Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Physical activity motivation

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Topic development feedback[edit source]

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

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Title[edit source]

  1. Excellent

User page[edit source]

  1. Excellent - used effectively
  2. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
  3. Link provided to book chapter

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. Excellent - summarised with direct link(s) to evidence.

Headings[edit source]

  1. Basic, 1-level heading structure - could benefit from further development, perhaps using a 2-level structure.

Key points[edit source]

  1. Overview:
    1. describes the problem
    2. explain what will be covered
    3. focus questions - focus on, and maybe expand, 3 and 4; 1 and 2 aren't really needed as focus questions
    4. consider adding an image
    5. consider adding an example or case study
  2. Useful key points about SDT and exercise; what other motivational theories might be helpful?
  3. Applied focus of How can health practitioners motivate patients? is excellent.
  4. Conclusion (the most important section):
    1. hasn't been developed
    2. what might the take-home, practical messages be?
    3. in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title?

Figure[edit source]

  1. Excellent

References[edit source]

  1. Very good
  2. For APA referencing style, check and correct:
    1. capitalisation

Resources[edit source]

  1. Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:56, 6 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Final stretch suggestions[edit source]

Hello,

Firstly, this is shaping up to be a great chapter. There's a great deal of care taken with what has been written so far and the topic has a cohesion and flow that shows you'll most likely be on track for this chapter's submission. With that said, I have a few suggestions (though if you're already addressing these then that's great):

1. Motivation - The sections you've written on implicit and explicit motivation feel simplistic and same-y. They both consist of one or two very generalised statements, followed by a sentence saying "See an example below". They could use more theory, given that your research aspect is focused on the last section about techniques. Just going from Chapter 5 of the textbook there's scope to talk about the four types of extrinsic motivation (pp116-118) and for implicit motivations you could draw from the 'Achievement' section of chapter 7 (pp159-166). Also, none of those sections need to have sentences saying "See the example below" because as the reader follows the page their eyes will be naturally drawn to the examples.

2. Self determination theory - This is the strongest section of your chapter so far. So far what I've spotted are a few simple mistakes and suggestions: A) First paragraph: Figure 4 should be capitalised. B) When referring to Table 1 you can remove the 'as seen below' part (similar to the Motivation section feedback) C) Fourth paragraph: does the first sentence ("Introjected and external motivation are regulated by external forces.") need a citation? The way it is written sounds specific enough that it needs one, OR it sounds too generalised and wants more detail that would lead it to getting a citation.

3. "How can health practitioners motivate patients?" - You have a focus right now on preventative counselling and other forms of counselling, but it appears like you've not considered writing about useful motivation techniques while someone is trying to exercise. Because you're drawing on self-determination theory, what about studies that test it for studies on exercise? Here are two studies that might help: A) "The effect of need supportive text messages on motivation and physical activity behaviour" - https://pubmed.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/26915963/ A randomised trial testing the effects of need supportive SMS's in improving motivation. Results show increases in motivation that persisted after a four-month follow up. B) "Effects of an autonomy-supportive exercise instructing style on exercise motivation, psychological well-being, and exercise attendance in middle-age women." ACCESS THROUGH APAPsychInfo via the UC library databases, it's not open access. A trial about the effects of autonomy support training on middle-aged women in an 8-week exercise program. The autonomy supported group reported higher intrinsic motivation and fulfilment of needs for autonomy and competence, among other benefits.

Anyway, I hope this helps out in some way!

--U3020459 (discusscontribs) 12:06, 12 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Hi! Iv’e found an article which I thought might be useful for your book chapter. It incorporates self-determination theory and focusses on COVID-19, which might be useful as a relevant example :) - --TaraU3187760 (discusscontribs) 10:25, 13 October 2021 (UTC) https://www.frontiersin.org/articles/10.3389/fpsyg.2020.622595/full[reply]

Feedback[edit source]

Hi there!

Great job on the work you have put into your book chapter so far! I do have some suggestions that I hope help as you finish the chapter off. Firstly, the chapter covers a lot of ground, but you might want to focus in on the question you're being asked to answer. This seems to happen right at the end, but you might want to weave this into all aspects of the chapter. For example, in the self-determination theory paragraph, it would be great to see how it applies to people in meeting minimum physical activity guidelines (not just for top level athletes in a gymnastics competition). You have a lot of great content in the section about how health practitioners can motivate patients, so I would just expand on these points. This also might be helpful in narrowing the scope of the chapter if you are running low on words. Secondly, remember to reference when you have used someone else's work. The overview seems like it is missing some references. For instance, when you outline the three types of motivation, you should follow this with a citation. This article goes through the appropriate level of citation - https://apastyle.apa.org/style-grammar-guidelines/citations/appropriate-citation . Finally, when referencing, you should avoid using secondary sources - https://apastyle.apa.org/style-grammar-guidelines/citations/secondary-sources . Instead, you might consider using a different source for the definition of motivation. For example, Reeve (2019, p.2) defines motivation as "a condition inside us that desires a change". You could use this definition, or have a look for another scholarly source.

I hope these suggestions help, and you have a rewarding rest of the semester.

U3202904 (discusscontribs) 12:01, 15 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

external link[edit source]

Hey! I thought this TED talk would give you some interesting insights into the benefits of physical activity https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=BHY0FxzoKZE Good luck! [[1]]