Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Emotion regulation and ageing

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Differences between poor and good ageing[edit source]

It may be interesting to create a table looking at the differences and effects of poor emotional regulation and ageing as well as good emotional regulation and ageing. This will allow a reader to get a good grasp of the importance of maintaining and understanding the topic. --U3187381 (discusscontribs) 08:05, 30 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Feedback[edit source]

Hey, this is looking great. There are some small things that i found while reading. Within the first section about theory, the first sentence seems quite factual and i would suggest adding a reference here. Secondly the section about how to improve emotion regulation later in life is great, however i would suggest to maybe add some links or examples for how the reader can practice this themselves. For example when talking about mindfulness it could be helpful to add a 'pretty box' that has an example of a mindfulness activity. The headspace app could even be helpful for this (https://www.headspace.com/mindfulness). This is if you have the space to fit this into your chapter. Looks really good though! --U3187381 (discusscontribs) 09:34, 17 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]


The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

Title and sub-title[edit source]

  1. Excellent

User page[edit source]

  1. Excellent - used effectively
  2. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. Excellent - summarised with direct link(s) to evidence.

Section headings[edit source]

  1. Remove extra numbering from headings
  2. Keep the background emotion regulation material relatively brief - and link to other related chapters and/or Wikipedia articles. Then concentrate most of the chapter on the relation between ER and ageing.
  3. Reasonably good 2-level heading structure - could benefit from further development of the ER and ageing material.

Key points[edit source]

  1. Overall, well developed.
  2. Writing tip: Trim out superfloud words and cut to the chase - I've changed the beginnings of a few paragraphs by way of example.
  3. Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal wiki links to other book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content of this chapter on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title.
  4. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters.
  5. Consider including more examples/case studies.
  6. Conclusion (the most important section):
    1. what might the take-home, practical messages be?
    2. in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question in the sub-title?

Image[edit source]

  1. Excellent
  2. Cite each figure at least once in the main text.

References[edit source]

  1. OK
  2. For APA referencing style, check and correct:
    1. capitalisation
    2. italicisation

Resources[edit source]

  1. Excellent
  2. See also
    1. Include source in brackets after link
    2. Also link to relevant Wikipedia pages
  3. External links
    1. Very good
    2. Moved to end

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:34, 21 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]


Chapter review and feedback[edit source]

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
  2. The main potential room for improvement is to increase the coverage about emotion regulation for elderly people, so that a lifespan perspective is provided.
  3. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Relevant theories are well selected, described, integrated, and explained.

Research[edit source]

  1. Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is very good.
    2. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead, use section linking.
    3. The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s) and take-home messages.
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
  3. Learning features
    1. Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive.
    2. Basic use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding more in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
    3. Excellent use of image(s).
    4. Good use of table(s).
    5. Excellent use of feature box(es).
    6. Excellent use of quiz(zes).
    7. Very good of case studies or examples.
  4. Grammar, spelling, and proofreading are excellent.
  5. APA style
    1. In general, do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc..
    2. Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10).
    3. Figures and tables
      1. Use APA style for Table captions. See example.
      2. Refer to each Table and Figure using APA style (e.g., check and correct capitalisation).
    4. Citations are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. When there are three or more authors, the citation formatting should be either:
        1. in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or
        2. in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020)
      2. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets.
    5. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Check and correct use of capitalisation.

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. ~30 logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence
  2. Thankyou for your excellent social contributions - much appreciated! Bonus marks added.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:22, 13 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]


Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an excellent presentation.
  2. This presentation makes effective use of Powtoon.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little.
  2. The presentation is well structured.
  3. A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s).

Communication[edit source]

  1. The presentation is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to.
  2. The presentation makes effective use of animated slides with narrated audio.
  3. Well paced. Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
  4. Excellent intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement.
  5. Minor: "We" is over-used.
  6. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read.
  7. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Communicate the chapter title and sub-title in both the video title and on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. The chapter title and sub-title are used in the video title. Very minor - include a colon instead of full-stop.
  3. Use the chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide.
  4. Audio recording quality was excellent.
  5. Visual display quality was excellent.
  6. Image sources and their copyright status are not explicitly provided. Either acknowledge the image sources and their licenses in the video description or remove the presentation.
  7. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.
  8. A link to the book chapter is provided.
  9. A link from the book chapter is provided.
  10. A written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:27, 13 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]