Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/TV binge-watching motivation

Comments

I think someone has said this already but, consider breaking up your longer sections with subheadings. Good work! --SLDux (discuss • contribs) 15:30, 18 October 2020 (UTC)

Binge-watching as a form of procrastination

Hi! Really interesting topic that you have here and I look forward to seeing what you come up with! :) May I also suggest looking into binge-watching as a form of procrastination and how that relates to instant vs. delayed gratification? I hope this helps! :) Here's an interesting essay that I hope give you some ideas: http://essay.utwente.nl/81723/1/Ciroth_BA_Faculty%20of%20Behavioural%2C%20Management%20%26%20Social%20Sciences.pdf U3169316 (discuss • contribs) 02:49, 9 September 2020 (UTC)

Relevance of Binge-Watching Motivation

I suggest using the COVID-19 pandemic research on the increase in paid entertainment services and using that data and those statistics to help describe and highlight the importance of your book chapter and the impacts of TV Binge watching on a persons health/relationships. Amin Nazzal (discuss • contribs) 10:19, 27 August 2020 (UTC) Amin Nazzal (discuss • contribs) 14:19, 30 August 2020 (UTC)

Descriptions of the Terms Used

Within your descriptions of the terms used section i would recommend using a table to present this information. I think this will assist the reader if they were to go back and double check a meaning. This link can be used to assist in the creation of tables https://en.wikiversity.org/wiki/Motivation_and_emotion/Assessment/Chapter/Tables. --U3187381 (discuss • contribs) 03:02, 14 October 2020 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for sentence casing. For example, the wikitext should be: == Cats and mice == rather than == Cats and Mice == -- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:19, 16 September 2020 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title and sub-title Not added User page Created, minimal Expand description about self e.g., consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Add link to book chapter Social contribution None summarised with link(s) to evidence. Section headings Add Overview section. See earlier comment about Heading casing. Basic, 2-level heading structure - could benefit from further development Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Key points Very limited development Image An image (figure) is not presented. References None provided Resources None provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:19, 16 September 2020 (UTC)

Symptoms questionnaire

I have linked an interesting study that assess bing watching behaviour and that created a questionnaire to show symptoms of binge watching https://doi.org/10.1016/j.chb.2018.08.022 --Jackson McNee (discuss • contribs) 03:22, 10 October 2020 (UTC)

This should not be a research proposal

@Palloverma00: The book chapter exercise is not a research proposal. I strongly recommend a close reading of the author guidelines and the lecture and tutorial content about this assessment task. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:40, 10 October 2020 (UTC)

Formatting

Hi, This is a really interesting topic you have selected. I can see that you've put a lot of time and effort into researching this. However, can I suggest that you break down the really long paragraphs and use some sub-headings. It would make it easier to read and give your book chapter a better overall look. Also, some images would be helpful for the aesthetics and maybe think about some graphs or diagrams so that it can be more engaging.

Great work.

--U3114726 (discuss • contribs) 05:48, 14 October 2020 (UTC)

Hi, I suggest you include some internal wikilinks throughout your text on key concepts. This can be done by highlighting a word and hitting the link button. I would also suggest implementing some engaging case studies or quizzes throughout your chapter, just to break up the reading a little bit and possibly add some colour to your page. If you're not too savvy with using wikiversity I found a little trick was copying and pasting case study or quiz boxes from previous chapters (e.g Motivation and Emotion/Book/2019) into my own chapter and changing the content. Hope this helps, good luck with the rest of your chapter. --Shayley Woodgate (discuss • contribs) 03:13, 18 October 2020 (UTC)

