Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Stress reduction theory

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for sentence casing. For example, the wikitext should be: == Cats and mice == rather than == Cats and Mice == -- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:12, 21 September 2020 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

Title and sub-title OK Sub-title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents Authorship details removed - authorship is as per the page's editing history User page Created About me Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Add link to book chapter Social contribution None summarised with link(s) to evidence. Section headings Excellent See earlier comment about Heading casing. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Consider reducing the general background on stress in order to concentrate more of the chapter on SRT. Key points Use bullet points (see Tutorial 1 - Using Wikiversity) Overview - Consider adding: a description of the problem and what will be covered an image an example or case study Avoid providing too much background information (e.g., about stress). Briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal wiki links to other book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content of this chapter directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. "As discussed above" - remove direction referencing or use section links Expand theory and research about SRT. Expand detail about the elements of SRT. There are lots of other book chapters about stress - integrate links and build on that work. You may also be interested in psychology of natural scenes. Basic development of key points for each section, with relevant citations. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Consider including more examples/case studies. Conclusion (the most important section): hasn't been developed what might the take-home, practical messages be? in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question in the sub-title? Image Good An image (figure) is presented. Caption does not use APA style. could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text. Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References 3 provided Not in APA style Resources Poorly presented See Tutorial 1 for how to add internal and external links

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:12, 21 September 2020 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter. Incorrect title/sub-title - now fixed. This chapter is over the maximum word count. The Overview is underdeveloped. Consider explaining the problem in more detail. An illustrative case study could be help to engage reader interest. Addressing the topic development feedback could have helped to improve this chapter. Limited feedback provided here because it appears that the topic development wasn't taken on board. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Theory There is too much general theoretical material (e.g., about stress). Instead, summarise and link to further information (such as other book chapters or Wikipedia articles), to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question). Most of the general content was ignored for marking purposes because it insufficiently addresses the target topic. The chapter starts to address the target topic in the section titled: "What is stress reduction theory (SRT) and how can it be used to reduce feelings of stress?"in Basic but sufficient coverage of relevant theory is provided. Research Overall, this chapter provides a basic overview of relevant research. Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). When describing important research findings, consider indicating the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Written expression Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead, use section linking. Use 3rd person perspective rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you")[1]. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. Layout Use default wiki heading styles instead of underlining for sub-headings - that way the sub-headings will appear in the table of contents. Use bullet-points and numbered lists, per Tutorial 1. This includes in the see also section. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Learning features See also - move external links to the external links section at the end. No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Use in-text interwiki links, rather than external links, per Tutorial 1. Ideally, use in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Other links can be moved to the external links section. Minimal use of image(s). Basic use of table(s). Table 2 is unnecessarily complex. More importantly, highlight the key take-away messages from this study. Basic use of feature box(es). Basic use of quiz(zes). Minimal use of case studies or examples. Grammar Check and make correct use of commas. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals'). Use serial commas[2] - it is part of APA style and generally recommended by grammaticists. Here's a 1 min. explanatory video. Check and correct use of affect vs. effect. Abbreviations Remove abbreviation section - not needed. Use abbreviations sparingly. Do not use abbreviations for minor terms that aren't used very much in the chapter. Introduce abbreviations when the word is first used. Spelling Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the tags). Proofreading More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard (e.g., use capitalisation for months of the year). APA style Figures and tables Use APA style for Figure captions. See example. Use APA style for Table captions. See example. Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text. Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1). Citations are not in full APA style. For example: Do not include author first name or initials. Space needed after comma and before year. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets. References are not in full APA style. For example: Provide full journal name. Check and correct use of italicisation. Include hyperlinked dois. Social contribution No logged social contributions

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:19, 16 November 2020 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall Overall, this is a promising but insufficient presentation. The presentation is well under the maximum time limit - content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes. Structure and content The presentation makes basic use of theory. The presentation makes no use of research. The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples or case studies. What are the practical take-home message(s) that we can use to help improve our everyday lives based on the best available psychological theory and research about this topic? Communication The presentation is interesting to watch and listen to. The presentation makes basic use of text based slides with animation. It would be helpful to use more narration and less music audio. The font size is mostly sufficiently large to make it easy to read. Production quality The title and sub-title are missing from both the video title and on the opening slide - this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio quality was very good but lacking narration. Visual display quality was good. Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided. A link to the book chapter is not provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A written description of the presentation is not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:13, 20 November 2020 (UTC)