Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Stress and diet

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Heading casing[edit source]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings (or sentence casing). For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:54, 28 September 2019 (UTC)

Comments[edit source]

Just wanted to flag the above feedback which James listed on another chapter. --DaleHulm (discusscontribs) 16:02, 1 September 2019 (UTC)

It may be beneficial to expand more on the environmental factors of stress and diet. Really look forward to reading the chapter! - [[1]]

Hi, this research my be useful: Obesity-related oxidative stress: the impact of physical activity and diet manipulation: Chun-Jung Huang., Matthew J. McAllister., Aaron L. Slusher., Heather E. Webb., J. Thomas MockEdmund., & O. Acevedo (2015). --U3173638 (discusscontribs) 03:24, 1 September 2019 (UTC)

Hi, hope you're going well on the book chapter. Thought you might find this journal article useful: https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC5012221/

--Matthewshats97 (discusscontribs) 18:00, 10 October 2019 (UTC)

Topic development feedback[edit source]

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Title and sub-title[edit source]

  1. OK
  2. Capitalisation of the title/sub-title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents

User page[edit source]

  1. Created, with description about self and link to book chapter

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. Summarised with links to evidence

Section headings[edit source]

  1. Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic.
  2. See earlier comment about Heading casing.
  3. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
  4. Avoid providing too much background information. Instead, briefly summarise generic concepts and provide internal wiki links to further information. Then the focus of most of the content can be on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title.

Key points[edit source]

  1. Key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations.
  2. Overview - Consider adding focus questions.
  3. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles.
  4. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section rather than having one longer quiz towards the end.

Image[edit source]

  1. An image (figure) is presented.
  2. Caption uses APA style.
  3. Caption explains how the image connects to key points being made in the main text.
  4. Cite each figure at least once in the main text.
  5. Consider increasing image size from default.

References[edit source]

  1. OK.
  2. Not presented in APA style.

Resources[edit source]

  1. Very good

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:54, 28 September 2019 (UTC)


Chapter review and feedback[edit source]

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
  2. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits.

Theory[edit source]

  1. A good range of relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained.

Research[edit source]

  1. Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory.
  2. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  3. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is very good.
    2. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned").
    3. Use third person perspective rather than first person (e.g., "we") or second person (e.g., "you") perspective.
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
  3. Learning features
    1. For numbered lists, use Wikiversity formatting per Tutorial 1.
    2. Basic use of images. Some images were removed due to lack of copyright information.
    3. Excellent use of interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive.
    4. No use of embedded links to related book chapters. Embedding interwiki links links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
    5. Basic use of tables. Add APA style caption.
    6. Good use of feature boxes. Increase width.
    7. Excellent use of quizzes. Increase width.
    8. Very good use of case studies or examples.
  4. Grammar
    1. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[2].
  5. APA style
    1. Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10).
    2. Citations are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. In-text citations should be in alphabetical order.
    3. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Remove "Retrieved from (date)".
      2. See new doi format.

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. ~7 logged, useful, social contributions with indirect links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:35, 14 November 2019 (UTC)


Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a reasonably good presentation.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. Add and narrate a Title slide, to help the viewer understanding the focus and goal of the presentation.
  2. Add and narrate an Overview slide, to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered.
  3. Reasonably well selected and structured content - but the presentation focuses initially on stress rather than stress and diet.
  4. A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s), although the message is somewhat vague.

Communication[edit source]

  1. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides with narrated audio.
  2. Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
  3. Some of the font size should be larger to make it easier to read.
  4. The visual communication is supplemented by images.
  5. The voice over is generally good, with some hesitations.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. The full chapter title and sub-title are used in the video title - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. Use the full chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  3. Audio and video recording quality are very good.
  4. Image sources are mentioned.
  5. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.
  6. A link to the book chapter is provided.
  7. A link from the book chapter is provided.
  8. A written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:33, 15 November 2019 (UTC)