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Hello! Very heavy topic you have there. Good job on developing your book chapter thus far.
I found this article which might be of interest to you so that you can get started. It is about men who are sexually attracted to children and the study is based around the motivation-facilitation model of sexual offending. Here is the link; https://psycnet.apa.org/record/2016-47529-007 and the title of the article is An Internet study of men sexually attracted to children: Correlates of sexual offending against children.
Good luck and I look forward to reading your book chapter. :) --U3202023 (discuss • contribs) 22:40, 6 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]
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Overall, the quality of written expression is excellent.
The chapter is over the maximum word count, so abbreviate.
The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance.
Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals')..
Check and correct grammatical formatting for abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e., et al., etc.).
Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159).
Overall, the use of learning features is excellent.
Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. # Basic use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding more in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
Good use of image(s).
Good use of table(s).
Very good use of feature box(es).
Good use of quiz(zes).
Excellent use of case studies or examples.
Excellent use of interwiki links in the "See also" section.
Good use of external links in the "External links" section.