Latest comment: 3 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
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Insufficient development of key points for each section
For sections which include sub-section include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings
Overview - Consider adding:
a description of the "problem"
focus questions
an image
an example or case study
Expand theory and research
Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. This is particularly important for this chapter as there are several other chapters about closely related concepts.
Consider including more examples/case studies
Conclusion (the most important section):
hasn't been developed
what might the take-home, practical messages be?
in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title?
Latest comment: 3 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
Hello, I think it's really good that you have listed the different stages of life, will be interesting to see how you expand them. I think your chapter would benefit from adding a heading such as 'The lifespan approach' in this section you could talk about studies that have utilised this approach to study emotion. Please see below the studies that I think you could incorporate:
1. 'Speaking About Feelings: Conceptions of Emotion Across the Life Span' https://doi.org/10.1037/0882-7974.4.4.425
2. 'Younger and Older Adults’ Beliefs About the Experience and Expression of Emotions Across the Life Span' https://doi.org/10.1093/geronb/gbt073
Best of luck! --U3217975 (discuss • contribs) 10:48, 10 October 2021 (UTC)Reply
Latest comment: 2 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.
Overall, this is an insufficient presentation because it doesn't cover the full topic which was: "How does emotion develop and vary across the lifespan?".
Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section.
This presentation doesn't adequately address the topic. It is overly narrowly focused on infant and child emotion development, rather than considering the whole lifespan.
The selection of content is problematic because it doesn't fully address the approved topic as listed at Motivation and emotion/Book/2021.
The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological theory.
The presentation makes no use of relevant psychological research.
The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies.
Consider exporting to a more common hosting platform such as YouTube which would allow the presentation to be given a title, description, link to the book chapter, license etc.
Consider exporting to a more common hosting platform such as YouTube which would allow the presentation to be given a title, description, link to the book chapter, license etc.
Latest comment: 2 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
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The main area for potential improvement is to focus on the whole lifespan, not just infants and children.
Insufficient use of primary, peer-reviewed sources as citations. Non-peer reviewed sources are over-used. Move non-peer reviewed links into the external links section.
For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits.
Overall, the quality of written expression is basic.
Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes.
Direct quotes are overused - it is much better to write in your own words.
Headings should use default wiki style (e.g., remove italics).
Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections.
Grammar
The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance.
Overall, the use of learning features is insufficient.
No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. This was taught in Tutorial 1.
No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. This was taught in Tutorial 1.
One use of image(s).
No use of table(s).
One use of feature box(es).
Basic use of quiz(zes).
No use of case studies or examples.
Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section.
Basic use of external links in the "External links" section.
Format bullet-points and numbered lists, per Tutorial 1.