Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Mass murder motivation

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:44, 17 September 2021 (UTC)

References

Hi! I found your chapter super interesting as I am doing something similar and think it's a very important topic. I found an interesting article that could be used as a reference in your media coverage section towards the end: "Mass Murder and the Mass Media: Understanding the Construction of the Social Problem of Mass Shootings in the US" https://pdfs.semanticscholar.org/f346/bb4885ed0bad48505ab881f226294b76a5e5.pdf - I hope this could be useful! --Eilish Ritchie (discuss • contribs) 07:21, 17 October 2021 (UTC)

Hello there, I enjoyed reading your chapter!, just a suggestion I know that you have included your takeaway points for your conclusion but I think it would be beneficial to also provide some practical takeaways in your conclusion which address each of your focus questions. Good luck! -U3202315 (discuss• contribs) 18:06, 17 October 2021 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted User page Created - minimal, but sufficient Brief description about self provided - consider expanding Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Excellent - summarised with direct link(s) to evidence 4= See earlier comment about Heading casing Promising 2-level heading structure - directly focused on topic The most important sections will probably be "Psychological theory" and "Motivation", so consider expanding these Headings No comment Key points Overview - Excellent Use APA style 7th edition for citations with three or more authors (i.e., FirstAuthor et al., year) Key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations Good balance of theory and research Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Excellent use of examples/case studies Conclusion (the most important section): underway focus back on answers to the original question (sub-title) what might the take-home, practical messages be? in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title? Figure A figure is presented Caption should include Figure X. ... Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text Cite each figure at least once in the main text Consider decreasing image size References Good For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation Resources See also Very good Use bullet-points Rename links so that they are more user friendly (fixed) External links Excellent

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and available research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Overview Well developed Overview. Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon. Clear focus question(s). Theory — Breadth Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained. The chapter doesn't wander off into discussion of irrelevant theory. Build more strongly on other forensic-related chapters (e.g., by incorporating embedded links to other chapters in this category: Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Forensic). Theory — Depth Appropriate depth is provided about the selected theory(ies). Tables and/or lists are used effectively to help clearly convey key theoretical information. Some useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts. Excellent focus on prevention. Research — Key findings Relevant research is reviewed. Research — Critical thinking Very good critical thinking about research is evident. Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). Integration Discussion of theory and research is well integrated. Conclusion Key points are well summarised. Clear take-home message(s). Written expression — Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is excellent. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Layout Headings should use default wiki style (e.g., remove additional bold). The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Grammar and spelling are excellent. Proofreading Replace double spaces with single spaces. APA style Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159). Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc.. Figures and tables Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the psychological theory and research in the main text. Figure captions should use this format: Figure X. Descriptive caption in sentence casing. See example. Table captions should use APA style. See example. Refer to each Table and Figure using APA style (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation). Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1). Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[1] Written expression — Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is excellent. Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. # One use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding more in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Good use of image(s). Good use of table(s). Excellent use of feature box(es). Very good use of quiz(zes). Very good use of case studies or examples. Social contribution ~3 logged, useful, minor to moderate social contributions with direct links to evidence.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:41, 11 November 2021 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent presentation. Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed and narrated - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Create an engaging introduction to hook audience interest. Briefly explain why this topic is important. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section. The presentation addresses the topic. The presentation is well structured. The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory. The presentation makes no use of relevant psychological research. Include citations. The presentation makes excellent use of practical explanation. Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with excellent take-home message(s). Audio The audio is easy to follow and interesting to listen to. Audio communication is clear and well paced. Good intonation enhances listener interest and engagement. The narration is well polished. Audio recording quality was good. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., keyboard and/or mouse clicks were audible). Consider using an external microphone. Video Overall, visual display quality is excellent. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time. The presentation is very well produced. Meta-data The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. The sub-title (or an abbreviation of the sub-title that fits within the 100 character limit) would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A written description of the presentation is provided. Links to and from the book chapter are provided. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are communicated. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:56, 23 November 2021 (UTC)