Journal article for Schachter and Singer's Theory[edit source]
Hi, great chapter! I just wanted to add this journal article link about Schachter and Singer's theory, I found it really useful for my chapter. Reisenzein, R. (1983). The Schachter theory of emotion: Two decades later. --U3188019 (discuss • contribs) 19:58, 18 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
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Overall, this is an insufficient chapter mainly due to the lack of use of more specific psychological theory and research and the poor quality of written expression.
The Conclusion was very good.
For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits.
Only a very basic understanding is evident of emotion and some of it is incorrect (e.g., not all emotions involve an increase in heart-rate - consider sadness).
There is too much general theoretical material (e.g., about general theories of emotion). Instead, summarise and link to further information (such as other book chapters or Wikipedia articles), to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question).
Basic description of relevant psychological theory about hypomania is provided.
Overall, this chapter provides a basic overview of relevant research.
Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the [factual?] tags).
The cannabis study is interesting.
When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicating the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful.
Overall, the quality of written expression is below professional standard. UC Study Skills assistance is recommended to help improve writing skills to a professional standard.
Use 3rd person perspective rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you")[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes.
Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
The chapter could be improved by developing some of the bullet-points into full paragraph format.
Layout
Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections.
Learning features
One use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example.
No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
Use in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters.
Good use of image(s).
No use of table(s).
Good use of feature box(es).
Basic use of one quiz question.
Very good use of case studies or examples.
Grammar
The grammar for many sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages.
Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the [spelling?] tags). Spell-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages.
Proofreading
More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard.
Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159).
Direct quotes need page numbers.
Figures and tables
Refer to each Table and Figure using APA style (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation).
General explanation of emotion has been expanded and irrelevant theory removed. A more appropriate emphasis on cognitive behavioural theory is provided.
Interwiki links have been added.
Emotional characteristics of hypomania - dot points have been expanded into paragraphs. Note that the Black Dog Institute is not an academic peer-reviewed source. Cite primary, not secondary, sources.
Some of the spelling and grammar has been improved, but [spelling?] and [grammar?] tags haven't been removed and other written expression issues remain.
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Comments about the book chapter also apply to this section.
The general emotion theory is insufficiently related to the target topic.
There is too much content, in too much detail, presented within the allocated time frame. Zoom out and provide a higher-level presentation at a slower pace. It is best to do a small amount well than a large amount poorly.
The presentation makes basic use of theory.
The presentation makes good use of research.
The presentation makes excellent/very good/good/basic use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice.
The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies.
A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s).
What are the practical take-home message(s) etc. (this wasn't covered within the time limit).
The presentation makes basic use of text based slides with narrated audio.
Well paced. Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
Excellent intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement.
The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read.
Check and correct grammar.
The visual communication could be improved by including some relevant images.
The chapter title and sub-title are used on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
The chapter title but not the sub-title are used in the name of presentation - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
Audio recording quality was OK.
Visual display quality was basic.
A copyright license for the presentation is not provided.
A link to the book chapter is not provided.
A link from the book chapter is provided.
A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.
