Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Neurostimulation and emotion

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted User page Excellent - used effectively Description about self provided Link(s) provided to professional profile(s) Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Excellent - summarised with direct link(s) to evidence Headings Promising 3-level heading structure Headings are directly aligned with the topic "What is emotion?" is probably not needed as it is very broad and better covered elsewhere - provide a brief description and embedded links to other book chapter(s) and/or Wikipedia article(s) so that this chapter can concentrate on neurostimulation and emotion Consider expanding the 2nd and 3rd level heading structure Key points Promising development of key points for most sections, with relevant citations Overview is promising: Consider adding a description of the "problem" (e.g., how can emotion be modulated?) and what will be covered I've made minor adjustments to the focus questions (e.g., removed "What is emotion?") Consider adding an image an example or case study For sections which include sub-sections include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings Appears to be a good balance of theory and research Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Consider including more examples/case studies Conclusion (the most important section): under developed what might the take-home, practical messages be? in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions? Figure A figure is presented Caption uses APA style Cite each figure at least once in the main text Ideally, provide some images of neurostimulation in action. References Good For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation separate page numbers by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Resources Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:06, 17 September 2021 (UTC)

Article suggestions

Hi, thank you for writing the chapter on neurostimulation and emotion. I was particularly interested in the non-invasive modulation section. In this section, "transcutaneous magnetic stimulation" is mentioned, although, I think you may be referring to "transcranial magnetic stimulation (TMS) based on the section below that ("disorders that can be treated through neurostimulation"). From brief research, transcutaneous stimulation appears to be useful in the treatment of musculoskeletal pain, rather than psychological disorders. It may be beneficial to review this section. Although, more clarity may be provided as you develop this section past dot points.

To assist with the development, I have found a meta-analysis that may provide you with additional information on transcranial magnetic stimulation and its efficacy with a multitude of disorders. Most articles focus exclusively on depression, whereas Cirillo et al., (2019) expand to anxiety and other trauma-related disorders.

Another article that may be helpful to further explore the similarities and differences between transcranial direct current stimulation (tDCS) and TMS is this literature review by Ando et al., (2021). This explores the specific brain regions utilised during emotion and impacted during modulation.

I hope these distinctions and articles help you in the progression of your book chapter. I look forward to reading the final edit :) --CharliU3203035 (discuss • contribs) 00:35, 6 October 2021 (UTC)

linking

Hey I linked the key brain concepts for you! --Brianna Meddemmen (discuss • contribs) 13:57, 17 October 2021 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation. Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is presented and narrated - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Create an engaging introduction to hook audience interest. Provide a context for the topic, to help the viewer understand. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. Content An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. However, there is too much general content. Instead, focus on psychological theory and research which is more directly related to the topic (How can neurostimulation affect emotion?). The key content is around 2 min - 2 and a half mins. Expand this part by about 4 times. The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological theory. The presentation makes little to no use of relevant psychological research. The presentation makes basic use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice. Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with basic take-home message(s). Audio Basic use of narrated audio. Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement. Consider improving articulation to enhance the clarity of speech. Audio recording quality was good. The narrated content is partially matched to the target topic (see #Content). Video Overall, visual display quality is very good. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time. The visual communication is supplemented by images and/or diagrams. The presentation is well produced using simple tools. The visual content is partially matched to the target topic (see #Content). Meta-data The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A written description of the presentation is provided. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. Links to and from the book chapter are provided. A link to the book chapter is provided. A link to the book chapter is provided but it goes to a specific section rather than the top of the chapter. A link from the book chapter is provided. The presentation is incorrectly categorised as being for kids. This introduces limitations, such as being unable to add the presentation to a playlist. More info. Licensing Image sources are communicated in a general way. # Ideally, provide clickable links to the original image sources (e.g., in the description). A copyright license for the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:18, 21 November 2021 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a solid chapter that makes good use of psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. Well under the maximum word count. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Overview Well developed Overview. Briefly explain what neurostimulation is to help an unfamiliar reader. Clear focus question(s). Engages reader interest by introducing a case study and/or example and/or using an image. Theory — Breadth Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained. The chapter doesn't wander off into discussion of irrelevant theory. Build more strongly on other neurostimulation-related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters in this category: Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Neurostimulation). Theory — Depth Reasonable depth is provided about the selected theory(ies). Key citations are well used. Some useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts. Research — Key findings Relevant research is well reviewed. More detail about key studies would be ideal. Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Research — Critical thinking Basic critical thinking about research is evident. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations suggesting specific directions for future research Integration There is basic integration between theory and research. Conclusion Basic summary. Clear take-home message. Consider expanding to a take-home message for each focus question. Written expression — Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is very good. Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Abbreviations Check and correct grammatical formatting for abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e., et al., etc.). Figures Figures are very well captioned. Figure captions use the correct format. Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text. Refer to each Figure using APA style (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation). Tables Table 3 should be Table 1. Table captions should use APA style. See example. Refer to each Table at least once within the main text (e.g., see Table 1). Citations use correct APA style. References use correct APA style. Written expression — Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is very good. Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. # No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Excellent use of image(s). Basic use of table(s). Very good use of feature box(es). No use of quiz(zes). Good use of case studies or examples. For the case study, perhaps add that medication was tried without much success (or is also being used) before moving to neurostimulation. Maybe also describe a neurostimulation session for Aciel in more detail. Very good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section. Good use of external links in the "External links" section. Social contribution ~3 logged, useful, minor social contributions with direct links to evidence.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:24, 22 November 2021 (UTC)