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The following book chapter has a very specific title and what the book chapter would be discussing. The book chapter has a good structure and headings that are specific. There are lots of references included which is nice to see and good to refer back on. I like how each section already has an outline of questions and main points. Looking forward to seeing the completed book chapter.— Preceding unsigned comment added by [[User:{{{1}}}|{{{1}}}]] ([[User talk:{{{1}}}#top|talk]] • [[Special:Contributions/{{{1}}}|contribs]])
Hi U3201446 , you've picked a pretty good topic and I think that discussing the potential competing motivations to altruism is very interesting. Especially in touching upon Social Exchange theory. This should make your chapter more nuanced, which is always good to ensure engagement. Just a heads up, the recommended wikiversity heading structure uses sentence case. --Robert.E.House (discuss • contribs) 06:33, 29 August 2021 (UTC)Reply
Latest comment: 3 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.
Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions.
Wiki bullet points are currently used for top-level, but not second level points
Direct quotes need page numbers
Provide in-text wiki links to key related chapters e.g., about empathy and about altruism.
Focus the headings and key points more narrowly on the EAH and less about the general concepts of empathy and altruism as separate constructs (there are other chapters with these foci).
Overview - Consider adding:
a description of the problem
focus questions
an example or case study
The social exchange theory section seems to wander off topic. Concentrate on providing the best possible summary of psychological knowledge (theory and research) about "What is the empathy-altruism hypothesis and how can it be applied?"
Expand theory and research.
Basic development of key points for each section, with relevant citations.
Latest comment: 2 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
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Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
This chapter is well under/over the maximum word count, so half the references and the external links are ignored for marking purposes.
For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits.
Critical thinking is good, but could be further evidenced by considering the strength of relationships.
What other research needs to be conducted?
When describing important research findings, include more detail about the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) and results (e.g., size of effect or relationship).
Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in brackets at the end of the sentence.
Layout
The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections.
Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159).
Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles.
No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
Latest comment: 2 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
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A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s).
What are the practical take-home message(s) that we can use to help improve our everyday lives based on the best available psychological theory and research about this topic?
The chapter sub-title but not the chapter title is used in the name of the presentation - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
The question mark is missing from the sub-title in the name of the presentation.
The presentation is incorrectly categorised as being for kids.
A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.
Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. Either provide details about the image sources and their copyright licenses in the video description or remove the presentation.
A copyright license for the presentation is provided.