Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Social affective sharing and emotion regulation

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Therapy approach for emotion regulation[edit source]

Hi, I am doing psychological flexibility and emotional health, and a big part of my research has been acceptance and commitment therapy (ACT). I think researching this would be a good addition to your topic to do with emotion regulation.

--U3174128 (discusscontribs) 06:29, 19 October 2019 (UTC)U3174128

Heading casing[edit source]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings (or sentence casing). For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 19:34, 28 September 2019 (UTC)

Topic development feedback[edit source]

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

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Title and sub-title[edit source]

  1. Capitalisation and content of the title/sub-title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents

User page[edit source]

  1. Created, with description about self
  2. Add link to book chapter

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. None summarised with links to evidence.

Section headings[edit source]

  1. Overly complicated 3-level structure - consider simplifying and developing as a 2-level structure.
  2. Remove bold
  3. Standard recommended sections have been added
  4. See earlier comment about Heading casing.

Key points[edit source]

  1. Basic development.
  2. Lack of citation of peer-reviewed sources.
  3. Overview - Consider adding focus questions.
  4. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters.
  5. Consider introducing a case study in the Overview.
  6. Consider including more examples/case studies.
  7. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section.

Image[edit source]

  1. None presented

References[edit source]

  1. Obviously lack of consultation of peer-reviewed literature; over-reliance on textbooks

Resources[edit source]

  1. See also
    1. Also link to relevant book chapters
  2. External links
    1. 1 included

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 19:34, 28 September 2019 (UTC)

Theories and Research[edit source]

Hey, Great start to your chapter! I'm working on Affect regulation theory (ART) and there are a few theories that would go well with emotion regulation such as regulation theory, emotion regulation theory and self-regulation theory.

Goodluck with your book chapter!

Thanks u3096756

--Quinopop (discusscontribs) 04:53, 14 October 2019 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback[edit source]

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via UCLearn Canvas, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this chapter does a reasonably good job of applying psychological theory and research to a real-world phenomenon, but it is undermined by the poor quality of written expression.
  2. The chapter could benefit from further development of the Overview and Conclusion - it should be possible to only read these sections and get a good sense of why the topic is important and what is known/recommended.
  3. This chapter is well under the maximum word count.
  4. For additional feedback, see following comments and these copyedits.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained.
  2. The latter part of the chapter focuses on emotional regulation, but this doesn't seem to be related to social affective sharing?
  3. There is some over-reliance on textbooks such as Reeve (2018). textbook is overused as a citation - instead, utilise primary, peer-reviewed sources.

Research[edit source]

  1. Overall, this chapter provides a good overview of relevant research.
  2. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  3. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful.
  4. Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the [factual?] tags).

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is poor.
    2. The chapter would benefit from a more developed Overview and Conclusion, with clearer focus question(s) (Overview) and take-home self-help message for each focus question (Conclusion).
  2. Layout
    1. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
    2. See earlier comments about heading casing.
  3. Learning features
    1. Use bullet-points and numbered lists, per Tutorial 1.
    2. Use in-text interwiki links, rather than external links.
    3. Very basic use of interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive.
    4. No use of embedded links to related book chapters. Embedding links links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
    5. Basic use of images.
    6. Good use of tables.
    7. Good use of feature boxes.
    8. Basic use of quizzes.
    9. The quiz questions could be more effective as learning prompts by being embedded as single questions within each corresponding section rather than being presented as a set of questions at the end.
    10. Consider including case studies or examples.
  4. Grammar
    1. The grammar for many sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags).
  5. APA style
    1. Figures and tables
      1. Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1).
    2. Citations are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets.
      2. A serial comma is needed before "&" or "and" for citations involving three or more authors.
    3. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Check and correct use of capitalisation.
      2. Check and correct use of italicisation.
      3. See new doi format.

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. No logged social contributions

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:43, 21 November 2019 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Canvas site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.


Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a basic presentation.
  2. This presentation makes use of simple tools.
  3. The presentation is over the maximum time limit - content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking purposes.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. Many of the comments about the book chapter theory and research also apply here.
  2. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little.
  3. The presentation is well structured.
  4. Add and narrate an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered.
  5. A Conclusion slide is presented.
  6. What are the practical take-home message(s) that we can use to help improve our everyday lives?

Communication[edit source]

  1. The presentation is pedestrian.
  2. The presentation makes use of text and image based slides with narrated audio.
  3. Well paced.
  4. Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement.
  5. Some of the font size should be larger to make it easier to read.
  6. The visual communication is supplemented by images.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. The example (slide 2) is shown too quickly for a viewer to digest without pausing.
  2. The chapter title but not the sub-title are used in the video title - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  3. The chapter title and sub-title are used on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  4. Audio recording quality was very quiet - review microphone set-up.
  5. Visual display quality was basic.
  6. Image sources and their copyright status are not provided.
  7. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.
  8. A link to the book chapter is provided.
  9. A link from the book chapter is provided.
  10. A written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:58, 21 November 2019 (UTC)

Hello! I edited your book chapter following some advice posted by your tutor! --U3160224 (discusscontribs) 08:24, 9 October 2020 (UTC)