Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Juvenile delinquency motivation

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Hi! Your book chapter is looking like its getting along really well! I was looking and found this really interesting article on juvenile delinquency and the factors that cause it! Hopefully this helps you out a little :) Link: https://web.archive.org/web/20190712172646id_/http://www.pscipub.com:80/Journals/Data/JList/Scientia%20Agriculturae/2015/Volume%20%209/Issue%201/6.pdf --U3204694 (discuss • contribs) 10:09, 30 September 2021 (UTC)

Raising the age of criminal responsibility

Hi there. It looks like your book chapter is coming along nicely. You have chosen a particularly interesting topic and one that is currently being considered in the ACT jurisdiction. There is currently debate as to the raising of the age of criminal responsibility from 10 years to 14 years. This might be useful in discussing the topic of juvenile delinquency and motivation. I have included the link to the discussion paper put forward by the Attorney-General of the ACT: https://s3.ap-southeast-2.amazonaws.com/hdp.au.prod.app.act-yoursay.files/4516/2433/2390/Discussion_Paper_-_FINAL.pdf

I hope this is useful!

Jonathan

Useful links to further research

Hi, your chapter is looking really good! I really enjoy the theories of motivation you have chosen. I have found a good resource that may be useful to include in your chapter; https://www.jstor.org/stable/1141635?casa_token=qwXQ-RpkfukAAAAA%3AHP4zSz43u-_xP3s4QJdm58vsg_ScHv8IlaNTMAhz3AHqNM7xFKNh216YDGw6MVMCpQjsHhTT3F-B_imeUd5Dwob65lO-cIfizqWKxYXCmv3j0Lf8Kg&seq=2#metadata_info_tab_contents The above article discusses the economic motivation behind crime that could be a useful point to raise. I know you touched on intrinsic and extrinsic motivation, and socioeconomic status could be interesting to discuss further:)

Hopefully this helps! Best of luck. - u3204463 --U3204463 (discuss • contribs) 00:48, 28 August 2021 (UTC)

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted User page Created - minimal, but sufficient Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Excellent - summarised with direct link(s) to evidence Headings Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic COVID-19 could be a case study but doesn't warrant it's own section (i.e., isn't essential to addressing the topic) Key points Promising key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations Overview - Consider: introducing a basic statistic about % of juveniles who engage in repeated unlawful behaviour consolidating the focus questions adding an example or case study For sections which include sub-section include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings Good balance of theory and research Excellent use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Consider including more examples/case studies Conclusion (the most important section): hasn't been developed what might the take-home, practical messages be? in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title? Figure A figure is presented Caption uses APA style Cite each figure at least once in the main text References Very good For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation separate page numbers by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Resources See also Excellent External links Very good Target an international audience; Australians only represent 0.33% of the world population

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:32, 13 September 2021 (UTC)

Detention as a cause for reoffending in juveniles

Hi! I can see you're getting close to your word count, but I feel like your final sections would benefit from touching on the tendency for juvenile offenders to reoffend if they are jailed. https://link.springer.com/article/10.1007/s11126-014-9296-4 is a really good review of relatively current literature on the topic, and while this particular review is based on america, similar findings have been found across quite a lot of European and some South-Asian countries, which might help your piece relate to a wider audience. Thanks! U3187741 (discuss • contribs) 22:40, 15 October 2021 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a rich chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. The main area for potential improvement is in the quality of written expression. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Overview Well explained Overview. Clear focus question(s). Perhaps it would help to present the case study in this section, to help arouse reader interest. Some minor improvements to the quality of written expression could be made (e.g., see my copyedits). Theory — Breadth An appropriate range of relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained. The chapter doesn't wander off into discussion of irrelevant theory. Theory — Depth Appropriate depth is provided about the selected theory(ies). Tables and/or lists are used effectively to help clearly convey key theoretical information. Some useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts. Research — Key findings Some relevant research is reviewed. Ideally, more indepth research about the application of the theories to the problem could be incorporated. Tables 2 to 3 aren't really needed because they don't address a focus question or the sub-title question; perhaps just summarise key statistics in text early on (e.g,. in the Overview), to allow more scope for reviewing research in relation to the theories. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Research — Critical thinking Basic critical thinking about research is evident. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships suggesting specific directions for future research Integration The chapter places more emphasis on theory than research. Most research discussed is integrated with theory. Conclusion A basic Conclusion is provided. Strongly recommend to rewrite from passive to active voice (e.g., see my copyedits). Consider adding practical, take-home messages. Written expression — Style Written expression Use active (e.g., "describes") rather than passive (e.g., "is used to describe") voice[1][2]. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Internationalise: Write for an international, not just a domestic audience. Australians make up only 0.32% of the world human population. Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[3] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes. Avoid overly emotive language (e.g,. incredibly) in science-based communication. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead: it is, most often, not needed at all, or use section linking. Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Grammar Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[4]. Check and correct use of that vs. who. Spelling Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour). APA style Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159). Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc.. Figures and tables Use APA style for Table captions. See example. Refer to each Table and Figure using APA style (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation). Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1). Citations use correct APA style. References are not in full APA style. For example: "Retrieved from" is no longer used (APA style, 7th ed.) Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Include hyperlinked dois Written expression — Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is very good. Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles.# No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Poll is an excellent idea. Any way to show the results? (There are polling tools that can do this). Good use of image(s). Good use of table(s). Very good use of feature box(es). Good use of quiz(zes). Excellent use of case studies or examples. Social contribution ~3 logged, useful, minor/moderate/major social contributions with direct links to evidence. ~1 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:41, 4 November 2021 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a good presentation. Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is presented and narrated - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Briefly explain why this topic is important. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. Content The presentation addresses the topic. An appropriate amount of content is presented. The presentation is well structured. The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory. The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological research. The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice. The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information. Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s). Audio The audio is easy to follow and interesting to listen to. The presentation makes effective use of narrated audio. Audio communication is clear and well paced. Very good intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement. Audio recording quality was excellent. Video Overall, visual display quality is excellent. The presentation makes effective/good/basic use of text and image based slides using Powtoon. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. Some slides are a bit too busy/fast. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images. The presentation is very well produced. Meta-data The chapter title but not the sub-title is used in the name of the presentation - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A written description of the presentation is not provided. A link to the book chapter is not provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. Licensing Image sources are not acknowledged - presumably some but not all are from PowToon. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:50, 15 November 2021 (UTC)