Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Social comparison and emotion

Topic development feedback

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted User page Created - minimal, but sufficient Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Excellent - summarised with direct link(s) to evidence Note this is how to add direct links to evidence if adding the second or subsequent edit to a page: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Headings Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic Key points Key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations The balance of upward/downward comparisons and positive/negative emotions is excellent Overview - Consider adding: an image an example or case study Excellent use of tables There seems to be reasonably good coverage of theory; strive to balance with review of relevant research Expand use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Excellent use of tables Consider including more examples/case studies (e.g., consider linking to chapters about body image) You may be interested in Lewin's field theory Conclusion (the most important section): promising what might the take-home, practical messages be? in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title? Figure Excellent A figure is presented Caption uses APA style Caption explains how the image connects to key points being made in the main text Cite each figure at least once in the main text References Very good For APA referencing style, check and correct: include issue numbers (where available) italicisation Resources See also Excellent External links Very good Move academic articles into References (and cite them)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:20, 13 September 2021 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Overview Well developed Overview. Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon. Consider developing focus questions to help guide the reader and structure the chapter. The chapter engages reader interest by introducing a case study and/or example and/or using an image. Theory — Breadth Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained. Impressive explanation of social comparison and emotion, with practical solutions in the form of EI training. The chapter doesn't wander off into discussion of irrelevant theory. Theory — Depth Appropriate depth is provided about the selected theory(ies). Key citations are well used. Tables and/or lists are used effectively to help clearly convey key theoretical information. Useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts. Research — Key findings Relevant research is well reviewed. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Research — Critical thinking Excellent critical thinking about research is evident. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations Integration Discussion of theory and research is well integrated. Conclusion Key points are well summarised. Add practical, take-home message(s). Written expression — Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is excellent. Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Grammar Use serial commas[1] - they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. Here's an explanatory video (1 min). Abbreviations Abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.) should only be used inside parentheses. APA style Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159). Figures and tables APA style is used for Figure captions. Use APA style for Table captions. See example. Refer to each Table and Figure using APA style (e.g., check and correct capitalisation). Citations use correct APA style. References use very good APA style. Some volume and issue numbers may be missing. Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Written expression — Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is excellent. Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. # No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Good use of image(s). Excellent use of table(s). Excellent use of feature box(es). Excellent use of quiz(zes). Excellent use of case studies or examples. Social contribution ~12 logged, useful, minor to moderate social contributions with direct links to evidence.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:36, 10 November 2021 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall Overall, this is a good presentation. The presentation is over the maximum time limit - content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes. Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is presented and narrated - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. The importance of this topic is explained. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section. The presentation addresses the topic. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. The presentation is well structured. The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory. The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological research. The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies. Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with take-home message(s). The Conclusion partially fitted within the time limit. Audio The audio is easy to follow. The presentation makes good use of narrated audio. Audio communication is clear and well paced. Good intonation enhances listener interest and engagement. Audio recording quality was very good. Video Overall, visual display quality is good. The presentation makes good use of text-based slides. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The amount of text presented per slide could be reduced to make it easier to read and listen at the same time. The visual communication could be improved by including some relevant images and/or diagrams. The presentation is well produced using simple tools. Meta-data The chapter sub-title but not the chapter title is used in the name of the presentation - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Can be abbreviated to fit within 100 character limit. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. Links to and from the book chapter are provided. Licensing Image sources are communicated in a general way. Also provide links to each image and the license details. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:27, 20 November 2021 (UTC)