Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Contempt

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:52, 2 October 2022 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted Remove author name – authorship is as per the page's editing history User page Created – minimal, but sufficient Very brief description about self provided – consider expanding Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution None summarised with direct link(s) to evidence – this was covered in Tutorial 03. Looking ahead to the book chapter submission, see how to earn marks for social contributions. Headings See earlier comment about Heading casing Promising 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development by expanding the structure Consider using the sub-title questions as top-level headings. Consider further development of sub-headings in those sections. Key points Basic development of key points for some sections, with relevant citations For sections which include sub-sections include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings Overview - Consider adding: an evocative description of the problem and what will be covered focus questions an image an example or case study Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Consider including more examples/case studies Conclusion (the most important section): Hasn't been developed Figure Excellent – A relevant figure is presented and it is appropriately captioned Cite each figure at least once in the main text References Good For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation doi formatting page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) some author initials are missing Resources See also Provide more specific/relevant links to related book chapters and Wikipedia pages Not developed External links Move this link to the see also section

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:52, 2 October 2022 (UTC)

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a solid chapter that makes good use of psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem Well under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Solid Overview Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon Engages reader interest by introducing a case study and/or example and/or using an image Reasonably clear focus question(s). Third question could better match the sub-title. Theory – Breadth Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained The chapter doesn't wander off into discussion of irrelevant theory Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Theory – Depth Appropriate depth is provided about the selected theory(ies) Tables and/or lists are used effectively to help clearly convey key theoretical information Some useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts Research – Key findings Reasonably good review of relevant research Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful Research – Critical thinking Very good critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Claims are mostly referenced Integration There is reasonably good integration between theory and research Conclusion Reasonably good summary Take-home message(s) could specifically address each of the focus questions Written expression – Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is good Layout See earlier comments about heading casing Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance. Use serial commas[1] – they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. See explanatory video (1 min) Spelling Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the tags). Spell-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Proofreading More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard APA style Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10) Direct quotes need page numbers – even better, write in your own words Figures Figures are well captioned Figure captions should use this format: Figure X. Descriptive caption in sentence casing. See example Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text Tables Refer to each Table at least once within the main text (e.g., see Table 1) Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[2] Check and correct use of italicisation Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Include hyperlinked dois Written expression – Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is good Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of image(s) Excellent use of table(s) Good use of feature box(es) Very good use of case studies or examples Very good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Very good use of external links in the "External links" section Social contribution No logged social contributions

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:18, 4 November 2022 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a good presentation Overview Display and narrate a slide with the same title and sub-title as the book chapter to help the viewer understand the purpose of the presentation This presentation has an opening scenario to hook audience interest The importance of this topic is explained An outline is provided Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little The presentation is reasonably well structured, although the Overview and Conclusion could be more distinct, especially visually The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological research The presentation could include citations to support claims The presentation makes very good use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information Conclusion A narrated Conclusion slide is presented with very good take-home message(s) The Conclusion could be improved by presenting better aligned visuals (instead of the reference list) Audio The audio is interesting to listen to The audio is easy to follow The presentation makes effective use of narrated audio Audio communication is clear and well paced Excellent intonation enhances listener interest and engagement The narration is well practiced Audio recording quality was excellent Mute the music during narration to help the viewer concentrate on the combination of visual information and narrated audio Video Overall, visual display quality is very good Check and correct spelling (e.g., heirarchy -> hierarchy) The presentation makes effective use of animated slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams The presentation is well produced using PowToon The presentation could be improved by presenting the take-home messages in text Meta-data The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. The sub-title (or an abbreviation of the sub-title that fits within the 100 character limit) would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A written description of the presentation is not provided. Providing an informative description can help viewers decide whether they want to watch or not. A link to the book chapter is not provided A link from the book chapter is provided Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:03, 10 November 2022 (UTC)