Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Menopause and emotion

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Hi, Your book chapter topic is interesting, I would very much like to read it when it is completed, I especially liked the points that were made about how to alleviate symptoms of menopause by embracing a positive attitude. Good luck with it. --U3151962 (discuss • contribs) 07:45, 12 October 2019 (UTC)

Hello I see you still have some development needed to be added to the throes, here is a link for The James-Lange Theory of Emotions that could be useful --U3202710 (discuss • contribs) 22:16, 16 October 2021 (UTC)

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Sounds so interesting!! I just noticed some of your journal articles for reference list were not italised so just a heads up! to do this, go into edit source and surround what you want italised with " ". Goodluck! --U3187178 (discuss • contribs) 06:18, 17 October 2021 (UTC)

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It seems like you're off to a great start!! You've set up a really good foundation. It's nice to see you've got a lot of your headings and dot points in there, that'll make writing more of the page a smoother and faster experience. I'm sure this is a topic that is quite relatable to a lot of people, I hope that there are people going through menopause who are able to read your finished article, and understand a little bit more what they're going through. My own mother has gone through hers, and I know she struggled a lot, so maybe this article will be able to help a lot of people :) Keep up the good work! --Demimimimi (discuss • contribs) 12:02, 20 October 2019 (UTC)

Hello I really enjoyed reading your chapter you have included lot's of interesting content. The only thing I would suggest is to potentially simplify how your headings appear in your contents page as it will make it easier for the reader to navigate to certain sections of your chapter and also help the structure of your chapter. Other than that I think you have done a great job, well done! U3202315 (discuss• contribs) 18:42, 17 October 2021 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted Note: If you think we should change the topic from "menopause" to "perimenopause" let me know and we can adjust. User page Used effectively Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Excellent - summarised with direct link(s) to evidence Headings Top-level headings make sense and directly apply to the topic Overly complicated 4-level structure - consider simplifying Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings Remove colons Key points Key points are well developed for most section, with relevant citations Avoid overcapitalisation (APA style) - more info Use bullet points (see Tutorial 1 - Using Wikiversity) For sections which include sub-sections include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings Overview - Consider adding: an evocative description of the problem and what will be covered an image an example or case study Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research Excellent use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Consider including more examples/case studies Conclusion (the most important section): hasn't been developed what might the take-home, practical messages be? in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions? Figure A figure is presented Caption uses APA style Cite each figure at least once in the main text References Good For APA referencing style, check and correct: Remove numbering doi formatting Resources See also Excellent Also link to relevant Wikipedia pages External links Academic articles should be moved into the References section and cited in the main body

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:52, 18 September 2021 (UTC)

Heading casing

Hi U3177076. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:41, 29 September 2021 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. Well over the maximum word count. Be more selective. For example, the tables contained unnecessary detail. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Overview Solid Overview. Explains the problem or phenomenon. Clear focus question(s). Engages reader interest by using a quote. Theory — Breadth Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained. There is too much general theoretical material (e.g., about emotion). Instead, summarise and link to further information (such as other book chapters or Wikipedia articles), to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question). Theory — Depth Very good (but too much) depth is provided about the selected theory(ies). Some useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts. Research — Key findings Relevant research is well reviewed. Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Research — Critical thinking Reasonably good critical thinking about research is evident. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations suggesting specific directions for future research Integration Discussion of theory and research is well integrated. Conclusion Key points are well summarised. Clear take-home message(s). Written expression — Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is very good. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in parentheses at the end of the sentence. Direct quotes should be embedded within sentences and paragraphs, rather than dumped holus-bolus. Even better, communicate the concept in your own words. Layout Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings. Headings should use default wiki style (e.g., remove colons). Grammar Check and correct use of affect vs. effect. Spelling Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour). Proofreading Remove unnecessary capitalisation (e.g., Postmenopause -> postmenopause). APA style Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10). Check and use correct APA style for direct quotes need page numbers. Figures Figures are well captioned. Figure captions use the correct format. Links to sources not needed in caption because the image itself is clickable and leads to the meta-data. Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1). Tables Table captions should use APA style. See example. Tables are referred to using APA style. Refer to each Table using APA style (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation). Each Table is referred to at least once within the main text. Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses. Multiple citations in parentheses should be listed in alphabetical order by first author surname. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[1] Check and correct use of italicisation Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Written expression — Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is good. Very good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. # No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Excellent use of image(s). Unnecessary use of table(s). Excellent use of feature box(es). No use of quiz(zes). Very good use of case studies or examples or tips. Good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section. Basic use of external links in the "External links" section. Social contribution ~5 logged, useful, minor social contributions with direct links to evidence.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:12, 14 November 2021 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall Overall, this is an insufficient presentation because it is over the maximum time limit - content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes. Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is presented - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Also narrate the opening slide. The importance of this topic is explained. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section. The presentation addresses the topic, but provides insufficient coverage of theory and research about the emotional impacts of menopause and what can be done about it within 3 minutes. Conclusion The Conclusion did not fit within the time limit. Audio The audio is easy to follow, and interesting to listen to. The presentation makes effective use of narrated audio. Audio communication is clear and reasonably well paced. Very good intonation enhances listener interest and engagement. Audio recording quality was excellent. Video Overall, visual display quality is very good. I love the self-created, hand-drawn slides . The presentation makes good use of text-based slides. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time. The presentation is well produced. Meta-data The chapter title and sub-title are used in the name of the presentation - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A written description of the presentation is provided. Links to and from the book chapter are provided. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are communicated. Ideally, provide clickable links to the original image sources (e.g., in the description). A copyright license for the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:25, 17 November 2021 (UTC)