Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Fitspiration and body image

Case study

When I read the title of your book chapter, I immediately think of 'David Goggins' whose is a motivational speaker and author, and delivers inspirational motivation through sharing his fitness experience and mindset values. I believe he would be a perfect case study for you to use within your bookchapter. --U3039010 (discuss • contribs) 13:00, 29 August 2021 (UTC)

Hi, I will also add a couple of other fitness inspirational suggestions that may be of interest to you: Paralympics Australia, The Olympics, Arnold Schwarzenegger, million dollar baby (movie), and Rocky (movie). I hope this helps for some case study suggestions.--U3039010 (discuss • contribs) 13:17, 29 August 2021 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:08, 19 September 2021 (UTC)

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded Capitalisation of the sub-title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents User page Created - minimal, but sufficient Very brief description about self provided - consider expanding Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Unsummarised, indirect link None summarised with direct link(s) to evidence Headings See earlier comment about Heading casing Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic I'm not sure why there is a heading for "promotion mindset" - how does it relate to fitspiration and body image? Key points I recommend adopting a neutral, critical perspective than necessarily opening with a claim that fitspiration is harmful. Make sure all statements are qualified and supported by scientific evidence. Be careful not to exaggerate. The goal is to provide an overview of relevant psychological theory and research about this topic. There is a surprising lack of sufficient citation for the planned key points. I am not convinced that you've read much of the academic literature about this topic. Overview - Consider adding: an evocative description of the problem and what will be covered an image an example or case study Use APA style 7th edition for citations with three or more authors (i.e., FirstAuthor et al., year) For sections which include sub-sections include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Consider including more examples/case studies Conclusion (the most important section): under developed what might the take-home, practical messages be? in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions? Strive for balance - are there any positive effects? Figure The image was deleted - probably due to copyright violation. References Good Cite the references in the main body Add italics Resources See also Excellent External links Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:08, 19 September 2021 (UTC)

Topic Suggestion

Hey! This is a really interesting topic, especially among young teens. A suggestion I have is perhaps to write some insight on 'thinspiration' which was an especially prevalent problem in the early 2000s with the rise and idealisation of celebrities and models with an extremely low body weight! Here is an article you could use! (https://www.sciencedirect.com/science/article/pii/S1740144518302481) Good luck! --U3204694 (discuss • contribs) 10:43, 30 September 2021 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this chapter does a reasonably good job of applying psychological theory and research to a real-world problem. This chapter is well over the maximum word count. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Overview Promising. Explain (briefly) what fitspiration is. Consider introducing a case study to help engage reader interest. Theory — Breadth The relationship between fitspiration and body image is well described, with reference to relevant theory. Sometimes there is a lack of sufficient citation (e.g., see tags). Consider referring to cognitive dissonance. The chapter doesn't wander off into irrelevant theory. Theory — Depth Appropriate depth is provided about the selected theory(ies). Some useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts. More examples could be useful to illustrate key concepts. Research — Key findings Overall, this chapter provides a basic overview of relevant research. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses could be helpful. Research — Critical thinking Good critical thinking about research is evident. Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations suggesting specific directions for future research Integration Discussion of theory and research is well integrated. Conclusion Basic summary. Clear take-home messages. Written expression — Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic. Avoid overly emotive language (e.g,. severe and dangerous) in science-based communication. Layout Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections. See earlier comments about heading casing. Grammar Check and make correct use of commas. Use serial commas[1] - they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. Here's an explanatory video (1 min). The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[2]. Proofreading Replace double spaces with single spaces. Remove unnecessary capitalisation. APA style Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc.. Figures and tables Use APA style for Table captions. See example. Refer to each Table and Figure using APA style (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation). Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1). Figures are very well captioned. Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: Do not include author initials. If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[3] Check and correct use of italicisation Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Include hyperlinked dois Move non-peer-reviewed sources to the external links section Written expression — Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is very good/. Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Excellent use of image(s). Basic use of table(s). Excellent/Very good/Good/Basic/No use of feature box(es). Basic use of quiz(zes). Very good use of case studies or examples. Social contribution ~8 logged, useful, minor social contributions with direct links to evidence. ~2 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:36, 7 November 2021 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent presentation. Overview An opening slide with sub-title is presented and narrated - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Also include the title. A context for the topic is established. This presentation has a very engaging introduction to hook audience interest . Content The presentation addresses the topic. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. The presentation is well structured. The content is balanced and informed by science. The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory. The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological research. The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice. The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information. Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with excellent take-home message(s). Audio The audio is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to listen to. The presentation makes effective use of narrated audio. Audio communication is clear and well paced. Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. Excellent intonation enhances listener interest and engagement. Audio recording quality was excellent. Video Overall, visual display quality is excellent. The presentation makes effective use of animated slides text and image based slides. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images. The presentation is very well produced. Hide the presentation icons and mouse pointer. Meta-data The chapter title and sub-title are used in the name of the presentation - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. No written description of the presentation is provided. A link to the book chapter is not provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. Consider making the video public - it deserves a wider audience! Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. The presentation may have violated the copyrights of image owners. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:34, 17 November 2021 (UTC)