal of environmental research and public health, 18(2), 734. https://doi.org/10.3390/ijerph18020734

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Overall Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter Well under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Basic Overview Basic explanation of the problem or phenomenon Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest Focus question(s) are underdeveloped. These are not key questions: Who first coined the term ecological grief? What are some of the noticeable impacts of climate change in your community? (could be a useful reflection) The focus questions could be improved by being more specific to the topic (i.e., the sub-title) There should be no sub-headings in the Overview. Theory – Breadth Basic but sufficient coverage of relevant theory is provided What are some synonymous or closely related terms? (e.g., consider eco-grief (briefly) in the context of other ecologically-related human emotions) There is too much general theoretical material (e.g., Kübler-Ross's 5 stages of grief - has this been applied to eco-grief?). Instead, summarise and link to further information (such as other book chapters or Wikipedia articles), to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question) Table which unpacked three types of eco-grief was helpful. It also provided some useful examples, including research. More of this would be ideal. Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters such as the one about solastalgia) Theory – Depth Basic depth is provided about the selected theory(ies) Tables and/or lists are used effectively to help clearly convey key theoretical information More examples could be useful to illustrate key concepts Research – Key findings Basic overview of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful Research – Critical thinking Basic critical thinking about research is evident A basic suggestion is made to improve measurement. How has it been measured so far? What are the limitations of these measures? Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Some claims are referenced Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) Integration There is basic integration between theory and research Conclusion Basic summary Written expression – Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead: it is, most often, not needed at all, or use section linking Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes. "People" is often a better term than "individuals" Layout Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance. Check and make correct use of commas Check and correct use of that vs. who Figures Figures are well captioned Check and update figure numbering. Figure 3 was removed due to copyright violation. Figure captions should use this format: Figure X. Descriptive caption in sentence casing. See example Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text using APA style Tables Table captions should use APA style. See example Refer to each Table at least once within the main text (e.g., see Table 1) Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) Do not include author initials Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses Multiple citations in parentheses should be listed in alphabetical order by first author surname References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[2] Move non-peer-reviewed sources to the external links section Written expression – Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is basic Good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Good use of image(s) Basic use of table(s) Basic use of feature box(es) Good use of quiz(zes) Promising use of case studies or examples. More would be ideal. The Ash Wednesday example sounds to me more like PTSD from environmental disaster than eco-grief. Excellent use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Basic use of external links in the "External links" section. Most of the links were too general, so have been removed. Social contribution ~5 logged social contributions with direct links to evidence Some of the edits were problematic (e.g., incorrect grammar fixes, adding nowiki tags etc.)

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation Overview An opening slide with the sub-title is displayed. Also display and narrate the title — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. This presentation has a basic introduction to engage audience interest Consider ways of creating an engaging introduction to hook audience interest A context for the topic is established Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological research Include citations The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies Conclusion The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages Audio Audio loudness varies between slides Koo-bler (pronunciation) Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio Basic intonation Audio recording quality was OK. Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality Check and correct spelling (e.g., solastalgia) Overall, visual display quality is good The presentation makes basic use of text-based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The amount of text presented per slide makes it reasonably easy to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is supplemented by images and/or diagrams The presentation is basically produced using simple tools Hide the audio icon Video No comment Meta-data The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. The sub-title (or an abbreviation of the sub-title that fits within the 100 character limit) would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. A link to the book chapter is not provided A link from the book chapter is provided The presentation is incorrectly categorised as being for kids. This introduces limitations, such as being unable to add the presentation to a playlist. More info. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. Either provide details about the image sources and their copyright licenses in the presentation description or remove the presentation. This presentation has probably violated the copyrights of image owners as images appear to have been used without permission and/or acknowledgement A copyright license for the presentation is not provided

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