A few idea's

Hi,
I was thinking that you could include a section on intentional and unintentional binges. https://psycnet.apa.org/doiLanding?doi=10.1037%2Fppm0000167 here is an article about its addictive potential. Also here is an article on optimising binge-watching behaviour https://dl.acm.org/doi/pdf/10.1145/2932206.2932216?casa_token=QrO3RRAqK3kAAAAA%3AB8ET4o4Hm1DH-D1G_NC3KjGopChk0cX1LVXkvhEGRaz3coMsYABv3FARD92l2s9KuY3qNbbVOPk Good luck!
--U3201178 (discuss • contribs) 03:45, 15 October 2020 (UTC)

Social Contribution

Hi, well done on your book chapter, there is so much relevant information! it looks like a lot of time and effort went into this. A couple things I may comment on is the "review of current literature" you really don't need this in your book chapter as book chapters don't usually have this. You could add this into a fancy box or pretty box to separate it from the rest of the relevant information. Another thing I might say is to add more information into the "Descriptions of the terms used" headings. What's the point in having subheadings when there is only one sentence? if you were to add a more information into these your book chapter will really benefit from it. --U3190523 (discuss • contribs) 21:22, 18 October 2020 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient chapter because it does not address the assigned topic and does not follow the author guidelines. The Overview is underdeveloped. Consider: Explaining the problem or phenomenon more succinctly. The focus questions are poorly developed. None of them address the assigned topic (the sub-title). So, they are all irrelevant. There is some bizarre/irrelevant content - e.g., gastric bypass? research proposal? For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Theory Overall, this chapter makes insufficient use of motivational theory. Research Overall, this chapter makes insufficient use of relevant psychological research. Many claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). How does it make sense for a statement like this: "Most children have been detected with nutrition and sleep problem since they have the habit of watching streamed series before their bedtime" to have a 1973 citation? Written expression Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is well below professional standard. UC Study Skills assistance is recommended to help improve writing skills to a professional standard. Direct quotes are over-used. If used, they should be embedded within sentences and paragraphs, rather than dumped holus-bolus. Even better, communicate concepts in your own words. Grammar The grammar for most sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Spelling Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour). Proofreading More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard. Replace double spaces with single spaces. TV is an abbreviation for television. So, it should be capitalised. APA style Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc.. Direct quotes need page numbers. Figures and tables Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1). Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text. Citations are not in full APA style. For example: If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation. Check and correct use of italicisation. Include hyperlinked dois. Social contribution ~2 logged, minor, unsigned, social contributions with direct links to evidence.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:20, 17 November 2020 (UTC)

Comments on resubmitted book chapter

These revisions have been reviewed. Comments:

1. Overall, this is a vastly improved and now complete chapter.
2. The phenomenon of TV binge watching is now better described.
3. Focus questions are now more relevant to the topic.
4. More relevant research is now incorporated.
5. More relevant theory is now included.
6. Irrelevant content has been removed.
7. Figures 1 and 3 were falsely claimed as the author's own work - they have been recommended for deletion.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:49, 10 December 2020 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, the content doesn't adequately address the topic, but the production qualities are reasonably good. Structure and content As per the book chapter comments, the content doesn't answer the assigned question. The topic is about the motivations for binge-watching, not the health consequences of binge-watching. There is insufficient use of psychological theory and research. Communication The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides with narrated audio. Well paced. Good intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The visual communication could be improved by including some relevant images. Production quality The chapter title but not the sub-title are used in the video title - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. The chapter title and sub-title are used on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio recording quality was very good. Visual display quality was very good A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the video description but not in the meta-data. A link to the book chapter is provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A brief written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:17, 19 November 2020 (UTC)

Social Contribuiton

Hi there, Well done on completing your book chapter, It seems like you have put great effort into finding a range of information, in saying this I feel this information could be improved by add some studies that provide motivational theory and reasons behind your content. Below is an example of a peer reviewed article I feel might be useful 'An exploration of the motivations for binge-watching and the role of individual differences' - Journal of Computers in Human Behaviour- Science direct

I also feel it would be helpful to add an interactive activity to help engage readers, for example a quiz. --U3187388 (discuss • contribs) 10:03, 6 December 2020 (UTC)