Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Jonah complex

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You have done such a great job so far! I enjoyed seeing which theories you have chosen to expand on. I found this article that could be a good case study to look into; http://www.joams.com/uploadfile/2017/0613/20170613022136602.pdf. It discusses self actualisation, self efficacy and emotional intelligence in undergrad students and uses the Jonah complex as one of the testing measures. Hopefully this helps! Great work so far :) U3204463 --U3204463 (discuss • contribs) 04:36, 29 August 2021 (UTC)

Hey Paul! I love how you've restructured your book chapter since a couple of weeks ago! And the addition of colourful quizzes and more photos makes it POP! well done!--u3197931 (discuss • contribs) 02:57, 14 October 2021 (UTC)

Really enjoy the colour and structure of your chapter, it helps to keep it exciting and friendly --U3202710 (discuss • contribs) 04:27, 15 October 2021 (UTC)

Heading casing

Hi JediClass. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:00, 31 August 2021 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title Excellent User page Excellent - used effectively Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Excellent - summarised with direct link(s) to evidence. Headings Excellent The Overview should not have sub-headings. I suggest abbreviating/condensing the Overview which may involve shifting some of the current content into subsequent sections. Promising 2-level heading structure. It is not entirely clear what the connecting narrative between the sections will be, so work on that as the drafting develops. The Overview and Conclusion can help to outline and summarise that narrative respectively. See earlier comment about Heading casing. Key points Basic development of key points for each section, with relevant citations. Overview - Consider adding: focus questions an example or case study Several related and interesting concepts are suggested. The challenge will be to select the most relevant and concentrate on these and how they connect to the JC. And being smart about what to leave out. Having said that, some other related concepts that may be of interest: Behaviour inhibition system Hamlet syndrome (overthinkers who underachieve) Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Note that APA style now uses only a single space after a period, before the next sentence. Fear of growth (Goud, 1994) sounds promising - consider expanding. Link key concepts (e.g., self-actualisation) to other chapters which contain more information. Strive to connect each section to the overarching question (e.g., for the self-actualisation section, how does this connect to the JC?). Currently theory appears to be better covered than research. Conclusion (the most important section): what might the take-home, practical messages be? in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question in the sub-title? Figure Excellent A figure is presented. Caption uses APA style - except only Figure X should be capitalised, not the caption text. does not use APA style. explains how the image connects to key points being made in the main text. could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text. Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References Good For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation Resources Very good - have made some minor edits

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:00, 31 August 2021 (UTC)

Suggestion

Hey! I had never heard of a Jonah complex before and I did some research for my own interest, and I was surprised by how intrigued i was. Anyway here is a really interesting article about overcoming the jonah complex that i noticed you do not have yet, so it might be helpful, Anyway good luck https://www.koreascience.or.kr/article/JAKO202123861772326.page --U3202984 (discuss • contribs) 11:57, 15 October 2021 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a solid, interesting chapter. The chapter clearly demonstrates independent thinking by utilising contemporary motivational theory to understand a reluctance to growth. The main areas for potential improvement is in critically review relevant research. Although there may not be much research on the JC per se, there should be plenty of research about related constructs including the theories reviewed. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Overview Reasonably well developed Overview. Focus question(s) could be expanded to more clearly align with the sub-title and/or heading structure. A case study or example could help to illustrate the concept and engage reader interest. Theory — Breadth The JC and related motivation theories are well selected, described, and explained. There are several other theoretical concepts that perhaps could be briefly mentioned or linked to, some of which we've such as self-sabotage, fixed mindset, Hamlet syndrome, thanatos/shadow, reactance, resistance vs. readiness to change, and psychodynamics. The chapter doesn't wander off into discussion of irrelevant theory. Theory — Depth Appropriate depth is provided about the selected theory(ies). There seem to be several other JC articles that could be incorporated e.g., Jia, F., & Baek, H. K. (2021). Research on the forming factors and overcoming of Jonah complex. Industry Promotion Research, 6(3), 79-88. Lacocque, P. E. (1982). Desacralizing life and its mystery: The Jonah complex revisited. Journal of Psychology and Theology, 10(2), 113-119. Maslow, A. H. (1991). How we diminish ourselves. The Journal of Humanistic Education and Development, 29(3), 117-120. Some useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts. But perhaps these examples could be more compelling (e.g., the lesson of the cliff (I didn't get the "cliff" part?) could perhaps be replaced by a self-authored two part scenario of someone encountering and them overcoming the JC). An independent conclusion is arrived based on application of motivational theory. Research — Key findings Overall, this chapter provides a basic overview of relevant research. Research — Critical thinking There is limited critical appraisal of research. Integration The chapter places more emphasis on theory than research. Where research is discussed, it is integrated with theory. Conclusion Well developed. Clear take-home messages. The chapter would benefit from a more developed Conclusion, with a clearer take-home self-help message for each focus question. The Conclusion is underdeveloped. Consider: Reminding the reader about the problem or phenomenon of interest. Summarising the key points. Add practical, take-home messages. Written expression — Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is good. Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in brackets at the end of the sentence. Reduce use of weasel words which bulk out the text (e.g., "has been shown to be"), but don't enhance meaning. Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes. Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections. Grammar, spelling, and proofreading are excellent. Figures and tables Use APA style for Table captions. See example. Each Table and Figure is referred to at least once within the main text. Citations use correct APA style. References use reasonably correct APA style. The main area for potential improvement is consistency and completeness. Written expression — Learning features Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. # No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Links to non-peer-reviewed sources should be moved to the external links section. Very good use of image(s). Basic use of table(s). Very good use of feature box(es). Excellent use of quiz(zes). Good use of case studies or examples. 1]]. Social contribution ~15 logged, useful, minor to moderate Wikiversity social contributions with direct links to evidence. Substantial other contributions to Twitter and UCLearn Canvas.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:16, 29 October 2021 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent presentation. Overview The sub-title is missing on the opening slide - this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Perhaps it is a problem with the term "Jonah complex" but it seems to beg explanation of the "Jonah" part - or be renamed more literally (e.g., "shying away from growth complex", or "always taking the safe path syndrome"). This presentation has a very engaging introduction to hook audience interest . A context for the topic is established. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section. The presentation addresses the topic. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. The presentation is well structured. The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory. The presentation makes little use of relevant psychological research. The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice. The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information. Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with good take-home messages. Environmental constraint of growth motivation, however, is problematic (rather than OK). Audio The audio is easy to follow and interesting to listen to. The presentation makes effective use of narrated audio. Audio communication is clear and well paced. Excellent intonation enhances listener interest and engagement. Audio recording quality was excellent. Mute the music during narration to help the viewer concentrate on the combination of visual information and narrated audio. Video Overall, visual display quality is excellent. The presentation makes effective use of animated slides with text and images. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. Some slides are too visually busy. The presentation is very well produced. Meta-data The chapter title and sub-title are used in the name of the presentation - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. Links to and from the book chapter are provided. The presentation is incorrectly categorised as being for kids. This introduces limitations, such as being unable to add the presentation to a playlist. More info. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are communicated. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:14, 17 November 2021 (UTC)