Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Disappointment

Minor suggestions

Hi! I think your chapter is coming along really well, especially at this stage of the semester. My main suggestions would be to have a think about adding some more case studies, particularly earlier in the chapter. I also noticed that in your paragraph about whether disappointment should be managed, you referred to Table 1, even though I think it was meant to be Table 2. Hope that helps and good job! Ana028 (discuss • contribs) 09:28, 19 September 2022 (UTC)

Hey there! This chapter is extensive and more importantly very clear and concise which I appreciate, having struggled with this very thing during the writing of my own chapter. Don't really have too many suggestions however it might be interesting to explore the effects of disappointment in children and how there is some research suggesting emotion masking of disappointment actually leads to positive differences in cognition. --U3210264 (discuss • contribs) 07:54, 5 October 2022 (UTC)

Hi, your chapter looks great. It's very well-written and easy to understand. I added some links to your page to other Wikipedia pages for some of the technical words used. You have already done this well, but I added a couple you didn't include that I thought would be helpful. Feel free to remove the links if you want. I added links for the following terms: prefrontal cortex, orbitofrontal cortex, stimuli (I specifically linked to the psychology definition of stimuli) and neurological. I also noticed that you didn't reference disappointment in the first case study (about the uno game). It may be good to include an explanation of how it related to disappointment somewhere like you did for your other case studies. I hope this helps :) - --GabbieUC (discuss • contribs) 01:56, 9 October 2022 (UTC)

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted User page Excellent – used effectively Description about self provided Link(s) provided to professional profile(s) Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Excellent – at least one contribution has been made and summarised in a numbered list with indirect link(s) to evidence To add direct links: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Headings Excellent – Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic Key points Excellent – key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations Good balance of theory and research Reeve (2018) is over-used as a citation; can you go back to the original sources? Note that when multiple citations are used, they should be in alphabetical order Figure Excellent – A relevant figure is presented and it is appropriately captioned Figure(s) are cited at least once in the main text References Excellent For APA referencing style, check and correct: Remove publisher location (no longer used in 7th ed.) Resources See also Excellent External links Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:47, 27 September 2022 (UTC)

Reeve (2018) as a citation

Consider removing Reeve (2018) as a citation (e.g., especially where there are multiple citations) because it is not a primary, peer-reviewed source and the chapter is generally very well referenced already. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:49, 30 September 2022 (UTC)

Minor suggestion

Hi, Am a bit confused as to the 3 x case study boxes within the "What causes disappointment" subheading, i.e., amongst all the neuroanatomy info. I'd suggest moving them to the next sub-heading "How disappointment can be managed" - IF they are relevant to each of the three strategies. I'd probably flesh out the 'should disappointment be managed' section with some more recent peer-reviewed sources, as it's a really interesting part of your chapter. I'd also wonder whether info about developmental influences could also be relevant (alongside the neuroanatomical contributions)? U943292 (discuss • contribs) 00:04, 3 October 2022 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Overview Well developed Overview. Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon. Clear focus question(s). Theory – Breadth Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained. Build more strongly on other emotion-related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters in this category: Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Emotion). Theory – Depth Appropriate depth is provided about the selected theory(ies). Some useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts. Research – Key findings Relevant research is well reviewed. Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Research – Critical thinking Excellent critical thinking about research is evident. Claims are referenced. Integration Discussion of theory and research is well integrated. Conclusion Key points are well summarised. Clear take-home message(s). Written expression – Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is excellent. Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Grammar, spelling, and proofreading are excellent. Figures Figures are well used. Figures are very well captioned. Figure captions use the correct format. Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text using APA style. Tables Table captions use APA style. Tables are referred to using APA style. Each Table is referred to at least once within the main text. Citations use correct APA style. References use correct APA style. Written expression – Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is excellent. Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. o use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Very good use of image(s). Excellent use of table(s). Excellent use of feature box(es). Excellent use of quiz(zes). Excellent use of case studies or examples. Excellent use of interwiki links in the "See also" section. Excellent use of external links in the "External links" section. Social contribution ~60 logged, useful minor to major social contributions with direct links to evidence. Thanks very much for your extensive contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:51, 29 October 2022 (UTC)

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-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:04, 7 November 2022 (UTC)