I really enjoyed looking at how you set this out, really helpful and the use of the figures helps explain your evidence, perhaps a more specific integration of them in the final chapter would enhance the chapter.--Cedevlin9 (discuss • contribs) 02:15, 27 August 2022 (UTC)Reply
Latest comment: 4 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
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Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
Latest comment: 2 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
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Very brief description about self provided – consider expanding
Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
Link provided to book chapter (rename link to make it more user-friendly)
At least one contribution has been made and summarised with indirect link(s) to evidence
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Latest comment: 2 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
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Overall, the quality of written expression is below professional standard. UC Study Skills assistance is recommended to help improve writing skills
Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes.
"People" is often a better term than "individuals"
The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance.
Check and correct use of possessive apostrophes (e.g., cats vs cat's vs cats')[2]
Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the [spelling?] tags). Spell-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages.
Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour)
Proofreading
More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard
Remove unnecessary capitalisation
APA style
Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10)
Replace double spaces with single spaces
Figures
Figure captions should use this format: Figure X. Descriptive caption in sentence casing. See example
Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text using APA style
Refer to each Figure using APA style (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation)
Very few references :(
References are not in full APA style. For example:
Overall, the use of learning features is insufficient
No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example.
No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
One use of image(s)
No use of table(s)
Basic use of feature box(es)
Basic use of quiz(zes)
The quiz questions could be more effective as learning prompts by being embedded as single questions within each corresponding section rather than being presented as a set of questions at the end
No use of case studies or examples
Very good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section. Also include links to relevant Wikipedia articles.
Poor use of external links in the "External links" section. Move academic articles into References. See Tutorial 02 for how to format external links.
Latest comment: 1 year ago1 comment1 person in discussion
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Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section
The presentation somewhat addresses the topic
An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little
It could be helpful to point the ERG model as a simplified version of Maslow's hierarchy of needs. It may also be helpful to point out the alternative two-level model (deficit vs. growth needs).
The presentation is well structured (i.e., Overview, Content, Conclusion)
The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory
The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological research
The presentation includes citations
The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice
The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information
A Conclusion slide is presented. Include the take-home message(s)
Yes, people are motivated by different things, but the ERG model (like Maslow's hierarchy of needs) that lower levels need to be reasonably satisfied in order to support pursuit of higher needs.
The presentation makes effective use of narrated audio
Audio communication is clear and well paced
Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
Good intonation enhances listener interest and engagement
The narration is well polished
Audio recording quality was poor. Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., keyboard and/or mouse clicks were audible). Consider using an external microphone.
The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Check capitalisation.
A written description of the presentation is not provided.
Links to and from the book chapter are provided. However a mobile link to the chapter is provided - use a desktop link (mobiles will adjust automatically).
The presentation is incorrectly categorised as being for kids. This introduces limitations, such as being unable to add the presentation to a playlist. More info.