Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/DMT and spirituality

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for sentence casing. For example, the wikitext should be: == Cats and mice == rather than == Cats and Mice == -- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:33, 13 September 2020 (UTC) Heading casing issue was fixed as of (Latest revision as of 07:34, 9 November 2020) U3187226 (discuss • contribs) 07:52, 9 November 2020 (UTC) Things to consider Linking multimedia video Expanding point ideas into paragraph form Incomplete sections (Is DMT dangerous?, Subjective effects, Depression, Conclusion) Overview is an outline and summary of the whole chapter. Consider moving the sub-focus questions under a new heading. Recovered loss references which you may have been accidentally deleted during an edit Blair, R. J. R. (2004). The roles of orbital frontal cortex in the modulation of antisocial behavior. Brain and Cognition, 55(1), 198-208. https://doi.org/10.1016/S0278-2626(03)00276-8 Buckholtz, J. W., & Meyer-Lindenberg, A. (2008). MAOA and the neurogenetic architecture of human aggression. Trends in Neurosciences, 31(3), 120-129. https://doi.org/10.1016/j.tins.2007.12.006 Eckardt, M., File, S., Gessa, G., Grant, K., Guerri, C., Hoffman, P., & Tabakoff, B. (1998). Effects of moderate alcohol consumption on the central nervous system. Alcoholism, Clinical and Experimental Research, 22(5), 998-1040. https://doi.org/10.1111/j.1530-0277.1998.tb03695.x Griffiths, R. R., Hurwitz, E. S., Davis, A. K., Johnson, M. W., & Jesse, R. (2019). Survey of subjective" God encounter experiences": Comparisons among naturally occurring experiences and those occasioned by the classic psychedelics psilocybin, LSD, ayahuasca, or DMT. PloS one, 14(4), e0214377.https://doi.org/10.1371/journal.pone.0214377 Cameron, L. P., Benson, C. J., DeFelice, B. C., Fiehn, O., & Olson, D. E. (2019). Chronic, intermittent microdoses of the psychedelic N, N-Dimethyltryptamine (DMT) produce positive effects on mood and anxiety in rodents. ACS chemical neuroscience, 10(7), 3261-3270.https://doi.org/10.1021/acschemneuro.8b00692 Timmermann, C., Roseman, L., Williams, L., Erritzoe, D., Martial, C., Cassol, H., ... & Carhart-Harris, R. (2018). DMT models the near-death experience. Frontiers in psychology, 9, 1424.https://doi.org/10.3389/fpsyg.2018.01424 U3187226 (discuss • contribs) 07:52, 9 November 2020 (UTC)

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Title and sub-title OK Very good Sub-title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents Capitalisation of the title/sub-title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents Authorship details removed - authorship is as per the page's editing history Excellent User page Basic, sufficient Add working link to book chapter Social contribution Summarised with link(s) to evidence. Use a numbered list. Section headings Focus more specifically in on "How can DMT facilitate spiritual experiences?" (and less about DMT per se). Basic, 2-level heading structure Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Key points Incomplete Overview: focus questions. an image. a case study. Remove or adapt generic template content. Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise generic concepts and provide internal wiki links to further information. Then focus most of the content on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Basic development of key points for some sections. Theory? Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Consider including more examples/case studies. Conclusion (the most important section) hasn't been developed. Image An image (figure) is presented. Caption uses APA style. explains how the image connects to key points being made in the main text. Figure(s) are cited at least once in the main text. Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References Good. For full APA style, use: correct capitalisation the new recommended format for dois Resources See also Excellent External links Very good

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:33, 13 September 2020 (UTC)

Suggest looking at Dr Rick Strassman's studies as they are well research and documented. U3191488 (discuss • contribs) 13:39, 28 August 2022 (UTC)

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted User page Very good Description about self provided Brief description about self provided – consider expanding Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution None summarised with direct link(s) to evidence – looking ahead to the book chapter submission see how to earn marks for social contribution Headings Looks good in terms of structure, BUT on closer reading these headings are related to the topic but not exactly directly addressing the topic - How can DMT facilitate spiritual experiences (based on the best available psychological theory and research)? See earlier comment about Heading casing Key points Promising development of key points for each section, with relevant citations Overview - Consider adding: an image an example or case study Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal wiki links to relevant book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content of this on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research. At the moment, this looks reasonably theory-rich but research-poor Excellent use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Promising use of examples/case studies (e.g., not as much history needed - there will be summaries of that elsewhere that you can link to - but one at least could make for an interesting feature box/case study; another one could be used for a more contemporary example) Conclusion (the most important section): Underway What might the take-home, practical messages be? In a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions? Figure Excellent – A relevant figure is presented and it is appropriately captioned Cite each figure at least once in the main text Consider increasing image size from to make it easier to view References Good For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation Resources See also Very good Use bullet-points Also link to relevant Wikipedia pages Not developed External links Very good Use bullet-points

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Well developed Overview Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest Clear focus question(s) Theory – Breadth An excellent range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Theory – Depth Insightful depth is provided about the selected theory(ies) Key citations are well used Tables and/or lists are used effectively to help clearly convey key theoretical information More examples could be useful to illustrate key concepts Research – Key findings Relevant research is well reviewed Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful Research – Critical thinking Excellent critical thinking about relevant research is evident Claims are referenced Integration Discussion of theory and research is well integrated Conclusion Key points are well summarised Clear take-home message(s) Written expression – Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is excellent Layout Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections Grammar Use serial commas[1] – they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. See explanatory video (1 min) APA style Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159) Figures Figures are very well captioned Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1) Tables Table captions should use APA style. See example Refer to each Table at least once within the main text (e.g., see Table 1) Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: Multiple citations in parentheses should be listed in alphabetical order by first author surname References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of italicisation Written expression – Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is excellent Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Excellent use of image(s) Excellent use of table(s) Excellent use of feature box(es) No use of quiz(zes) Excellent use of case studies or examples Excellent use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Excellent use of external links in the "External links" section Social contribution ~1 logged, useful social contributions with direct links to evidence

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation The presentation is over the maximum time limit — content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed. Also narrate — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. This presentation has a basic introduction to engage audience interest A basic context for the topic is established Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic The presentation is well structured (i.e., Overview, Content, Conclusion) The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological research Include more citations to support claims The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented The Conclusion only partly fitted within the time limit Audio Basic narration Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point Basic intonation The narration could benefit from further practice Audio recording quality was poor. Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., keyboard and/or mouse clicks were audible). Consider using an external microphone. Video Overall, visual display quality is good The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides Some of the font size could be larger to make it easier to read The amount of text presented on some slides could be reduced to make it easier to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams The presentation is basically produced using simple tools Meta-data The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. Links to and from the book chapter are provided Licensing Most image sources and their copyright status are not provided. This presentation has probably violated the copyrights of image owners as some images appear to have been used without permission and/or acknowledgement. A copyright license for the presentation is provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:06, 22 November 2022 (UTC)