Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Criminal profiling

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Heading casing[edit source]

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Hi U3204463. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example:

Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory

Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:58, 24 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Hey! I just made some spelling and grammar changes to your paper, looks great. I was wondering if racial profiling would be relevant to your paper? Goodluck [[1]] 13/10/2021 4:15 (UTC)

Comments[edit source]

Hi, the topic you have chosen is extremely interesting, it immediately caught my attention. The key points you have so far look great and are well thought out. I'm wondering if you have seen the show Criminal Minds?, it's all about criminal profiling and can give you great insight about your topic! --U3199141 (discusscontribs) 04:53, 29 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Splitting Glossary and End of chapter Quiz[edit source]

Hello! I just finished going through your chapter and it is looking so interesting. I do have a very minor formatting suggestion but I think the layout of your chapter would flow better if the quiz and the glossary were separate. It will help the visual progression through your chapter. I also added an external link to a Podcast called Real Crime Profile. I think this could provide further details around the practical side of profiling as the podcast included multiple cases of a behavioural analyst profiling real crime cases. Hope this helps :) --U3203008 (discusscontribs) 13:07, 29 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Comments[edit source]

From U3187741: Hi, I really like your topic so far! I believe this article might be useful in expanding your key findings and limitations section!

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Hi! I really enjoyed reading your chapter just now, I have a ted talk for you that could help you out! :)

Feedback[edit source]

Hi there!

Great start on your book chapter, and all the best as you keep chipping away at it! I do have a couple of pointers that I hope are helpful as you keep writing. Firstly, I know it's still in the early stages of drafting, but it is important to use a consistent style of referencing. If you do choose to go with the wikipedia referencing, footnotes go after a full stop like this.[1] Here is a link to the wikipedia guide: . Secondly, you might want to consider focussing on the question to remove unnecessary words. It is an application question, and as such, you might consider practical aspects of criminal profiling. Although this is a relatively old article, it might be helpful: . Finally, I was a bit confused about the image in the first paragraph. Isn't criminal profiling concerned with behaviour rather than appearance? The image seems to suggest that it involves appearance of the offender too.

I hope these points help, and you have a rewarding end to the semester!

U3202904 (discusscontribs) 07:58, 14 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Topic development feedback[edit source]

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

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Title[edit source]

  1. Excellent

User page[edit source]

  1. Basic, but sufficient
  2. Description about self provided
  3. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
  4. Link provided to book chapter

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. Summarised with indirect link(s) to evidence.
  2. Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions.
  3. Use a numbered list.

Headings[edit source]

  1. Promising heading structure because the headings are directly related to the central topic.
  2. See earlier comment about Heading casing.
  3. Use default heading formatting (e.g., avoid bold, italics, underline etc.).
  4. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings.
  5. Remove colons at the end of headings.
  6. Key findings and implications + Further research and improvements - probably these sections could be covered by previous sections and/or the Conclusion section instead.

Key points[edit source]

  1. Direct quotes need page numbers (APA style) - even better, write in your own words. Use double-quotation marks for direct quotes less than 40 words. Even better, write in your own words.
  2. Avoid overuse of italics.
  3. Instead of a glossary, use in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Several of these are already provided - well done.
  4. Overview
    1. clearly outlines the problem and what will be covered
    2. focus questions
    3. an image
    4. an example or case study
  5. For sections which include sub-section include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings.
  6. Unclear how the FAE and CD relate to criminal profiling - are these the most relevant psychological theories??
  7. Avoid having a long quiz at the end - it is better to instead have one or two questions at the end of each major section to test whether readers have understood the take-home message from each section.
  8. Conclusion (the most important section):
    1. partially developed
    2. what might the take-home, practical messages be?
    3. in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title?

Figure[edit source]

  1. A figure is presented.
  2. Caption should include Figure X. (period rather than colon)
  3. Expand caption to explain how it illustrates motivational theory being applied to criminal profiling.

References[edit source]

  1. Very good
  2. Check consistency of formatting.

Resources[edit source]

  1. See also
    1. OK
    2. Rename links and use sentence casing (I've done the first one)
  2. External links
    1. Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:23, 6 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Quick note[edit source]

Hey, I'd just like to say that you've put in some great effort into your topic! It can be a pretty precarious one but you've handled it quite well. I also found it rather interesting. As a previous suggestion mentioned, when using footnotes, make sure punctuation is before the reference (e.g., 'criminality.[1]'). I've made that mistake too. I've taken the liberty of fixing three of the ones I could see for you. Best of luck with it, and the rest of your units this semester --Robert.E.House (discusscontribs) 10:53, 17 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]