Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Academic buoyancy

Heading casing

Hi Kait B. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:40, 9 August 2021 (UTC)

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Hi Kait B. FYI, I've deleted this image because its use appears to be copyright restricted by Inner Drive[1]. We'll discuss how to find and use free to use images in Tutorial 02, but a quick tip is to start with the images available via Wikimedia Commons. Sincerely, James. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:46, 9 August 2021 (UTC)

Feedback

Hi! I found an article which I thought might be useful for your book chapter. It has a section which provides a good comparison between academic buoyancy and academic resilience. It details their similarities, differences and provides some good examples :) --TaraU3187760 (discuss • contribs) 07:05, 29 August 2021 (UTC) https://www.academia.edu/44411573/Academic_Resilience_and_its_Importance_in_Education_after_Covid_19?from=cover_page

Topic development feedback

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted User page Excellent - used effectively Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Summarised with indirect link(s) to evidence Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Use a numbered list Headings See earlier comment about Heading casing Promising 2-level heading structure - makes sense to use the focus questions as top-level headings. Consider further development by expanding the the second level heading structure. Key points Overall, plenty of citations and some good initial ideas, but more development of content explaining the arguments and key points would be ideal. But the overall scope is good. Avoid overcapitalisation (APA style) - more info Overview - Consider adding: a description of the problem an image an example or case study Move references into the References section; retain citations (but use APA style e.g., no author initials) Good coverage of theory. Some research citations. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Consider including more examples/case studies Conclusion (the most important section): under developed what might the take-home, practical messages be? in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title? Figure Excellent Cite each figure at least once in the main text References Excellent selection OK formatting; for APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation doi formatting (links should be clickable) remove "Retrieved from ..." Resources See also Very good Use bullet-points External links Very good Use bullet-points

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:09, 11 September 2021 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this chapter does a reasonably good job of applying psychological theory and research to a real-world problem. The main area for potential improvement is the quality of written expression. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Overview Solid Overview. Reasonably clear focus question(s). Consider including a case study or example could help to help engage reader interest. Theory — Breadth Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained. The chapter doesn't wander off into discussion of irrelevant theory. More detail about how to promote each of the 5Cs could be provided. Theory — Depth Appropriate depth is provided about AB. More detail about how to promote each of the 5Cs could be provided. Tables and/or lists are used effectively to help clearly convey key theoretical information. Useful discussion about how AB might apply to ADHD and Indigenous Australians. More examples could be useful to illustrate key concepts. Research — Key findings Relevant research is cited, but could be reviewed in more detail. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Research — Critical thinking Critical thinking about research is good. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies considering the strength of relationships suggesting specific directions for future research Integration Discussion of theory and research is well integrated. Conclusion Reasonably well developed. Some text seems to be repeated from earlier? Add practical, take-home messages. Written expression — Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is good. Some of the written expression is awkward (e.g., see sentences tagged with ) and should be rewritten to improve clarity. Some sentences are overly long; consider splitting them into shorter, separate sentences. Direct quotes are overused - it is far more convincing to write in your own words. Direct quotes should be embedded within sentences and paragraphs, rather than dumped holus-bolus. Even better, communicate the concept in your own words. Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in parentheses at the end of the sentence. Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections. Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance. Check and make correct use of commas. Use serial commas[2] - they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. Here's an explanatory video (1 min). Check and correct use of semi-colons (;) and colons (:). Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[3]. Abbreviations Abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.) should only be used inside parentheses. Proofreading Replace double spaces with single spaces. Remove unnecessary capitalisation. APA style Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc.. Direct quotes need page numbers. Check and correct formatting of page numbers for direct quotes. Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159). Figures and tables Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1). Figures are very well captioned. Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses. Multiple citations in parentheses should be listed in alphabetical order by first author surname. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[4] Check and correct use of italicisation Include hyperlinked dois Written expression — Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is basic. Format bullet-points and numbered lists, per Tutorial 1. Basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of image(s). Basic use of table(s). Excellent use of feature box(es). Very good use of quiz(zes). Little to no use case studies or examples. Social contribution ~25 logged, useful, mostly major, social contributions with direct links to evidence.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:05, 2 November 2021 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a reasonably good presentation. Overview The sub-title is missing on the opening slide - this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A context for the topic is established. Briefly explain why this topic is important (note: this is covered later). Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section. The presentation addresses the topic. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. The distinction between academic buoyancy and academic resiliency is very well explained. The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory. The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological research. The presentation makes good use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice by explaining the application of the broaden and build theory. However, too much time is spent on this theory (e.g., no room for Conclusion). Conclusion A Conclusion slide is not presented with take-home message(s). Audio The presentation makes good use of narrated audio. Audio communication is well paced. Good intonation. Audio recording quality was good. Video Overall, visual display quality is very good. The presentation makes effective use of graphical slides. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The visual communication is supplemented by images. The presentation is well produced using simple tools. Hide the screencastify recording box (distracting). Meta-data The chapter title but not the sub-title is used in the name of the presentation - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. Links to and from the book chapter are provided. A link to the book chapter is not provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. The presentation is incorrectly categorised as being for kids. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. Either provide details about the image sources and their copyright licenses in the presentation description or remove the presentation. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:04, 17 November 2021 (UTC)