Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Psilocybin and spirituality

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Hi Ben, Really interesting topic you have chosen, I think it is always important to look into the historical contexts when discussing topics of such a sensitive nature. Could it be a suggestion to maybe go more into the types of dosages in regards to what effects the individual will experience? Does everyone have different tolerances? 29 August 8:08 (UTC)(The preceding unsigned comment was added by [[User:{{{1}}}|{{{1}}}]] ([[User talk:{{{1}}}|talk]] • [[Special:Contributions/{{{1}}}|contribs]]) )

Hey Ben, your topic looks great! I made some minor spelling changes for you. Goodluck [[1]] 13/10/21 4:02 pm (UTC)

Hey Ben, loved reading this chapter, it is super interesting that research is being done into different previously sensitive and controversial topics. I thought you may be able to add the 2019 book chapter Psilocybin and emotion: What are the emotional effects of psilocybin? to your internal links: https://en.wikiversity.org/wiki/Motivation_and_emotion/Book/2019/Psilocybin_and_emotion hope this could be useful! --Eilish Ritchie (discuss • contribs) 07:42, 17 October 2021 (UTC)

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Title Excellent User page Created - minimal, but sufficient Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Summarised with indirect link(s) to evidence. Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Headings Excellent Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic. Key points Fantastic Figure A figure with caption is presented. Caption does not use APA style - include Figure 1. ... Cite each figure at least once in the main text. Consider increasing image size to make it easier to view. References Excellent Very good Good OK For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation dois should be active hyperlinks Resources Excellent

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. This chapter is particularly well written. The integration of theory and research is excellent. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Overview Well developed Overview. Developing focus questions could help to guide the reader and structure the chapter. However, this chapter is so well structured and written, that focus questions aren't necessary. Theory — Breadth Relevant theories are well selected succintly explained, and well applied to understanding the connections between psilocybin and spirituality. The chapter doesn't wander off into discussion of irrelevant theory. It maintains a scientific focus, despite the holistic/spiritual topic (good). Theory — Depth Appropriate depth is provided about the selected theory(ies). Key citations are well used. Tables and/or lists are used effectively to help clearly convey key theoretical information. Useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts. Research — Key findings Relevant research is well reviewed. Research — Critical thinking Critical thinking about research is excellent. Integration Discussion of theory and research is very well integrated. Conclusion Well developed. Clear take-home messages. Written expression — Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is excellent. Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in parentheses at the end of the sentence. Layout The chapter is very well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections. Grammar Use serial commas[2] - they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. Here's an explanatory video (1 min). Spelling is excellent Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour). Proofreading is excellent APA style is excellent Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10). Figures and tables Each Table and Figure is referred to at least once within the main text. Ideally, provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text. Citations use correct APA style. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation Check and correct use of italicisation Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Include hyperlinked dois Written expression — Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is excellent. Little use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Excellent use of image(s). Very good use of table(s). Basic use of feature box(es). Basic use of quiz(zes). Very good use of case studies based on research studies. Format bullet-points and numbered lists, per Tutorial 1. Social contribution ~5 logged, useful, minor to moderate social contributions with indirect links to evidence.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:22, 1 November 2021 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent presentation. Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is presented and narrated - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A clear structure is outlined. Content The presentation addresses the topic. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. The presentation is well structured. The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory. I'm a little surprised that the facial feedback hypothesis is considered to be important enough to highlight - is there any evidence that this is important for explaining the spiritual effects of psilocybin? The focus could be more narrowly on spiritual rather than psychological experience. The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological research. The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information. Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s). Audio The audio is easy to follow and interesting to listen to. The presentation makes effective use of narrated audio. Audio communication is clear and well paced. Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. Excellent intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement. Audio recording quality was very good. Maybe the microphone was slightly too close (some minor distortion). Video Overall, visual display quality is excellent. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images. The video is very well produced. Meta-data The chapter title and sub-title are used in the name of the presentation - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. Links to and from the book chapter are provided. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are communicated. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:35, 15 November 2021 (UTC)