Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Ventral tegmental area and motivation and emotion

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Hi, This is an interesting journal article that looks at reduced VTA-Hippocampal connectivity in children and adolescents exposed to early threat being related to vulnerability to stress-related disorders.

I am always fascinated with this kind of topic. I am looking forward on your research regarding VTA and emotions, especially, the treatment of the dysfunction. I am also going to touch some of the functions of the brain as I will talk about Reward Circuitry. Perhaps something to read about regarding the developmental and generic syndrome that discusses VTA: U3165244

--[[User:Matthewshats97|Matthewshats97]] (discusscontribs) 22:58, 1 September 2019 (UTC)

Heading casing[edit source]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings (or sentence casing). For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:03, 17 September 2019 (UTC)

Topic development feedback[edit source]

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

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Title and sub-title[edit source]

  1. Good
  2. Capitalisation of the title/sub-title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents
  3. A section should contain either 0 or 2+ sub-sections - avoid having sections which contain 1 sub-section.

User page[edit source]

  1. Created, with description about self and link to book chapter

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. Use a numbered list
  2. Well described contribution; use correct capitalisation in APA style references.

Section headings[edit source]

  1. Basic, 1-level heading structure - could benefit from further development, perhaps using a 2-level structure.

Key points[edit source]

  1. There is some inconsistent capitalisation.
  2. Overview
    1. Consider re-expressing the important points as grammatically correct focus questions
    2. What are the implications/applications to improving the quality of our motivational and emotional lives?
  3. Role
    1. This general section can be relatively brief, with links e.g., to Wikipedia articles for further info. The will allow more space for considering the M&E aspects of the VTA.
  4. Basic key points are provided, with no citations.
  5. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles.
  6. Consider including more examples/case studies.
  7. Consider including other learning features such as feature boxes or quiz questions.

Image[edit source]

  1. Well used.
  2. Consider increasing image size for diagrams which use small font

References[edit source]

  1. Included, but not cited.
  2. For full APA style:
    1. Use correct capitalisation
    2. Use correct italicisation
    3. Use the new recommended format for dois -
    4. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume

Resources[edit source]

  1. See also
    1. Use bullet-points
    2. Rename links so that they are more user friendly
  2. External links
    1. Use bullet-points
    2. Rename the links

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:03, 17 September 2019 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback[edit source]

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via UCLearn Canvas, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
  2. This chapter is well under/over the maximum word count.
  3. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits.
  4. Excellent Overview.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained.

Research[edit source]

  1. Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is excellent.
    2. The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s) and take-home messages.
    3. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
    4. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned").
    5. Use third person perspective rather than first person (e.g., "we") or second person (e.g., "you") perspective.
  2. Layout
    1. Avoid having sections with only one sub-section.## Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
  1. Learning features
    1. Basic use of interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive.
    2. No use of embedded links to related book chapters. Embedding links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
    3. Excellent use of images.
    4. No use of tables. Figure 3 should be a table. Tables can be created within Wikiversity.
    5. Basic use of feature boxes.
    6. Basic use of quizzes.
    7. Useful case studies or examples.
    8. Use bullet-points and numbered lists, per Tutorial 1, for See also and External links (done).
  2. Grammar
    1. The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags) by checking and making correct use of commas - commas have been used in some places where they aren't needed.
    2. Use serial commas[1] - it is part of APA style and generally recommended by grammaticists.
    3. Abbreviations
      1. Abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.) should only be used inside parentheses.
  3. Spelling
    1. Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour; fulfillment vs. fulfilment).
  4. APA style
    1. Figures and tables
      1. Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1).
    2. Citations are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. A serial comma is needed before "&" or "and" for citations involving three or more authors.
    3. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Check and correct use of capitalisation.
      2. See new doi format.

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. ~13 logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:45, 20 November 2019 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Canvas site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.


Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a very good presentation.
  2. This presentation makes effective use of simple tools.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little.
  2. The presentation is well structured.
  3. What are the practical take-home message(s) that we can use to help improve our everyday lives?

Communication[edit source]

  1. The presentation is interesting to watch and listen to.
  2. Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
  3. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides with narrated audio.
  4. Some of the font size should be larger to make it easier to read.
  5. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Audio recording quality was OK - there was some distortion and loudness at the start of each slide. Review microphone set-up.
  2. Visual display quality was OK.
  3. Image sources and their copyright status are indicated, but in a general sense. Ideally, provide the location and license for each image within the presentation or in the video description.
  4. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.
  5. A link to the book chapter is provided.
  6. A link from the book chapter is provided.
  7. A brief written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:37, 20 November 2019 (UTC)