Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Light triad

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Topic development feedback[edit source]

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

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Title[edit source]

  1. The title is correctly worded and formatted
  2. The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted
  3. Note if you'd prefer something like "developed" instead of "cultivated" let me know and we can tweak the sub-title

User page[edit source]

  1. Excellent - used effectively
  2. Description about self provided
  3. Link provided to book chapter
  4. Links provided to professional profiles

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. Excellent - summarised with direct link(s) to evidence

Headings[edit source]

  1. Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic
  2. It makes logical sense to use the sub-title questions as top-level headings.
  3. I suggest adding sub-headings for each of the LT dimensions
  4. Consider developing a more descriptive heading(s) for "Preliminary research findings"

Key points[edit source]

  1. Promising development of key points for each section, with relevant citations
  2. Overview - Consider adding:
    1. a description of the "problem" and what will be covered
    2. focus questions
    3. an image
    4. an example or case study
  3. For sections which include sub-sections include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings
  4. Don't get overly distracted by the dark triad - this can be briefly summarised along with internal links to related book chapter(s) and Wikipedia article(s)
  5. Focus on, and expand, the description of light triad and its components
  6. Direct quotes need page numbers (APA style) - even better, write in your own words
  7. Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research
  8. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters.
  9. Consider including more examples/case studies
  10. Conclusion (the most important section):
    1. under way
    2. what might the take-home, practical messages be?
    3. in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?

Figure[edit source]

  1. Excellent
  2. Caption uses APA style
  3. Caption explains how the image connects to key points being made in the main text
  4. Cite each figure at least once in the main text

References[edit source]

  1. Good
  2. For APA referencing style, check and correct:
    1. capitalisation
    2. italicisation

Resources[edit source]

  1. Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 13:48, 17 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a very good presentation.

Overview[edit source]

  1. An opening slide with the title is presented and narrated - also include the sub-title - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. Engaging introduction.
  3. A context for the topic is established.
  4. The importance of this topic is explained.
  5. Briefly explain why this topic is important.
  6. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages.

Content[edit source]

  1. The presentation addresses the topic.
  2. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little.
  3. The presentation is well structured.
  4. The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory.
  5. The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological research.
  6. The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice.
  7. The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information.

Conclusion[edit source]

  1. The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages.

Audio[edit source]

  1. The audio is easy to follow and interesting to listen to.
  2. The presentation makes effective use of narrated audio.
  3. Audio communication is clear and well paced. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
  4. Very good intonation enhances listener interest and engagement.
  5. Audio recording quality was excellent.

Video[edit source]

  1. Overall, visual display quality is excellent.
  2. The presentation makes effective use of animated slides.
  3. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read.
  4. The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time.
  5. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams.
  6. The presentation is well produced using simple tools.

Meta-data[edit source]

  1. The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. A written description of the presentation is provided.
  3. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.
  4. Links to and from the book chapter are provided.

Licensing[edit source]

  1. Image sources and their copyright status are communicated.
  2. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:16, 21 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Chapter review and feedback[edit source]

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Chapter marks will be available via UCLearn along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
  2. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits.

Overview[edit source]

  1. Well developed Overview.
  2. Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon.
  3. Clear focus question(s).

Theory — Breadth[edit source]

  1. Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained.
  2. The chapter doesn't wander off into discussion of irrelevant theory.

Theory — Depth[edit source]

  1. Excellent depth is provided about the selected theory(ies).
  2. Tables and/or lists are used effectively to help clearly convey key theoretical information.
  3. Useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts.

Research — Key findings[edit source]

  1. Relevant research is well reviewed.

Research — Critical thinking[edit source]

  1. Excellent critical thinking about research is evident.

Integration[edit source]

  1. Discussion of theory and research is well integrated.

Conclusion[edit source]

  1. Key points are well summarised.
  2. Clear take-home message(s).

Written expression — Style[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is excellent.
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
    2. See earlier comments about heading casing.
  3. APA style
    1. Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159).
    2. Figures
      1. Figure captions correctly use this format: Figure X. Descriptive caption in sentence casing.
      2. Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text.
      3. Refer to each Figure using APA style (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation).
    3. Tables
      1. Table captions should use APA style. See example.
      2. Refer to each Table at least once within the main text (e.g., see Table 1).
    4. Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example:
      1. Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses.
    5. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Check and correct use of italicisation

Written expression — Learning features[edit source]

  1. Overall, the use of learning features is excellent.
  2. Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. # No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
  3. Very good use of image(s).
  4. Excellent use of table(s).
  5. Excellent use of feature box(es).
  6. Very good use of quiz(zes).
  7. Excellent use of case studies or examples.
  8. Excellent use of interwiki links in the "See also" section.
  9. Excellent use of external links in the "External links" section.

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. ~16 logged, useful, minor to major social contributions across two platforms with direct links to evidence.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:20, 25 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]