Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Phencyclidine and emotion

Topic development feedback

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

Title and sub-title Excellent User page Created, with description about self and link to book chapter Social contribution Summarised with direct links to evidence. Section headings Basic, 1-level heading structure - could benefit from further development, perhaps using a 2-level structure. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings. Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise generic concepts and provide internal wiki links to further information. Then focus most of the content on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Key points Key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Consider introducing a case study in the Overview. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section rather than having one longer quiz towards the end. Image An image (figure) is presented. Caption uses APA style. Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text. Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References OK. For full APA style: Provide full journal title Use correct italicisation Use the new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html Resources See also Also link to relevant book chapters External links Target an international audience Use sentence casing

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:55, 29 September 2019 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for sentence casing. For example, the wikitext should be: == Cats and mice == rather than == Cats and Mice == -- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:21, 21 September 2020 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

Title and sub-title Excellent User page Moved from main space to User:SoniaM2020 Created About me Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Summarised with indirect link(s) to evidence. Include chapter title in summary. Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Use a numbered list. Section headings Promising 2-level heading structure - could benefit from further development by expanding the structure. See earlier comment about Heading casing. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Key points Partial development of key points. Weak on theory - really need to develop a neurological understanding of the drug and how it impacts on emotion. Overview - Consider adding: a description of the problem and what will be covered an image an example or case study Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Consider including more examples/case studies. Avoid overcapitalisation (APA style) - more info (e.g., "Phencyclidine" does not warrant a capital). Conclusion (the most important section): hasn't been developed what might the take-home, practical messages be? in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question in the sub-title? Image An image (figure) is presented. Caption does not use APA style. could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text. Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References Good For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation check and correct APA style for book chapters - have you consulted this book? If not, remove. Resources See also Use bullet-points Rename links so that they are more user friendly Include source in brackets after link Also link to relevant book chapters Also link to relevant Wikipedia pages External links Use bullet-points Use sentence (lower) case Include source in brackets after link

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:21, 21 September 2020 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via UCLearn, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

Overall Overall, this is an insufficient chapter because there is a lack of sufficient psychological theory and research about the effects of phencyclidine on emotion (e.g., which emotions are modulated by phencyclidine and how/why?). Addressing the topic development feedback could have helped to improve this chapter (e.g. "Avoid overcapitalisation (APA style) - more info (e.g., "Phencyclidine" does not warrant a capital)."). As earlier feedback appears to have been ignored, limited feedback is provided on the book chapter. This chapter is well under the maximum word count. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Theory Basic of coverage of theory about the general effects of phencyclidine is provided, but there in insufficient theory specifically about the emotional effects of phencyclidine. Research Overall, this chapter provides a basic overview of relevant research. Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). One study is described in depth. More insight into the emotional effects of phencyclidine would be ideal. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicating the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Written expression Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic. Use permanent, rather than relative, time references. For example, instead of "20 years ago", refer to something like "at the beginning of the 21st century". In this way, the text will survive better into the future, without needing to be rewritten. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Layout Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections. Learning features Very good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Very good use of image(s). Consider increasing the size of display for some figures so that they are easier to read. Good/Basic use of table(s). Basic use of feature box(es). Basic use of quiz(zes). Grammar The grammar for many sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Spelling Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour). Proofreading Replace double spaces with single spaces. APA style Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc.. Figures and tables Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text. Use APA style for Table captions. See example. Citations are not in full APA style. References are not in full APA style. Move non-peer-reviewed sources to the external links section. Social contribution ~1 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:53, 27 November 2020 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall Overall, this is an insufficient presentation. The presentation is over the maximum time limit - content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes. Structure and content Comments about the book chapter also apply to this section. There is too much content, in too much detail, presented within the allocated time frame. Zoom out and provide a higher-level presentation. It is best to cover a small amount of well-targetted content than a large amount of poorly selected content. Consider adding and narrating an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. The presentation makes basic use of relevant theory. The presentation makes basic use of relevant research. The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies. The Conclusion did not fit within the time limit. Communication The presentation makes basic use of text based slides with narrated audio. Well paced. Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement. Check out how to pronounce phencyclidine! Consider improving articulation to enhance the clarity of speech. The audio communication could benefit from further practice. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. Some of the font size should be larger to make it easier to read. The visual communication could be improved by including some relevant images. Production quality The video is basically produced using simple tools. The sub-title is missing in both the video title and on the opening slide - this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio recording quality was OK, but could be improved (e.g., keyboard clicks audible). Visual display quality was basic. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided. A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the video description but not in the meta-data. A link to the book chapter is provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A written description of the presentation is not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:12, 27 November 2020 (UTC)