You have done such a great job so far! I enjoyed seeing which theories you have chosen to expand on. I found this article that could be a good case study to look into; http://www.joams.com/uploadfile/2017/0613/20170613022136602.pdf. It discusses self actualisation, self efficacy and emotional intelligence in undergrad students and uses the Jonah complex as one of the testing measures.
Hopefully this helps! Great work so far :) U3204463 --U3204463 (discuss • contribs) 04:36, 29 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Hey Paul! I love how you've restructured your book chapter since a couple of weeks ago! And the addition of colourful quizzes and more photos makes it POP! well done!--u3197931 (discuss • contribs) 02:57, 14 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Really enjoy the colour and structure of your chapter, it helps to keep it exciting and friendly --U3202710 (discuss • contribs) 04:27, 15 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]
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The Overview should not have sub-headings. I suggest abbreviating/condensing the Overview which may involve shifting some of the current content into subsequent sections.
Promising 2-level heading structure. It is not entirely clear what the connecting narrative between the sections will be, so work on that as the drafting develops. The Overview and Conclusion can help to outline and summarise that narrative respectively.
Basic development of key points for each section, with relevant citations.
Overview - Consider adding:
an example or case study
Several related and interesting concepts are suggested. The challenge will be to select the most relevant and concentrate on these and how they connect to the JC. And being smart about what to leave out. Having said that, some other related concepts that may be of interest:
Behaviour inhibition system
Hamlet syndrome (overthinkers who underachieve)
Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters.
Note that APA style now uses only a single space after a period, before the next sentence.
Fear of growth (Goud, 1994) sounds promising - consider expanding.
Link key concepts (e.g., self-actualisation) to other chapters which contain more information.
Strive to connect each section to the overarching question (e.g., for the self-actualisation section, how does this connect to the JC?).
Currently theory appears to be better covered than research.
Conclusion (the most important section):
what might the take-home, practical messages be?
in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question in the sub-title?