Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Jonah complex

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You have done such a great job so far! I enjoyed seeing which theories you have chosen to expand on. I found this article that could be a good case study to look into; It discusses self actualisation, self efficacy and emotional intelligence in undergrad students and uses the Jonah complex as one of the testing measures. Hopefully this helps! Great work so far :) U3204463 --U3204463 (discusscontribs) 04:36, 29 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Hey Paul! I love how you've restructured your book chapter since a couple of weeks ago! And the addition of colourful quizzes and more photos makes it POP! well done!--u3197931 (discusscontribs) 02:57, 14 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Really enjoy the colour and structure of your chapter, it helps to keep it exciting and friendly --U3202710 (discusscontribs) 04:27, 15 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Heading casing[edit source]

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Hi JediClass. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example:

Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory

Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:00, 31 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Topic development feedback[edit source]

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

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Title[edit source]

  1. Excellent

User page[edit source]

  1. Excellent - used effectively
    1. Description about self provided
    2. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
  2. Link provided to book chapter

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. Excellent - summarised with direct link(s) to evidence.

Headings[edit source]

  1. Excellent
  2. The Overview should not have sub-headings. I suggest abbreviating/condensing the Overview which may involve shifting some of the current content into subsequent sections.
  3. Promising 2-level heading structure. It is not entirely clear what the connecting narrative between the sections will be, so work on that as the drafting develops. The Overview and Conclusion can help to outline and summarise that narrative respectively.
  4. See earlier comment about Heading casing.

Key points[edit source]

  1. Basic development of key points for each section, with relevant citations.
  2. Overview - Consider adding:
    1. focus questions
    2. an example or case study
  3. Several related and interesting concepts are suggested. The challenge will be to select the most relevant and concentrate on these and how they connect to the JC. And being smart about what to leave out. Having said that, some other related concepts that may be of interest:
    1. Behaviour inhibition system
    2. Hamlet syndrome (overthinkers who underachieve)
  4. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters.
  5. Note that APA style now uses only a single space after a period, before the next sentence.
  6. Fear of growth (Goud, 1994) sounds promising - consider expanding.
  7. Link key concepts (e.g., self-actualisation) to other chapters which contain more information.
  8. Strive to connect each section to the overarching question (e.g., for the self-actualisation section, how does this connect to the JC?).
  9. Currently theory appears to be better covered than research.
  10. Conclusion (the most important section):
    1. what might the take-home, practical messages be?
    2. in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question in the sub-title?

Figure[edit source]

  1. Excellent
  2. A figure is presented.
  3. Caption
    1. uses APA style - except only Figure X should be capitalised, not the caption text.
    2. does not use APA style.
    3. explains how the image connects to key points being made in the main text.
    4. could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text.
  4. Cite each figure at least once in the main text.

References[edit source]

  1. Good
  2. For APA referencing style, check and correct:
    1. capitalisation
    2. italicisation

Resources[edit source]

  1. Very good - have made some minor edits

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:00, 31 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Suggestion[edit source]

Hey! I had never heard of a Jonah complex before and I did some research for my own interest, and I was surprised by how intrigued i was. Anyway here is a really interesting article about overcoming the jonah complex that i noticed you do not have yet, so it might be helpful, Anyway good luck --U3202984 (discusscontribs) 11:57, 15 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]