Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Equanimity

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings (or sentence casing). For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:30, 23 August 2020 (UTC)

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Title and sub-title Excellent User page Excellent - used effectively Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Social contribution Excellent - summarised with direct link(s) to evidence. Section headings Overly complex structure - consider simplifying e.g., the focus of the chapter should be on psychological science about equanimity, so religious/philosophical perspectives can be more briefly summarised with links provided to more info. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Key points Use bullet points (see Tutorial 1 - Using Wikiversity) Overview - Consider adding: an image an example or case study Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise generic concepts and provide internal wiki links to further information. Then focus most of the content on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Perhaps consider the personality trait: neuroticism - emotional stability Make sure to cover the best available psychological theory and research about this topic Consider including more examples/case studies. Avoid overcapitalisation (APA style) - more info Direct quotes need page numbers (APA style) - even better, write in your own words. Image Excellent Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References Ideally, build the chapter around peer-reviewed psychological theory and research; other references can be used, but they should be considered supplementary to the core psychological literature For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation None Resources See also Excellent External links Include source site name in brackets after link

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:53, 20 September 2020 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. The main area for potential improvement is the quality of written expression. In particularly, the language can be simplified. Many sentences could be shortened without loss of meaning. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Theory Relevant theories are well selected, described, integrated, and explained. A key strength of this chapter is its theoretical understanding and explanation. Case studies are used effectively. Research There is relatively little direct academic psychological research about this topic. This chapter does a remarkably good job of approaching this by incorporating related topics and offering a critical perspective. Written expression Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is good to very good, with potential to be excellent. The main recommendation is to make the written expression crisper by reducing use of weasel words (e.g., "at this point", "common consensus" -> "consensus") which bulk out the text, but don't enhance meaning. For example, see the these copyedits made to the Conclusion. Nail this skill and you can be an excellent writer. Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Learning features Basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Good use of image(s). Good use of table(s). Very good use of feature box(es). Very good use of quiz(zes). Grammar Use serial commas[1] - it is part of APA style and generally recommended by grammaticists. Here's a 1 min. explanatory video. APA style Figures and tables Refer to each Table and Figure using APA style (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation). Citations use correct APA style. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation. Check and correct use of italicisation. Social contribution ~13 logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 13:59, 10 November 2020 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a reasonably good presentation. Structure and content There is too much content, in too much detail, presented within the allocated time frame. Zoom out and provide a higher-level presentation at a slower pace. It is best to do a small amount well than a large amount poorly. The presentation is well structured. Consider adding and narrating an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. The presentation makes very good use of theory. The presentation makes little to no use of research. The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice. A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s). Communication The presentation is interesting to watch and listen to. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides with narrated audio. Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. Consider reducing the amount of text presented on the screen to make it easier to read and digest. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images. Production quality The video is well produced using simple tools. The chapter title and sub-title are used in both the name of presentation and on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. The chapter title and sub-title are used in the name of the presentation - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. The wording and/or formatting/grammar of the title/sub-title is inconsistent between the name of the video and the opening slide. Audio recording quality was excellent. Visual display quality was very good. Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. Either acknowledge the image sources and their licenses in the video description or remove the presentation. A copyright license for the presentation is provided. A link to the book chapter is provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:44, 23 November 2020 (UTC)