Latest comment: 4 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
Consider importance of headings, use alternate formatting e.g. bold, underline; If this is an article and you wanted it as a heading, state shortened article or author name instead
Latest comment: 4 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.
Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
Promising 2-level heading structure - could benefit from further development by expanding the structure (e.g,. to focus on applications which is part of the sub-title).
I've nominated the images for deletion because I can't see anything to indicate that they are available under a creative commons license. Let me know if I'm mistaken.
If you like the image concepts, you could create your own simplified version and upload/use, and cite the original. Alternatively, you can contact the copyright owner and request permission to upload. You can learn more about images and copyright etc. in Tutorial 3 or come along to a virtual drop-in for further assistance.
Latest comment: 3 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via UCLearn, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.
Overall, this is a very good chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
Overall, the quality of written expression is good.
Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in brackets at the end of the sentence.
Layout
Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections.
No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example.
No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
Use in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters.
Good use of image(s). Expand captions.
No use of table(s).
Excellent use of feature box(es).
Very good use of quiz(zes).
Grammar
The grammar for many sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance.
Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159).
Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10).
Latest comment: 3 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.
Comments about the book chapter also apply to this section.
There is too much content, in too much detail, presented within the allocated time frame. Zoom out and provide a higher-level presentation at a slower pace. It is best to cover a small amount of well-targetted content than a large amount of poorly selected content.
Add and narrate an initial title/sub-title slide, to help the viewer understanding the focus and goal of the presentation.
Consider adding and narrating an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered.
The presentation makes OK use of relevant psychological theory.
The presentation makes no use of relevant psychological research.
The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies.
The wording and/or formatting/grammar of the title/sub-title is inconsistent between the name of the video, the opening slide, and/or the book chapter.
Audio recording quality was poor (e.g., use natural/real voice instead).
Visual display quality was poor.
A copyright license for the presentation is not provided.
A link to the book chapter is not provided.
A link from the book chapter is provided.
A written description of the presentation is not provided.