Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Methamphetamine and emotion

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Heading casing[edit source]

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for sentence casing). For example, the wikitext should be:

== Cats and mice ==

rather than

== Cats and Mice ==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:50, 12 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]


The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

Title and sub-title[edit source]

  1. Excellent

User page[edit source]

  1. Excellent - used effectively.
  2. Great that you link to your eportfolio
  3. Description about self provided
  4. Link provided to book chapter

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. Summarised with links to evidence.

Section headings[edit source]

  1. Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic.
  2. Avoid having sections with only one sub-section.
  3. See earlier comment about Heading casing.
  4. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.

Key points[edit source]

  1. Overall, well developed
  2. Overview - Consider adding:
    1. focus questions.
  3. Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise generic concepts and provide internal wiki links to further information. Then focus most of the content on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title.
  4. Key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations.

Image[edit source]

  1. An image (figure) is presented.
  2. Caption uses APA style.
  3. Cite each figure at least once in the main text.

References[edit source]

  1. Excellent.

Resources[edit source]

  1. Very good
  2. Use bullet-points

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:50, 12 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]

comments[edit source]

Hey! Really interesting subject and very well written, I found it very interesting how there is no broadly effective treatment just areas and not much in depth research on the effectiveness on some treatments. Do you know if there has been much research done in Australia in regards to intervention treatment methods? Might be an interesting aspect thing to add in there! Good luck with the rest of your chapter :) Dakka2005 (discusscontribs) 04:42, 17 October 2020 (UTC)Dakka2005[reply]

External references[edit source]

Hi Linda, thank you for all your helpful tips on my page. Your chapter is looking great. I hope you don't mind but I put your external links in alphabetical order :-) --Anubhandary (discusscontribs) 10:57, 17 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]


Chapter review and feedback[edit source]

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a very good chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
  2. For additional feedback, see following comments and these copyedits.
  3. The chapter could benefit from further development of the Conclusion at the time of submission.
  4. This chapter is well over the maximum word count.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained.
  2. The Reeve (2018) textbook is overused as a citation - instead, utilise primary, peer-reviewed sources.

Research[edit source]

  1. Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory.
  2. What is the prevalence of MA use? MUD?
  3. What are the recovery/rehabilitation rates?
  4. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicating the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is very good.
    2. "People" is usually a better term than "individuals". Also, consider something like "people experiencing MA dependence" rather than "MA-dependent individuals" - there is a subtle, but important difference.
    3. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
    4. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets.
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
    2. Section 6.1, 6.2, and 7 headings could be abbreviated
  3. Learning features
    1. Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles.
    2. Excellent/Very good/Good/Basic/No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
    3. Some Wikipedia links have been added an external links - instead use interwiki links.
    4. Excellent use of image(s), with detailed captions.
    5. Excellent use of table(s).
    6. Excellent use of feature box(es).
    7. Excellent case studies. But what happened to Scarlett - could she recover? How?
  4. Grammar
    1. Check and correct use of affect vs. effect.
    2. Use serial commas[1] - it is part of APA style and generally recommended by grammaticists.
    3. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[2].
    4. Figures and tables
      1. Use APA style for Table captions. See example.
    5. Citations are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year (e.g., Smith et al., 2020).
      2. Multiple citations in parentheses should be listed in alphabetical order by first author surname.
    6. References use correct APA style.

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. ~11 logged, useful, social contributions (most in the week before chapters due) with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:52, 1 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]


Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an excellent presentation.
  2. This presentation makes creative/effective use of simple tools.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little.

Communication[edit source]

  1. The presentation is easy to follow and interesting to watch and listen to.
  2. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides with narrated audio.
  3. Well paced. Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
  4. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. The chapter title and sub-title are used in the video title - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. The chapter title and sub-title are used on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  3. Audio recording quality was excellent.
  4. Visual display quality was excellent.
  5. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.
  6. A link to the book chapter is provided.
  7. A link from the book chapter is provided.
  8. A written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:13, 13 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]