Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Nightmares and emotion

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Hey, this is a very cool topic! You are lucky hahah! I found this article which may help be useful in discussing psychological theories associated/supported with nightmares :) enjoy & good luck !!! https://www.frontiersin.org/articles/10.3389/fneur.2017.00201/full -Emma

U3189981 (discusscontribs) 02:56, 15 October 2020 (UTC)Reply

APA style for citations[edit source]

Hi, there is a small error in the citation, they do not need to be Italic. --U3178984 (discusscontribs) 10:02, 12 October 2020 (UTC)Reply

Comments[edit source]

Hi, interesting topic choice! An idea for content could be recurring nightmares in people with post traumatic stress disorder. Good luck! U3130574 (discusscontribs) 00:43, 26 August 2020 (UTC)Reply

This sounds like a very interesting topic! I have a few ideas that you might like to consider. An interesting concept would to be look at the differences between adults and children experiencing nightmares, as well as considering if insomnia (which might be caused by nightmares) would have an influence on emotions. I'm looking forward to seeing how this chapter will develop! --U3190229 (discusscontribs) 07:20, 28 August 2020 (UTC)Reply

Hey this is a really interesting comment i almost chose this one so i was keen to read it. Was just wondering what made you chose this topic? --U3202324 (discusscontribs) 06:28, 24 October 2020 (UTC)Reply

Sleep paralysis[edit source]

An interesting concept could to look at if there is any link between nightmares and sleep paralysis--Jackson McNee (discusscontribs) 03:10, 16 September 2020 (UTC)Reply


Topic development feedback[edit source]

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Title and sub-title[edit source]

  1. OK
  2. Sub-title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents
  3. Formatting (e.g., capitalisation and font size) has been adjusted to match book style
  4. Authorship details removed - authorship is as per the page's editing history

User page[edit source]

  1. Created
  2. About me
    1. Description about self provided
    2. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
  3. Add link to book chapter

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. Excellent - summarised with direct link(s) to evidence.

Section headings[edit source]

  1. Excellent

Key points[edit source]

  1. Overall, well developed
  2. Use APA style for citations (e.g., do not use italics, order citations alphabetically by first author).
  3. Overview - Consider adding:
    1. an example or case study.
  4. Direct quotes need page numbers (APA style) - even better, write in your own words.
  5. Conclusion (the most important section):
    1. hasn't been developed
    2. what might the take-home, practical messages be?

Image[edit source]

  1. Excellent
  2. Cite each figure at least once in the main text.

References[edit source]

  1. Good
  2. For APA referencing style, check and correct:
    1. capitalisation
    2. italicisation
    3. doi formatting

Resources[edit source]

  1. See also
    1. Use bullet-points
    2. Include source in brackets after link
  2. External links
    1. Use bullet-points

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:10, 19 September 2020 (UTC)Reply

APA referencing, APA formatting and a case study question[edit source]

Hey your chapter is looking great, just a few recommendations:

1. Just make sure you are doing APA 7th edition referencing: this means you do not need to italicise citations and when you have three or more authors you need to put et al., for example where you have Spoormaker, Schredl & Bout, 2006 it should be Spoormaker et al., (2006)

2. The name of theories should not be capitalised, only theorists names should have a capital for example Maslow's hierarchy of needs. Refer to this website for more information. https://apastyle.apa.org/style-grammar-guidelines/capitalization/diseases-disorders-therapies

3. For the Buhler and Largo study remember to put in the date for the citation

4. When referring to direct quotes remember to add a page number

5. In the study by Perogamvros et al., 2019 you refer to HEM amplitude, did you mean REM? or is another concept. If so, it may be beneficial to explain what HEM means

I hope these comments are useful and can be helpful to you. You chapter is really great so far!

--U3190210 (discusscontribs) 01:25, 11 October 2020 (UTC)Reply


Chapter review and feedback[edit source]

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
  2. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Relevant theories are well selected, described, integrated, and explained, particularly given the limited knowledge in the area.
  2. Did you consult Freud (1900)? If not, this should be a secondary citation.
  3. There was perhaps an overemphasis on therapeutic approaches. For most people, nightmares do not need treatment. So, what else can be said about nightmares and emotion? e.g., Hartmann argues that nightmares provide valuable insight and potential for learning about one's emotions.
  4. What about specific emotions? Which are the most common emotions in nightmares? etc.

Research[edit source]

  1. Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory.
  2. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is very good.
    2. The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s).
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
    2. Avoid having sections with only one sub-section.
  3. Learning features
    1. For the See also and External links sections, use bullet-points, per Tutorial 1.
    2. Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive.
    3. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
    4. Basic use of image(s).
    5. No use of table(s).
    6. Good use of feature box(es).
    7. No use of quiz(zes).
    8. Basic use of case studies or examples.
  4. Grammar
    1. Use serial commas[1] - it is part of APA style and generally recommended by grammaticists.
  5. APA style
    1. Use double- rather than single-quote marks for emphasis.
    2. Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10).
    3. Figures and tables
      1. Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1).
    4. Citations are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year (e.g., Smith et al., 2020)
      2. Remove italics
      3. Multiple citations in parentheses should be listed in alphabetical order by first author surname.
      4. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets.
    5. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Check and correct use of capitalisation.
      2. Check and correct use of italicisation.

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. ~4 logged, useful, minor, social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:40, 5 November 2020 (UTC)Reply


Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an excellent presentation - great work .

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little.
  2. The presentation is well structured.
  3. Consider adding and narrating an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered.
  4. The presentation makes excellent use of theory.
  5. The presentation makes excellent use of research.
  6. The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice.
  7. A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s).

Communication[edit source]

  1. The presentation is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to.
  2. The presentation makes effective, creative use of animated slides with narrated audio.
  3. Well paced. Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
  4. Excellent intonation and articulation enhance listener interest and engagement.
  5. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read.
  6. The visual communication is effectively and creatively supplemented by images.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. The video is exceptionally well produced.
  2. Ideally, use the chapter title and sub-title in both the name of presentation and on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  3. Audio recording quality was excellent.
  4. Visual display quality was excellent.
  5. Image copyright status is provided, but specific links should be provided in the description to each image.
  6. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.
  7. A link to the book chapter is provided.
  8. A link from the book chapter is provided.
  9. A written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:32, 23 November 2020 (UTC)Reply