Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Autonomy support and motivation

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Hi, I am working on the chapter titled "Self Determination Theory" focusing on its applications in an educational setting. A large aspect of my theory is autonomy and I have been researching a lot about autonomous motivation. I think our chapters are quite similar and I will be linking your page to mine under the 'internal links section'. Here is a resource that I have found really helpful in explaining autonomy and its relation to increased/decreased motivation: https://selfdeterminationtheory.org/SDT/documents/2000_RyanDeci_SDT.pdf

Hope this helps!! Cheers - u3174052

Suggestions for format[edit source]

Hi there, Your book chapter is looking fantastic - a minor thing I would recommend is putting the Attributes of autonomy-supportive leadership into a table. Information about how to create tables can be found here - Motivation and emotion/Assessment/Chapter/Tables All the best with submission.

Gday, I've found a source that I think might be useful for your topic :) hope it helps you get started:

Feri, R., Soemantri, D., & Jusuf, A. (2016). The relationship between autonomous motivation and autonomy support in medical students’ academic achievement. International Journal of Medical Education, 7, 417–423. https://doi.org/10.5116/ijme.5843.1097

u3175750: 22:23, Sat 29/8/20

Heading casing[edit source]

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for sentence casing. For example, the wikitext should be:

== Cats and mice ==

rather than

== Cats and Mice ==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:29, 18 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]


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Title and sub-title[edit source]

  1. Very good
  2. Capitalisation of the title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents

User page[edit source]

  1. Created
  2. Minimal, but sufficient
  3. About me
  4. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
  5. Link provided to book chapter

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. Summarised with direct link(s) to evidence.

Section headings[edit source]

  1. Basic, 2-level heading structure - could benefit from further development
  2. Aim for 3 to 6 top-level headings between the Overview and Conclus, with up to a similar number of sub-headings for large sections.
  3. See earlier comment about Heading casing.
  4. Separate theory and research sections can work; but also consider developing a more semantic structure which allows for integration of theory and research.
  5. Arguably the most important section will be on fostering autonomy support because this will demonstrate an ability to apply theory and research. Education and workplace applications may sense as two key domains. Consider building out some case studies/examples in these areas.

Key points[edit source]

  1. Use bullet-points (see Tutorial 1 for how-to)
  2. Overview - Consider adding:
    1. an image.
    2. an example or case study.
  3. General development of key points for each section, with relevant citations.
  4. Avoid providing too much background information (e.g., about SDT). Instead, briefly summarise generic concepts and provide internal wiki links to further information. Then focus most of the content on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. So, the theory section should focus more directly on "autonomy support".
  5. Also include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles.
  6. Consider including more examples/case studies.
  7. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section rather than having one longer quiz towards the end.

Image[edit source]

  1. Excellent
  2. Cite each figure at least once in the main text.

References[edit source]

  1. Very good
  2. For APA referencing style, check and correct:
    1. italicisation
    2. doi formatting

Resources[edit source]

  1. Very good
  2. Adjusted to sentence casing

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:29, 18 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]


Chapter review and feedback[edit source]

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
  2. Key strengths are the focus on the topic, explanation of different aspects of theory, integration of research, and use of examples.
  3. The main area for improvement could be the quality of written expression.
  4. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Relevant theories are well selected, described, integrated, and explained.

Research[edit source]

  1. Relevant research is reviewed and discussed in relation to theory.
  2. Table 2 is promising and interesting, but a bit tricky to understand - how could be it be improved?
  3. When describing important research findings, consider indicating the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  4. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is good, but could be improved.
    2. Use 3rd person perspective rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you")[1].
    3. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead, use section linking.
    4. Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in brackets at the end of the sentence.
    5. The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s) and take-home messages.
    6. The chapter would benefit from a more developed Overview and Conclusion, with clearer focus question(s) (Overview)
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
    2. Avoid having sections with only one sub-section.
  3. Learning features
    1. No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive.
    2. Basic use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
    3. Very good use of image(s).
    4. Good use of table(s).
    5. Good use of feature box(es).
    6. Very good use of quiz(zes).
    7. Very good use of case studies or examples.
  4. Grammar
    1. Use serial commas[2] - it is part of APA style and generally recommended by grammaticists.
    2. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[3].
    3. Abbreviations
      1. Check and correct grammatical formatting for abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.).
  5. Proofreading
    1. Remove unnecessary capitalisation (e.g., Physical Education).
  6. APA style
    1. In general, do not capitalize the names of diseases, disorders, therapies, treatments, theories, concepts, hypotheses, principles, models, and statistical procedures.
    2. Use double- rather than single-quote marks for emphasis.
    3. Figures and tables
      1. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets.
      2. Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1).
    4. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Check and correct use of italicisation.

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. ~4 logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:10, 6 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]


Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an excellent, creative, unique presentation.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little.
  2. The presentation is well structured.
  3. Add and narrate an initial title/sub-title slide, to help the viewer understanding the focus and goal of the presentation.
  4. The presentation makes excellent use of theory.
  5. The presentation makes excellent use of research.
  6. The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice.
  7. A Conclusion is presented with take-home message(s).

Communication[edit source]

  1. The presentation is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to.
  2. The presentation makes excellent use of animated drawing-style slides - love it!
  3. Well paced. Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
  4. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read.
  5. The visual communication is superbly supplemented by self-created animation.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. The usability of the video could be improved by exporting to a commonly used video hosting platform such as YouTube or Vimeo.
  2. The video is very well produced.
  3. Include the chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide - to help clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  4. The chapter sub-title but not the title are used in the video title - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  5. Audio recording quality was excellent.
  6. Visual display quality was excellent.
  7. A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the video description but not in the meta-data.
  8. A link to the book chapter is provided.
  9. A link from the book chapter is provided.
  10. A written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:33, 23 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]