Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Antidepressants and motivation

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I would be interested to know the age of when antidepressants are given and if that has an effect of the motivation of the person. So if they are older would they be less motivated to take anitdepressants.(The preceding unsigned comment was added by [[User:{{{1}}}|{{{1}}}]] ([[User talk:{{{1}}}|talk]] • [[Special:Contributions/{{{1}}}|contribs]]) )

Hi there! It may be interesting to discuss how SSRIs can effect people in completely different ways and how that may play into an individual's motivation. For example, how some people may experience weight gain, whereas someone else may experience low arousal. :)--U3190016 (discusscontribs) 13:01, 30 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]

A great topic overall, however there seems to be two hormones you forgot to add details on! --Claireebousfield (discusscontribs) 15:21, 20 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]


The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

Title and sub-title[edit source]

  1. Excellent

User page[edit source]

  1. Created
  2. Minimal, but sufficient
  3. Description about self provided
  4. Add description about self
  5. Link provided to book chapter

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. Use a numbered list.
  2. Summarised with direct link(s) to evidence.

Section headings[edit source]

  1. Under-developed, 1-level heading structure - develop further, perhaps using a 2-level structure for the largest section(s).
  2. Basic, 2-level heading structure
  3. Too much focus on background concepts; too little focus on theory and research about: "What are the effects of popular antidepressants on motivation?"

Key points[edit source]

  1. All sections contain bullet-points
  2. Bullet-points provide sufficient detail, but are somewhat minimalistic
  3. Overview - Consider:
    1. Narrowing more specifically on the sub-title topic
    2. Adding an example or case study
  4. Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise generic concepts and provide internal wiki links to further information. Then focus most of the content on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title.
  5. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters.
  6. Consider including more examples/case studies.
  7. Direct quotes need page numbers; even better, use your own words.

Image[edit source]

  1. An image (figure) is presented.
  2. Caption uses APA style (except check and correct capitalisation).
  3. Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text.
  4. Cite each figure at least once in the main text.

References[edit source]

  1. Good.
  2. For full APA style, use:
    1. correct capitalisation
    2. the new recommended format for dois

Resources[edit source]

  1. Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:49, 12 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Some helpful links[edit source]

1. https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC2989833/ - SSRI effects on motivation 2. https://scholar.google.com.au/scholar?q=antidepressant+effect+on+motivation&hl=en&as_sdt=0&as_vis=1&oi=scholart#d=gs_qabs&u=%23p%3DpB6oiM5RfGAJ - Sexual motivation in male mice 3. https://scholar.google.com.au/scholar?q=antidepressant+effect+on+motivation&hl=en&as_sdt=0&as_vis=1&oi=scholart#d=gs_qabs&u=%23p%3DeiElLdXxUL0J - Antidepressent use effect on action monitoring U3170158 (discusscontribs) 12:33, 13 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Some Idea's[edit source]

Hi,
I suggest that you look into depression's effect on motivation and compare how antidepressants (even if they might numb people) really do help. Depression is a mental illness that really reduces motivation so looking at this relationship and comparing with and without the medication is really interesting. maybe include a graph or two to plot this. Also maybe discuss how antidepressants used to be used with bipolar depression and that effect on motivation. Good luck!
--U3201178 (discusscontribs) 00:23, 15 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Heading casing[edit source]

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example:

Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory

Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:04, 26 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Chapter review and feedback[edit source]

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an insufficient chapter.
  2. This chapter is well under the maximum word count.
  3. Only the 3rd focus question was directly relevant to the topic. The main content consists of too much preliminary background info and too little directly addressing the topic. Effectively, the chapter only starts addressing the topic in the section titled "Antidepressants and motivation", towards the end. There was insufficient information is this section to constitute an adequate Level 3 response to the topic.
  1. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Overall, this chapter makes insufficient use of theory about the relationship between antidepressants and motivation.
  2. There is too much general theoretical material. Instead, summarise and link to further information (such as other book chapters or Wikipedia articles), to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question).

Research[edit source]

  1. Overall, this chapter makes insufficient use of research.
  2. Two relevant studies are discussed; this is an insufficient overview. What are the top dozen or so research-based citations about this topic? Try starting from there.
  3. Explain place preference.
  4. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicating the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  5. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is basic.
    2. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
  2. Layout
    1. See earlier comments about heading casing.
  3. Learning features
    1. Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles.
    2. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
    3. Good use of image(s).
    4. No use of table(s).
    5. Good use of feature box(es).
    6. Basic use of quiz(zes). To improve, focus the questions on the relationship between antidepressants and motivation.
  4. Spelling
    1. Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the [spelling?] tags).
  5. Proofreading
    1. More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard.
    2. Remove unnecessary capitalisation.
  6. APA style
    1. Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc..
    2. Figures and tables
      1. Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1).
    3. Citations are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either:
        1. in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or
        2. in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020)
    4. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Check and correct use of capitalisation.
      2. Check and correct use of italicisation.

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. ~3 logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:04, 26 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Comments on resubmitted book chapter

These revisions were considered. Overall, there were minor to moderate improvements. Changes of note:

  1. Focus questions are much more relevant.
  2. Theory
    1. Relevance of learned helplessness slightly better explained
    2. Place preference now explained
  3. Research
    1. Minor improvements to include brief summaries and citations of more relevant research. The most useful additional was a paragraph about a study about sexual preference motivation in rats when given an AD.
    2. Depression prevalence table added. Not useful as it doesn't address the AD-motivation relationship.
  4. Heading casing now corrected
  5. Theory capitalisation now corrected
  6. APA style:
    1. citations: et al. now used per APA 7th ed.
    2. Figures now referred to in main text
  7. Take-home messages added
  8. Social contributions - 26 useful, minor corrections mostly of spelling and grammar added

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:35, 7 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]


Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an insufficient presentation.
  2. The presentation is under the maximum time limit.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. Comments about the book chapter also largely apply to this section.
  2. An appropriate amount of content is presented - but there is insufficient focus on directly addressing the topic.
  3. Explain place preference - how does it relate to motivation?
  4. Narrate the initial title/sub-title slide, to help the viewer understanding the focus and goal of the presentation.
  5. The presentation makes basic use of theory.
  6. The presentation makes basic use of research.
  7. The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies.
  8. The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages.

Communication[edit source]

  1. Well paced.
  2. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read.
  3. Consider using lower case rather than upper case (which can be perceived as SHOUTING).
  4. The visual communication is supplemented by one image. Consider using higher resolution to make the images easier to read.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. The video is basically produced using simple tools.
  2. Hide the audio icon.
  3. The chapter title and sub-title are used in both the name of presentation and on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  4. Audio recording quality was OK. Probably an on-board microphone was used. Consider using an external microphone.
  5. Visual display quality was basic.
  6. Image sources and their copyright status are acknowledged. Include a direct link and license details for the image.
  7. A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the video description but not in the meta-data.
  8. A link to the book chapter is provided.
  9. A link from the book chapter is provided.
  10. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:16, 26 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]